I am Matthais Unidostres, I'm a Christian and I love FanFiction!
Lauren Faust is upset about all the Grimdark and Gore filled FanFics, so she decides to end it all by destroying the world she created. However, a certain character from a certain FanFic plans on using her to get a little revenge of her own.
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I like it. I expect this story will go far.
So Lauren Faust fights grimdark by going grimdark on her creations, effectively making her no better than what she's fighting?
For that matter, what about clop? It's generally considered far worse than the grimdark.
This also needs a thorough proofreading: there are numerous dialogue attribution errors and indentation derps, among other issues.
The formatting in the header detailing all your "sources" is very spotty and cluttered.
Did you get permission from those other fic authors, by chance? I'm guessing not.
Interesting. Some parts seemed maybe a little rushed and a little far-fetched, but overall not a bad concept.
Now, if you'll excuse me, I'll go read all those grimdarks you cited.
The idea was very interesting. However the way it was executed left me feeling
It became too silly when Faust began pulling out shades of other worlds, it should have been a dark moment filled with conflict but it just made me cringe at the ridiculousness of it (especially the scootaloo/harmony thing part). The mane 6 and the princesses seemed out of character and their dialogue was awkward, I found it hard to believe anyone would say some of the things they did during a life and death struggle for their world. Overall it lacked emotion, pacing, good character portrayal and a threatening antagonist.
Try to focus less on making the battles flashy and focus more on the turmoil amongst the protagonists as they help each other overcome the evil Faust throws at them. The moral seemed to be that their friendship could overcome any challenge but it was really downplayed and if it wasn't for them saying it all the time I would not have even noticed. Don't rush through to try and keep the action going nonstop because it gets boring and I had to refrain myself from just skimming over parts just to find out how it all panned out. With some help and planning this could easily be a very good story. However in its current state I would sum it up as 'meh'
Uh... what he said. ↑
I read the fight while listening to Gurren Lagann music, specifically the Tengen Toppa edition of Sorairo Days. It made the fight 900% more awesome, as Gurren Lagann does everything.
Huh... I just noticed this, and how a small piece of story story was used. Wasn't expecting this...
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This is awesome. It is such a wonderfull depictation of the darkest sides of the fandom and the greatest parts of it. It shows such a diversity. But still Lauren was foolish. I am so glad that they defeated Harmony. I knew some of the fanfics and I love all these allusions to other works.
I wonder which side of the battle fallout: equestria would've been on
See Vimbert's comment, really. A further problem for a reader in 2017 is that some of the sources are now virtually forgotten: come on, when did anyone last mention White Demure? Luna yelling "CEASE AND DESIST!" was funny, but the bonus song at the end is wildly out of place in a ponyfic. So, um, yeah.
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Lil pip would so just watch