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    Immortality can at times be a double edged sword. Celestia recalls past memories of dear students.
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  • 86w, 5d
    In Search for an Editor

    Hello everyone!

    First off, I'd like to say thanks a whole bunch to everyone following my story, Lodestar. I really hope you're all enjoying it so far! Now, onto the point of this post. I'm in need of an editor for Lodestar. Someone to read each chapter before proofing and publishing. I'm looking for someone willing to give honest feedback, suggestions, thoughts, and to spot anything I myself have possibly missed. Now, I really want to stress, I am looking for an editor and NOT a proofreader. The technical aspect of my chapters can be ignored as I have a very capable and awesome proofer with one of my good friends. So even if you're not the best at grammar, it's okay. So anybody willing to work together with me, please feel free to leave a comment below or send a PM! I'll reply when I can and see how we can make things work from there.

    Again, I'm looking for an editor and not a proofreader. Thank you so much!

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  • 98w, 4d
    Just a few things...

    Hello everybody! I’ve got a few things I’d like to cover here really quickly.

    Fist of all, the episode “Magic Duel” will be affecting Lodestar in order so it can stay as close to canon as possible. This means anything in the past and any future story points will be changed to reflect the events from any episode Trixie has been a part of. On another, but similar, note, anything new from season 3 will also be taken accounted for as well.

    I would also like to talk about my very first fanficton, “My Dearest Students”. As most of you probably wouldn’t know, I haven’t updated it in months. And for this, I’d like to apologize to all of its readers. I’d like to also thank any of those readers that stuck to it for so long, even to this point, if there is anybody still out there. Also, I’d like to say this. Being my first piece of creative writing it holds a special place in my heart. I will be completing it one day, definitely. Although, the day I actually get back to work on it is still a mystery, even to me. My focus has shifted to “Lodestar” and I feel very adamant towards completing it.

    That’s all for now! Thanks, everyone, for taking interest in my stories! I hope you enjoy them as much as I like writing them. And that goes for both “Lodestar” and “My Dearest Students”.

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  • 143w, 3d
    In Need of a Little Help

    Hey everyone! Like the title says, I'm in the need of a little help... If you have been following my story, "My Dearest Students"(Thanks again!) you may or may not have noticed that I'm not exactly the best at grammar in a technical sense. There is no one to blame but myself for this. Probably due to my lack of experience with creative writing like this and whatnot. But I'm getting better! And one way that would really be a huge help would be for me to get an editor!

    So, I'm here to ask if there's anyone out there who would be willing to give all my previous and future chapters and works a thorough review before all updates. I'm looking for someone that's, forgive the expression, a grammar Nazi. But even if grammar isn't your strongest area either, it would be great help just to get a second pair of eyes on my chapters.

    Another point. I would really like it that whoever would want to be my editor would get on a more friendly bases with me. I don't want someone to just email my chapter to, only to get a reply of what errors should be fixed, back. It's always good to have someone to talk to and bounce ideas off of. Friendship is magic! I wont force conversation or anything if you prefer not to though. But this doesn't mean I don't want a serious editor. The whole point is to improve my writing skill and release high quality chapters for anyone and everyone to enjoy!

    I wont bombard anyone with constant questions and favors either. I have my own non-pony things to do and I'm sure you do too. I will only ask for edits when chapters are complete and I feel are sufficient enough to pass on. No pressure on replies either. No one likes to be pressured and it only lowers the quality of work.  

    So, again, If anyone has any free time to edit and review my chapters before I post, I would be extremely grateful! You don't even know how grateful I would be haha. I'm always missing little thing here and there.

    If you would consider, please just comment here and I'll send you a message and we can then take things from there. Again, lots of thanks to everyone that's reading "My Dearest Students"! Really makes me feel good, knowing that I'm contributing even a minute amount into this great community! Brohoof to everypony!  

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A journey to become great and powerful...

Trixie strives to reach this ultimate goal; but rather than simply proclaiming her skill, she will be forced to overcome many obstacles and adapt to her changing circumstances in order to ensure her success. She must face the new challenges set before her; but when adversaries emerge, enemies-turned-friends may be Trixie's only hope.

First Published
20th Oct 2012
Last Modified
13th Jan 2014

Proof reading and sounding board with my good and awesome friend, Starfall. Thank you very much for all your support and help.

Cover art by the talented Empty-10 at deviantArt.

Huzzah, it's up! :pinkiehappy: This was a pleasure to help out with.

Interesting. While I feel Twilight's barrage of insults went a bit longer than they should have, I particularly enjoyed this. Plus who can pass up a story with their favorite three ponies tagged, am I right? Nicely written and well detailed. You have earned a like and a star my friend.

Trixie entering a tournament to become Luna's protege?  I love Trixie, but I see her chances right now as slim and none...and slim has a foot out the door.  Please prove me wrong.


Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it :twilightsmile:


Totally understand what you're saying, and I agree. But don't worry, I've got it all planned out :pinkiesmile:

What's this? A Trixie adventure fic? You have no idea how rare these are. That or I just can't find any. Looking forward to this. :twilightsmile:

I think the only thing that would make me happier with this story is if Twilight and Trixie hit it off. Twixie and TwiLuna are my favorite ships. And adventure ships are my favorite stories! :pinkiehappy:

And spam on a start to such a wonderful read? Really? You should be ashamed...

Edit: Yay! Spam is gone!


You may be pleasantly surprised in later chapters :pinkiehappy:

You have now made me very antsy for your next chapter. I do hope it will be a long one...:unsuresweetie:

Damn! First chapter and I'm already hooked. Congratulations! :pinkiehappy:

I can already tell that this fic has the potential to be a really great story and (IMO) will likely be (should be) in the feature box by at least the fifth chapter, if not sooner.

An interesting tweak on a oft-used story premise, very few to no typos (save for: "You, on the other hand, should not be here." Should probably be hoof but, given it's the phrase "on the other hand", it doesn't really bother me.) and very good, well-written prose.

Even the title is good. Given what I assume the main hook of the story is gonna be, judging by the description and character tags, calling the story Lodestar makes a lot of sense, given its multiple definitions.

The Lodestar: The brightest star in the constellation Ursa Minor. :trixieshiftleft:

A Lodestar: Any star used in celestial navigation

Also, I agree with Ducky. While I'm sure the story would be fine without it, having some :trixieshiftright::twilightblush: would simply be the icing on the cake for me (and many others). It wouldn't (shouldn't) be a major plot point, this being an Adventure story (hence the tag), but instead a subplot sprinkled throughout the story. Some of the best "ships" I've read have been subplots in bigger stories. The final decision is entirely up to you, though.

Keep up the good work!

P.S. Twixie please? Sorry, I just really like the pairing. : )

Edit: Just saw your response to Ducky. You just made me very happy. :yay:


It's Twilight in Trixie's dreams, so I think her mannerism is justified :twilightsheepish:

Nice beginning :twilightsheepish: I'd really know what happens next... :pinkiecrazy: Romance stories ftw :twilightsmile:

I miss when StarFall was MY internet friend several months ago! But I haven't heard from that sweetheart in so long... *makes deredere face*

Comment on my things once and a while... *blushes*



Well, this was one of those rare fics that suck you in immediately and seem to bury themselves more and more into your mind as you go on. I actually made something like an 'awwwwwwww' sadface when it ended. I'm happy to have found it and take a fav. :twilightsmile:

In terms of constructive criticism, well (note that these are mostly things that are just my opinions I suppose)=

1) I would avoid terms like "An azure-coated mare with a silvery-blue mane" and "The lavender mare’s magic". That kind of prose might be niggling distractions. There's nothing wrong with just using there names over and over again.

2) You have a lot of short paragraphs. That's not that big of a deal, but it does contribute to a sort of choppy-kind of feeling. I get that this is a dream, but still the prose style does feel jarring a bit.

3) You say things like "she thought" and otherwise treat thoughts like dialogue. I don't think that's a good idea. Like look at:

Here I am... she thought uncertainly as she arrived in the main square, unsure as to where or how to begin. What am I even doing? was a question Trixie had not bothered to ask herself before.

I think that would be better as something like:

Here I am... Pure uncertainly seemed to ripple through her senses as she arrived in the main square, not knowing where or how to begin. What am I even doing? Trixie had not bothered to ask herself things like that before, frowning.

4)There is also a bit of a thinness in terms of the prose. I would beef up things just a bit to refer to what the ponies are doing with their hooves, their eyes, their ears, et cetera.

Oh, and minor thing, but I think that She was the one that had saved her own town, using her own magic; the one that had stood firm in the face of danger even as Trixie ran away in fear. is wrong because of the semi-colon (the latter part is not a sentence).

How will it be judged hmmm? How can she find who is skilled, talented, or actually having unreached potential?


All of those questions will be adressed :twilightsmile:

Trixie is a evil, terrible pony, but I want to be proved wrong! :pinkiehappy:

I love Trixie/Luna fanfics :pinkiehappy:

Okay... got my attention, here. In a good way, mind. Trixie... I am so admittedly biased to her. *Points to avatar* Good read on her, here. I wonder... how will you present the events in Ponyville?

Well Well Well, this seems to be good. :rainbowkiss:


I'm glad I've gotten your attention, and I hope I don't disappoint! :twilightsheepish:


I love them too... :yay:


Thanks, I'm glad you liked it!


So happy you enjoyed it! And to adress the whole Twixie thing a bit more, yes I love that ship too... so... lets just see what happens :twilightsmile:


Thanks a lot for your input! I value any and all kinds of constructive criticisms, and I'll make sure to take all of that into account for future chapters.


Well, well, well, if it isn't my old buddies, Striker and Swiper :3

An excellent beginning so far. I am curious as to how this shall go.




Alright, maybe you might also want to talk to some of the guys in the shipping groups here too and see what they think... :twilightsmile:

This has got my attention. Looking forward to how events fold out for our plucky mare.

I'll echo some of the criticism above. Lot's of telly issues in the second half of the chapter. I'm one to talk, as I fall victim to the same, but keep working on it to improve!

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Sorry for the super long wait! Had lots of stuff going on. I'll try having future updates come much faster :twilightsmile:

Yes update! :pinkiehappy: Love this story. Glad to see a new chapter.

i loves it im gonna tell every pony about this  

Life goes on.  I understand.:twilightsmile:

As for this chapter, it's nice to know how Luna came up with the idea of the tournament.  I'm just interested in knowing how Luna is going to hold a tournament without any participants getting injured.  Also, how the heck is Trixie going to get anywhere in this tournament?  Her magic is mainly tricks and fireworks.  I can see Trixie and Luna connecting as student and teacher, they both know about loneliness, but I don't like Trixie's odds of getting to that point.

Anyway, I hope another update comes sooner rather than later, but like I said...'Life goes on.'

I'd say the whole 'tournament' thing depends on what Luna tosses in as contests.  And it seems she may have a very hooves-on approach to designing them.

Meanwhile, it might be good if in the future you noted flashback chapters as such.  It took me a while to get my mind in line chronologically.

Interesting. Luna seems a bit like a filly in this new day and age. Having to adapt and change based on recent events is certainly a monumental task for her. I like the new take of her being more underprepared to deal with things in a new time in a cute way. This Luna is nice to see rather than the always stout and wise Luna you see most of the time. I must admit even I went with the flow on that one. Still loving it so far.

Let the trials begin!!!!!!


Can you elaborate on that? For me it was rather obvious that the chapter deals with the past as soon as the 7th paragraph came up (which still is first page).

Personally, I like the more subtle approach with the flashback, since the author doesn't have to jump in time multiple times in a single chapter.

i read your story seven times next time i do i get a free coffee

Best pony? Check. Best pony realizing her own weakness? Check.  Best pony not talking in the third person? Check. I absolutely adore the way you characterized Princess Luna, and opening the story the way you did breaks my heart. I'm hoping you have good things planned for Trixie in later chapter, but please don't rush it. This is shaping up to be a great story. I wanna see my favorite showmare  go far, and I know you won't disappoint!

Thanks, everyone, for all the kind words! I'm so glad you're enjoying the story so far. And don't worry about any questions you have about the story. So far, I'm pretty sure I've got all your questions covered :twilightsmile:

Again, thank you all very much!

Pretty good, here. I think Trixie would fit in quite well with Luna. She's not as powerful as twilight, but so far she outclesses just about every other unicorn we've seen. And can do at least one thing Twilight can't. :trixieshiftright:


I wonder what that thing would be. Being evil? :trixieshiftleft:

>>1794737 Actually, weather manipulation.

It pains me that this story went belly up. Pains me!


Fear not! Bubu is still working on the next three chapters. :pinkiehappy:

When are we getting a new chapter?:twilightsheepish:


So sorry about the wait! College and stuff... This coming weekend, I promise!


Wow, what a jerk. Whatever happened to sportsmanship? Oh right, it never existed.


Looks like Trixie was suckered again.  Now chances of her making that tournament is slim and none.  If by some miracle she does make it, what condition will she be in?  That is not looking good.  Not good at all.

Oh, i hope she gets there and all four of his legs are broken. :flutterrage: I hope this is the bottom and Trixie begins working her way up.

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