Lilies of the Valley

Pinkies Imagination

Pinkies Imagination #1 · 2 weeks ago · 1 · ·

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Oh yeah
It's all coming together

DeathToPonies

DeathToPonies #2 · 2 weeks ago · 1 · ·

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caressing her cutie mark for a moment

interesting headcanon moment that i never really thought of, shockingly. what exactly do cutie marks...feel like? do they feel like tattoos on skin or like decals on a shirt where you can almost "feel" the "ink"?

promsie ill comment on the entire story when im done that just made me thnk

Lucky Seven

Lucky Seven #3 · 2 weeks ago · 1 · ·

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I like to think that their cutie marks feel a bit warmer to the touch, because they're a place of such importance. But I'd say it still feels like fur, though does all the way down to skin level.

DeathToPonies

DeathToPonies #4 · 2 weeks ago · 2 · ·

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amazing job! very well written. similar to some others, this genre isn't really "for" me - id much rather explore situations where her skull implodes - but for a romantic and sensual experience this really put me in there.

i think you did a great job with perspective in particular, i liked all the references to "your name", done non-intrusively and allowing anyone to self insert into this story.

the physical descriptions were fantastic also. like i said, i haven't read a ton of stuff like this, but a lot of the ones i have are a lot of "you continue to pound REALLY hard into rainbow dash. then you groan and CUM really hard". your constant switching of words and descriptions helped keep me in the story itself.

i also didn't think i would enjoy a "no plot" story as much as i did, but your writing was good enough that i dnd't really care that this was kind of just a one-and-done scenario. it felt compelling to read, start to finish, and that's kind of inspiring to me personally who has always had an appreciation for one-scene stories.

you almost, almost made me want to fuck a pony instead of killing them, so congrats on that. if anyone is reading this comment as a review, i reccomend it, especially if you love those dumb flower girls!

Lucky Seven

Lucky Seven #5 · 2 weeks ago · 1 · ·

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The fact my writing can make someone almost want to fuck a pony is about the biggest compliment I could receive, haha. Thank you so much for your kind and in-depth review, I'm really glad you enjoyed the story! I need to try my hand (hoof?) at more of these moving forward to practice for when I reach the clop scenes in my longer stories, so I'm glad to see it's been well-received so far :)

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DeathToPonies

DeathToPonies #7 · 2 weeks ago · 5 · 1 ·

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BirdsBooksBrownies

BirdsBooksBrownies #8 · 2 weeks ago · 1 · ·

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PwP stories are admittedly not exactly my thing, I'd much rather have the sensual stuff as part of a slow burn romance story, but given this is your first story in I presume a while, you did well enough. The writing was grammatically clean, no glaring typos or "oh yes daddy" type things like in some of the more cringe videos. I think that if you slowed down a tad, and had this as the well the climax of a relationship, you'd have an interested reader.

Can't promise I'd get to it immediately as my TBR list is rather...extensive to say the least.

Lucky Seven

Lucky Seven #9 · 2 weeks ago · · ·

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Def been a while since I've written some erotica, yeah. If you'd like, I do have a long-form story called Roseluck's Realization that features mostly relationship build-up and I plan on the rewrite of it being a slow-burn romance with some clop here and there.

mrponyguy