To Be You

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Happy Dad's Day.

Apple Bloom blinked. This here poem's dedicated to my father, up above. But maybe y'all will feel a connection to y'all's Pops, too. So, uh, here:

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Turbotune

Turbotune #1 · Jun 20th, 2023 · 1 · ·

That was quite a lovely read, I like how different things were represented by the colors of the rainbow, and eventually tied into fatherhood.

starcoder

starcoder #2 · Jun 20th, 2023 · · ·

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Thank you!

ThePeer

ThePeer #3 · Jun 21st, 2023 · 1 · ·

Very Lovely

NaviNautical

NaviNautical #4 · Jul 12th, 2023 · 1 · ·

Wow.

I don't think I've ever read a story that had my focus be that intense. Nearly 10 years ago, I also lost my father. And I had written poems, stories, and short adventures with him, because it helped me feel close. It's why I like writing, but it's why I love reading the works of others even more.

This poem, this story, is written almost exactly like my first poem about him. I compared him to rainbow, the calm after the storm. I used colors like you did, and filled it with every passion I could. Someday, maybe I'll share it in a way like this.

Thank you. It felt very good reading this, and even though I'm sitting here crying, it makes me happy that there is a story out there I could relate to so much. Excellent work.