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The Castle has been invaded. Raven Inkwell keeps herself and her herd safe from the onslaught of monsters that threaten them until the dawn comes and they are saved.
Entry to the Imposing Sovereigns IV Contest.
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This was both awe-inspiring and *terrifying as hell*, well DONE!
Princess Celestia: Pfew! Sorry it took so long my little ponies... There was a lot of them to go through!
Simple but very effective. Good portrayal of the psychological toll among the survivors and how Raven didn't allow the slightest crack to show even to the narrator. There are a few minor proofreading flubs, but overall this a great tale of stepping up when no one else can or will. Thank you for it and best of luck in the judging.
I can feel the terror and dread! Well done!
Very well done at depicting the horror and hope of the situation. Glad it worked out in the end.
Another daOtterGuy story that grips the attention despite my tastes.
It's so interesting, being on the opposite sides of our interests. I'm not a fan of such stories. I'm not particularly interested thrusting eldritch monsters upon Equestria and exploring the horrors of war, but the prose itself is of too high quality to ignore. Raven's characterization is on point both figuratively and spear-tipped literally. The reactions of those around her in such hopeless situations is portrayed believably with the stoic secretary of the princesses leading her little resistance cell. It's not glamorous. It's not aggrandizing. It's not even particularly heroic in the usual way. It's just the next day of living in a magical world near the seats of power and refusing to let the job overwhelm.
In other words, you persist to impress me with your stories. Thank you for writing it.
love this detail of magically attuned washing machines, since washing machines are indeed canon to Equestria. and yeah that must have been very hard on Steady Hoof!
also a bit of a bad omen to have this guy hiding out in the last defensible room of the castle with you!
always love the herd metaphor reasserting itself. also love the idea of Raven, as a vital component of the power structure of Celestia’s administration, being able to take leadership herself when the situation calls for it.
oof, that is definitely the more disquieting option for barricades, a great detail
hehe, the effects of inspiration!
do love the choice of background ponies, who together really do feel like a random and hapless collection of royal guards and castle staff who are utterly unprepared for this genre shift. Raven Inkwell being made of sterner stuff really fits well with her relationship to Celestia, and a part of the tough inner core of Equestria that keeps things innocent and happy for the society of ponies around them. thanks for writing!