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Matthew Williams, a citizen of New York City, leads a pretty good life, an alright job, a nice place. Sure, he has dreams and aspirations like the normal humans of the earth, but he was rather content at the moment. That all changes, when six ponies drop right on his head, and soon finds himself in a variety of situations that will spin his life in all different directions.
Rated PG-13 for Language, Mild Crude Humor, and Some Sexual Content.
>unnaturally harry gardener
>harry gardener
>gardener=potter
Enjoyable writing as usual my man. Good start for a prelude and establishing how the protagonist reacts some situation in the environment. By the way, I like your human character with him with his outburst and such. This story does have a different sense of humor in that I can't seem to put my finger on (the name anyways), but nonetheless good. It shall interesting to see what happens from here. Keep up the good work man, best regards
Well, I can deffinitely see someone actually writing this from their own perspective. Nicely done, and with a very original idea for why he is in Equestria, is it bad that I have walked or ran into trees very often?
However the fact that he was typing it seems like a bad sign, also no one seems to really care about the animated, talking, some mythical, ponies. I mean other than the hobos and the customers it was really just "What the hell?..."
>>1459851 Well, since the plan was to bring the protagonist into Equestria by the end of the first chapter, I didn't want to indulge on the humans' reaction to the ponies for too long, as I wasn't intending it to be a major plot point.
>>1460030 Sorry to hear that. But so far, no one is complaining about the title, though that could probably change in the future.
“I don’t want to go to school today! I’d rather stay home and bake cookies with you!”
Sounds rather similar with from a movie that I watch
Liked the comedy so far, doesn't go out of its way to get on your face so I find it a plus. Nicely done my friend
The reaction of almost every single human to the presence of talking sentient ponies seems awkward. Everyone is too trusting, or too willing to keep their mouth shut it. I suppose you wanted to skim your way through this chapter to get to the part of the story you wanted to focus on, but really I couldn't make it through the first chapter because of the numerous holes in logic that kept me from being able to get into the story. I'd recommend that you look into perhaps fixing these issues, and try to be a bit more realistic of all parties reactions during first contact.
Matt, you are SUCH an idiot here! Twilight asked you a serious question about humanity and you fed her that line of garbage.
To quote the Internet - "Son, I am disappoint". I sincerely hope that Matt stops being a flippant ass and gives her a truthful accounting of humanity. 
>>1492414 Thanks for the spot. One of the many dangers of uploading a chapter late at night. 
>>1491899 He wasn't being an ass just to be an ass, he simply didn't know everything (or arguably anything) about his history, but also didn't want to disappoint Twilight. So, he was pretty much an idiot with good intentions.
Besides, it's not as if another human is going to pop out of nowhere, and disprove his story.
“Oki doki loki. Wanna try the batter?” She hands over a spatula.“How are you holding that?” I asked.
“We can always do this! You never noticed?”
“But you have hooves.”
Yeah, I always wonder about that, It would seems that Hooves are as good as hand in their world so I kind of stop wondering after awhile...BUT THERE IS ONE EXPLANATION.
Anyhow, Nice chapter man. Funny with that little knife scene with Pinkie Pie. Keep up the good work man. Best regards
Another enjoyable chapter! I did notice an error in this paragraph though:
“Not always.” She said as she delivered another powerful kick to a tree. “It took me years to get like this. My older brother could do this when he was just a filly.”
Somehow, I don't think Big MacIntosh was called a filly when he was younger. 
Glad that Matt fessed up about the hooey he told Twilight. I give him kudos for admitting that.
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For some strange reason this was playing in my head while they were making out.
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