3. Jaw meet Floor, Floor meet Luna
Canterlot Castle: 1 minute prior to Sweetie getting her Cutie Mark
Princess Celestia was, yet again, entertaining her spoiled nephew, Prince BlueBlood, as he went off on why Ponyville should be put under martial law and the Elements of Harmony locked into the dungeons below. ‘Oh if only I was a better ruler I would banish this spoiled brat to the moon, or better yet some faraway star.’
Normally if all she had to do was listen to Blueblood rattle on and on she would be happy, but this day had been downright dreadful. To say she had a bad day at court would be an understatement. Normally the “evils” of court was split up by some of her little ponies coming in to ask her to bless their wedding or unborn child. Unfortunately today none had come so the little bit of time she truly enjoyed about court was missing, which unfortunately gave Celestia a very bad day.
At this point she focused back on Blueblood who was still going on about how Ponyville could be stripped of all land ownership and how the Everfree could be turned into one of the largest exporters of Fine wood products. Bad Luck decided it picked on her enough though.
Suddenly Celestia felt something she hadn’t felt in a very long time, well not that long in her standards, nevertheless it had been over 15 years since this sensation overcame her. It felt like a wave of power radiated over her. This wave carried a hint of peace like everything was right in the world and as Celestia knew something indeed was very, very right.
Not 10 seconds passed before a deep blue flash darkened the room. Blueblood fell backwards in shock while Celestia just turned to the source. “Good evening sister. You felt it as well I take it? One moment please.” She stated turning to Blueblood. “Sorry to cut your presentation on how getting rid of Ponyville would help the world but something of importance has arisen and it will need to be seen to immediately.” Blueblood noted a tone of urgency and bid a hasty farewell before exiting.
Within seconds of Blueblood leaving Celestia had erected a sound barrier around the courtroom and turned back to Princess Luna. “You felt the wave of harmony pass by as well I take it?”
Luna had a very foal like grin on her face, which Celestia took to mean she was excited by the prospect of a new Alicorn. “I most certainly did Tia. I do hope it’s a new Alicorn the only other one in existence is off in the Crystal Empire most likely giving my night a very naughty show.” Luna had just recently perfected modern equestrian which Celestia was immensely grateful for.
“I do hope you give them some privacy or else she might just learn of some of your ‘activities’.” A predator like gaze shifted to Luna momentarily before the forever passive happy face everyone sees slipped back in place. Luna paled a bit at the threat.
“Oh of course not, dear sister. I would never spy on the only other Alicorn in existence like that.” Luna stated with a very guilty grin on her face. Quickly trying to draw attention away from her extracurricular activities Luna intercepted her sister’s next sentence. “Maybe we should try and find where this wave of harmony originated? I am sure you would love to know what started it.” Luna knew her sister had an insatiable appetite for knowledge.
At this Celestia’s face shifted into a small smile, this one not the passive mask that she wears eternally, but a genuine one that indicated she was indeed wondering where the wave had originated. “You didn’t happen to notice the direction it came from did you Luna?” At her sister’s denial Celestia continued. “Unfortunately neither did I.” It was late, by Celestia’s standards, she had set the sun about 2 hours ago and she would normally be in bed. Her headache, from the long and exasperating day, still hung to her and she just wanted to get some rest. “Luna I am exhausted. In my current state I don’t think I could help you find the source even if I tried. I will leave you to track the wave while I retire.” Without much time to argue Celestia dispelled the Soundproofing and turned to exit. Luna just stared into the space Celestia had occupied a moment ago pondering what her next move would be.
The following morning Celestia found the headache she had to be completely gone and with the issue of the newest wave she was able to call off all meetings for the day and focus only on the task of finding the source of the wave. After convening with Luna on what she learned, which was nothing, Celestia knew that if anything she could find something in her private study. It was, after all, where she kept all of the information she had collected over her long life about harmony and its effects on the populace.
Celestia knew that it wasn’t just Alicorns that could create a wave of harmony there was actually two other occurrences that she could think of off the top of her head. One had occurred 15 years ago when she had found Twilight. The wave she was able to pinpoint had come from two directions one from manehatten and one from right in Canterlot. The wave that started in Canterlot had been from Twilight herself when the Element of Magic had attuned itself to her and the other had been from the combined forces of the other elements attuning to their respective holder.
The other occurrence had been when a Harmony Dragon had ascended into its magical state. That had been several thousand years ago though. They were even rarer than Alicorns; well the ones that ascended were at least. Celestia had found that most Harmony Dragons only ever chose a pony or griffon as their mate so while it might be a Harmony Dragon isn’t named one until it ascends which is why as of recently none had appeared. No dragons ever fell in love with a pony or griffon anymore.
‘Let’s see here’ Celestia thought to herself as she started pulling books from the shelf. ‘We have the book on dragons that I wrote 400 years ago. The Ascension of Alicorns, that one was by Starswirl. Ahh and here is the last one the Flow of Harmony. These three books should help me track down what caused the wave of harmony that passed over Equestria recently.
No sooner did she let the books rest on her desktop, a green flame coalesced into a scroll before her face. Knowing this was too much to be a coincidence Celestia quickly unraveled the scroll and learned of what had occurred in Ponyville. As she read her pupils shrank to pinpricks. Grabbing a sheet of paper from off of her table she quickly scribbled a note to Twilight explaining what page to find the information on. She didn’t even care that it lacked the royal seal as she quickly sent the book and letter on the way.
Nanoseconds later she was falling 2 feet from the air above Luna. “LUNA WAKE UP!!!” The volume just short of the Royal Canterlot Voice knocked, the still in shock, Alicorn from her bed.
“I’m up!!!” Luna whimpered as she pulled herself from the floor “What could possibly be important enough to wake me from my slumber?”
Celestia, with a knowing smile, answered in an excited tone. “Why a new Prince Harmony Dragon that’s what.” Luna’s jaw came oddly close to the floor. Unfortunately that was before her eyes rolled into the back of her head and she hit it herself.
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Ok new chapter up. Its shorter than the others but thats because I really couldn't think of much else to put. I always read these stories about how Celestia never knows how another alicorn appeared.. even though she is often portrayed as an all seeing goddess in said stories. So I made it so she knew something happed but didn't know where. Made sense to me. That and i wanted to make Luna, even though she is tied for best pony, faint.
1496551 And anouther one gets hooked.
Now everyone sees why i ended the first chapter with that line. You don't read chapter one hit that ending and stop you must continue.
So, can any dragon become a harmony dragon or are they just born as a different kind of dragon?
Also, when Celestia is thinking over how a harmony dragon ascends, she made it sound like they only ascend when they fall in love with a pony or griffon. Is that right?
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From what I gathered, they only ascend when they find their mate; dragon, pony, griffon, probably any creature.
I am wondering if they felt the wave of harmony from the ascension of Spike along with Sweetie Belle becoming an alicorn?
Other than some grammatical errors, awesome story!
Had to read it twice, and already craving more!
1499000 Only specific dragons become Harmony Dragons and they naturally are calmer around well everyone. They are just plain rare to begin with its just that even if more than 1 had been born there hasn't been any that have ascended.
As for your second question. Yep they can't tell the differnece in waves so when they occured at the same time they had no differnce between them.
Luna is down for the count.
Ok. Just a few critiques. I love the concept and where you are heading with it, but it feels a bit rushed. Take your time with this, especially when editing. You have a lot of grammar mistakes and those can be easily eliminated with repeated checks or a proof reader or two. The story is also moving along at a very fast pace. I would urge you to take your time with the development of your characters and the plot. I love the Spike and Sweetie pairing but I think you are moving too quickly. Just a few thoughts. Anyway, great story. Watching to see where it goes. Keep up the good work.
1504022 Well yeah i plan on it. I felt the first 3 chapters were fast paced a bit to much. I just couldn't come up with something to slow it down.
Now I have a proofreader going over these chapters right now and when they are done and worked on a bit more I will be continuing on. I am glad for the positive response I got so i will be working on making it the best it can be.
And slowing down.
1504179 Awesome!
Well I truly am digging the story. Can't wait for more.
Good good
Now enjoy Jim carrey at his..carriest
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Short chapter and I must say, great nonetheless!! Anyways there were a few errors throughout but it wasn't the grammar itself more as the structure of the sentences, that is to say you had misplaced words and an extreme lack of commas to separate your sentence. No real thought on what the next chap may hold my brain is writing off the top of my head right now. Chow Bennet out.
Ok so chapter 1-3 is going through heavy edits well more like heavy proofreading.
Chapter 2 will be revamped to seem easier to read and to make the work on Harmony Dragons easier to understand.
Chapter 4 will be written soon and will be proofread before release.. I hope.
I hope Chapter 4 is almost done
It is. Almost. then 5 should be out soon after that.
1620961 I trust that chapter four is going well
1725188 I wish... I have the basis of what the next around 10 to 15 chapters SHOULD be about but getting the finer details in the story so it doesn't seem to be going at mach 8 and just rush trhough the story is taking me a while. I am working on wording and slowing my pace. I have re writen chapter 4 3 times so far just to slow down the pacing and I think the one I am working on right now is going to be a lot better than the pacing of the last 3.
1726205 well thats fine im just making sure you haven't given up on it
Yesa
Okay. I'm sorry, I cannot read any more of this. I understand that this is your first story, but. . .
The characters are all out of, well, character. Sweetie Belle has been cast in the original show as a bit more naive, so there is little evidence to show that she would voluntarily come up to Spike (Apparently having spent lots of time around him which has never been implied) and confess her feelings. Besides, there is little chance that a schoolfilly's feelings for a young dragon could be more powerful than what Spike feels for Rarity. There are quite a few grammar mistakes, Sweetie's sudden and unreasonable ascension to Alicorn-hood makes no sense, Twilight would have conducted far more tests before letting Spike use his magic, much less make Rarity in charge of teaching him. "Harmony Dragons" have a strong connection to their emotions, correct? Spike would have been too emotionally unstable to do magic if he was around Rarity.
...or should i say, suddenly-horny-Rarity? What the hell is that about? She may be a fan of Canterlot Nobles but he's a prince only by a technical term, not truly royal because Spike probably has no clue what he's even doing.
And now we're on the subject called Celestia. "If I were a better ruler, I would have-" Really? She has far more patience than that, and if she didn't know what type of dragon Spike was then how did she know exactly where to look? Celestia of all ponies, goddess or not, would know what type of dragon Spike was. Between her and Twilight, not knowing his breed could prove dangerous. Luna fainting? Huh. You'd think after what we've seen of her in the show that she'd have a far more level head, hmm? I would list more of the flaws in this, but as I said...
I can't read any more.
This needs some work and I'll be wiling to do so if u'd like
What is wrong with them?