Dinky D. Hooves loves her mother to death. She would never consider moving in with any other mare, but she get very upset when the other ponies make fun of her or her mommy just because she's different. She tries her best to show everypony how smart she is. She really likes it when Mommy calls her smart, too. But when Derpy has to leave for a little while, will Dinky have to spend the rest of her foal-hood with Ms. Sparkle and her friends, or will Mommy get back in time for Dinky to be able to see her mommy once more?
Chapters (22)
1564308 yeah, i did that to sort of give people the thought that people may seem wise and kind, but people are not always the way they seem. Sometimes we need to accept the way that people are and just find someone who can see it your way.
I LOVE IT, ADD MOAR!!!
1579840 new chapters every day!
Hey readers!
Just wanted to let you all know that Chapter Eleven (Chapter Twelve, according the the little chapter counter thing on the bottom
) is NOT the end of the story. Keep reading. I promise, you won't be disappointed! 
Oh my goodness I am loving this story but umm it needs some minor edits nothing too much but just a little bit there are some formatting errors but they are not noticeable and it needs spaced out but besides that I love the story so keep up the great work
~TwilightxDashie~
Wow I dont know why you have more dislikes than likes this is such a great story eargar to watch u and read the new updates when they come out I will admit there are some parts I almost cried almost hopefully it wont be sadder than my little dashie cause I dont think I could handle dinky going through something like that
I'm gonna give you thumbs up cuz i like the story but i am seeing a few problems that bother me.
1 there seems to be space between chapters, its like reading a diary except i don't have all the pages so theres days missing so I have to assume that nothing happened but i find it hard to believe seeing as the story is about a character coping with day to day life with out her mother in the picture and having to live with an almost complete stanger
2 there's a lot of character jumping. first I'm following dinky then I'm following twilight but the twilight section is in first person (which confused me cuz i thought the story was suppose to be from dinky's perspective not twilight's) I need clarification on this so i can understand the story better
3 There may be miner spelling errors nothing major ( i cant remember right now)
4 the chapters are kinda short
5 (this is for my own benefit) I don't understand why neither twilight nor dinky mentioned derpy being taken away when Celestia came to ponyville . I would imagine that Twilight would say something and seeing as how Dinky was ready to walk out on twilight and even gave her a deadline for when she would be leaving, I can't imagine her not saying anything or at the very least asking if Celestia heard Dinky's prayer( if I was a kid and i prayed to a supreme being and that being showed up I would think that she was here to help me but maybe that's just me)
I like that Dinky did in fact leave although i find it hard to believe that Twilight upset or not would just let dinky go out in a snow storm especially without any cloths on.
I also like golden chakra and her brother and their back-stories I think that there should be more of them
1593594 thank you for the compliments! I'm just going to go over a couple of things really quick to shed some light on these statements you made:
Since Dinky is only a little filly, I sometimes have trouble building off of what I write. So I thought about how some of my favorite books (Like Maximum Ride, for example) switched perspectives a lot to sort of give more detail on the character's thoughts. I thought it was kind of hard to build the story just off of Dinky's thoughts. So I figured it would make it slightly easier on me to write from different perspectives. I understand that it might be hard to comprehend some of the switching, but I'm just going to let you in on a little hint: (this isn't meant to sound sarcastic at all, I'm genuinely trying to help)
The ones that are from Dinky's perspective kind of work differently since its from third person but yet still worded as if that is what she was saying. If you have read Bubbles, you would remember that it had the similar point of view, with slightly-childish wording but it isn't necessarily from Derpy's perspective.
XD
The point of view that says "I" or "Me" is always going to be Twilight. I don't ever plan on changing the first person view to Golden Chakra or Valiant Literature, because I know that a few readers are already confused as it is. I apologize for the confusion, but this is how I would like my stories to be if I were reading them. (I watch a lot of anime, and I know that in anime they do A LOT of change of perspective to shed some light on some back-stories)
The third person point of view that seems slightly more intelligent would be based either vaguely or mainly around Chakra and Lit. I don't like putting slightly childish perspectives because I don't know how to "speak kid", if you understand what I mean. Writing, that is. I can relate to kids fairly well in real life, but I don't ever (and I mean EVER) plan on writing children stories. It's too hard for me.
And I know about the whole "Spacing out the paragraphs" thing. believe me, some guy was non-stop criticizing my work when his grammar was, frankly, lacking if not non-existent, if you know what I mean.
however, I know that after I looked over what I had written what he meant, he just went about it the wrong way, making me sound and look like an idiot. But I promise you, each chapter will get better in grammar, I promise. (I'm a grammar nazi, so I often correct grammar of my friends on FaceBook, which often results in them going like this: 
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And that last part I actually would like to discuss; I actually try to build Dinky's character as being slightly shy. Not necessarily Fluttershy-shy, but more like the kind of character who doesn't like to draw too much attention to themselves (on purpose). So when it came to Celestia appearing, I decided to not let so much information come to mind so early in the story. I often wait a few chapters whenever I write something to let something big and interesting happen. And since it was Celestia herself who decided to take Derpy away from Dinky, I was hoping people would be able to assume that Celestia got her prayer but ignored it because she didn't feel like Derpy was a fit parent, nad you can guess the rest.
I dont personally hate Princess Celestia, I just felt like making her look like one of those ponies who is afraid of ponies who are unlike "normal" ponies.
Hints about the story: (for anyone who's interested!
)
Golden Chakra is a pony to represent Buddhism of the 7 chakras. Golden Chakra represents the Solar Plexus Chakra, which is represented by the color yellow. Feel free to google the Solar Plexus Chakra for more information
Think about the title "Derpy's Return" for a second. ;)
Amazing story so far keep it up please
1586906 Don't worry; I'm fully aware there are a few grammatical errors, but with each chapter I plan to keep an eye on my grammar and pay attention to constructive (and polite) criticisms. I am a grammar nazi however, as I've mentioned before, so I don't take grammar too lightly. If there is a grammatical error, it is either caused by me not paying attention or that I don't know what went wrong. (Ha, see what I did there?
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Don't worry, I'm aware of my mistakes! Multiple people have already brought that to my attention, so just ignore the errors please and enjoy the story!
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thanks for the clarification and to be honest the story is understandable so i don't care to much about the grammar.
1586939 Thank you very much! I'm actually almost tempted to disable the likes/dislikes if i am able to, because then people will think it's bad, and i don't think it's really all that bad, you guys don't think it's bad, so why should others think it's bad? But nontheless, I'm happy that i hjave fans who like the story, and I'm happy about that becasue i like it too!
Good job cant wait till next update fore some reason it didnt tell me there were updates ubtiill I came back to ur page dont think it was the best 2 chapters but it got good aat the end
Ohhh cant wait for next chapter this just got really good
OH, goody. Celestia is going to get a face-full of angry blue alicorn.
Sorry that this chapter's so short...
I felt like this chapter didn't really need a lot of explanation and writing, so i decided to just make it sort of an "extra chapter". However you would need to read it in order to understand the next one, so...
I guess in short, this chapter is more of a "clean up". Gettting things back together; Dinky away from DErpy, Twilight, Spike and Dinky reunited, etc. Just getting things back to normal!
No it cant end this early the show must go on what happen to the 50000 words
It's finished! ;_; Oh how I love a happy ending!!
Here's a little project for all you readers; I would like you all to comment on what you think will happen later in the future for Derpy, Dinky and Valiant Literature! Maybe I'll do another short story the really ends the story there, and puts all the cards on the table.
idk maybe the next story will be in bettween her getting married and when she got home you should also make it sad reallllllll sad
It was kind of meh to me for she kind of insults twilight in that last part for no real reason.
why do i feel something sad is about to happen?
1802973 Nov Nov Month ended, so i couldn't hopld the story much longer. I'm sorry...
But i had other ideas, and i felt there wasn't much left i could do with the story....
Please don't hate me!
1868836 She didn't insult her, i was meaning for her to say that she thought she'd never see her mother again.
Lyra? Blue? You mean green.
One of the best stories I've ever read.