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Hnetu

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  • Fallout Equestria: Treasure Hunting
    A story of two sisters adventuring through the post-apocalyptic Wasteland of Fallout Equestria

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Hidden Fortune and her sister grew up in the Wasteland, learning its dangers and doing their best to stay out of sight and out of mind of the larger world. During a treasure hunt they discover a Stable, and a chance encounter changes their world. Now the sisters must travel out of their element, learn how to survive all over again, and hopefully, discover the one true treasure of the Wasteland.

Cover art by Julep.

First Published
27th Sep 2012
Last Modified
11th Jan 2014

Comments ( 329 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 100w, 5d ago · 2 · ·

A good story definitely worth a read :twilightsmile:

#2 · Chapter 3 · 100w, 4d ago · · ·

good story and chapter

#3 · Chapter 3 · 100w, 3d ago · 3 · ·

Well, as I promised earlier, I sat down and read your story.  I'm getting a very 'Other guys' (or gals) feel from it.  Not talking about the movie, since that was a comedy and this is Grimdark.  No, I'm talking about the fact that the actual hero of the area is now dead, by the hooves of the main character no less.  And now said character is going to attempt to carry on the 'good fight' as it were.  With her sister, both of whom have spent the better part of their life staying as far away from large numbers of ponies as they can.

I can only image what will happen once the locals learn she killed the wastelander.  That should make for an interesting chapter.

So, did I like your story?

#4 · Chapter 3 · 100w, 3d ago · 2 · ·

Fuck yeah ! :scootangel:

#5 · Chapter 3 · 99w, 11h ago · 2 · ·

A few edits have been put up for the earlier chapters to fix a few inconsistencies. Nothing major. Hope you readers are all enjoying!

#6 · Chapter 3 · 97w, 4d ago · 2 · ·

A new chapter will be posted sometime tomorrow evening. I am putting this off for a day because this next chapter will adjust the rating from Teen to Mature. Not to mention the formatting, but that's not important.

When starting Chapter 4, please make sure to read the disclaimer before continuing. It is important.

Thank you all for your patience.

Chapter 4 is now live!

#7 · Chapter 4 · 97w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

another good one also prisoners why would they be prisoners?

#8 · Chapter 4 · 97w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

It'll make sense later.

#9 · Chapter 4 · 96w, 3h ago · 1 · ·

I did not expect what it will be such a greate story. When I said on GD to bring it here.  :twilightsheepish:

Two straight mares  :rainbowkiss: And so good developed. :yay:  I am your fuckin fan now.  :twilightsmile:

#10 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 3d ago · · ·

Liking it so far, though the Star Paladin was a bit off in speech or characterization.

#11 · Chapter 4 · 95w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

Wirepony are so awesome! I like his story 'A cut above' very much. :pinkiehappy:

#12 · Chapter 4 · 92w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

Chapter 5 is currently in edit phase, and will hopefully be put out soon. It's up to my amazing editors and how much time they are able to dedicate to the project now. I'll have it out as soon as it's ready. On a side note, I'm getting a headstart on chapter 6 while I have creative juices flowing. So there, hopefully, won't be such a large gap between the next few chapters.

Thanks for being patient!

#13 · Chapter 4 · 91w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

Wirepony really is best monster.

#14 · Chapter 5 · 90w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

Awesome chapter, comrade! :pinkiehappy: I really like this story. I love her character development, All this irrational, little thoughts and concerns. I almost have feeling, like girl write it.  :twilightsheepish: And hey! We have a stallion in group! It's all I need :rainbowlaugh:. Keep it up! :twilightsmile:

#15 · Chapter 5 · 90w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

another good chapter love it :twilightsmile:

#16 · Chapter 5 · 90w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

Yay, good chapter.

#17 · Chapter 5 · 90w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

I'm glad you're all enjoying it. If anyone has any feedback, I'd be happy to hear in a message.

Either way, chapter 6 should come out with a far FAR shorter gap than the previous one. Thanks again for reading, and your patience. You have no idea how much it means to me.

Edit: For those that may be wondering, a few minor edits to fix things I missed were made, hence the new dates. No major plot changes, just little tweaks to fix stuff.

#18 · Chapter 5 · 88w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

Ok Chapter 5 has been re-uploaded after the reformatting of Fimfiction ate it. WOO!

#19 · Chapter 6 · 86w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

-Celestia's holy clit... This is awesome chapter, comrade! A lot of new characters, ch.development, and stuff. Oh, and Wirepony in the end..  :pinkiehappy:

-Hidden have so many guilt, phobias, and thoughts in the head. :twilightsheepish:  

- Poor Chocolate Eclair..  I dunno, Hidden's adventures contain so much bad luck, how are this two is still alive? It looks like everyone trying to shoot them on sight. Here more shooting on sight than any other story contain. It's like a whole world spinning around them and trying to kill them, or rob them, or rape them, I dunno.  At least it's what Hidden thinking. She is making progress in her views on the world, it seems. And this is very good.  But I can't say I like thoughts like "oh we just leave this ponies I am sure they can  survive without our help" this is what many usual ponies will do. I see many stories where autors trying to write about 'just pony, absolutelly not hero, or anything like that'. Problem is, no one of this stories is become popular, or really liked. Ofcourse someone will always giving comments like 'good chapter bla bla' (like me usually :twilightblush:) But truth is: if protagonist do not make any difference, what the fuck is the point to read about him? Plot's lines, other characters, it's all matter, but protagonist MUST be liked. Readers must have emotional empathy with him. :ajsmug:

-Most stories use some 'shit happened' point or something to get story to spin, but your story begins from 'flat space', they just living like that in years, and then 'bam', gangers, killing, monsters, rangers..

Do not think anything bad, your story is very very good. Already better than 86,436547% other FoE stories (for me at least). But it can be even better.

-Xeno is awesome. Luck, drugs. Add sex here, and she is ideal 'revulsive' character. :twilightsheepish:

Keep it fuckin up, comrade. You do not need even reply on it, just fuckin write what you feel is right. :pinkiehappy:

#20 · Chapter 6 · 86w, 1d ago · · ·

I appreciate the comments hun. I'm not ever going to profess to be the best writer, and I know just how much Hell I've put my characters through and kept a watchful eye on them. I can't say what'll happen in the future, because that'll be spoilers.

All I can really say is to please be patient, things will hit a plateau sooner or later, and it'll make sense. A lot of this first arc is build up, and the following story arc will go from following to leading, so to speak. Like I said, I can't say what'll happen because it takes the fun out of reading it! A lot of it will make more sense during the bigger picture further along. I have a lot of world building done, and a lot of plans that don't come to fruition til much later.

On the other hoof, I'm still trying to be a better writer, and I understand that there are a lot of areas I'm still weak in. The ability to string sentences together doesn't somehow make someone an amazing writer. If there's no story behind the words, then... Yeah...

I'm still working forward. Chapter seven is nearing completion as I type this, and though I've been sick the past few days and on hiatus from working on chapter eight, I'm feeling better and will be working on the story again very soon.

Thanks for being a great reader and keeping up with the story.

#21 · Chapter 1 · 86w, 15h ago · 1 · ·

This is a great introduction to Hidden Fortune and Lost Art, their situation and their relationship. I was thoroughly entertained the entire chapter and you ended with a cliffhanger, which would be cruel if I were waiting for the next installment (I applaud this.) I'd say good on character introduction and development, introducing questions about them that can be answered later, and throwing in a mystery Stable as well. I like the nods in there as well, unbreakable clipboards and cups, the tardis-like bags and so on.

#22 · Chapter 2 · 85w, 4d ago · 2 · ·

So, I have nothing but praise for this chapter, so I'll be brief so as not to seem like I'm gushing.

Pain and misery, at least emotionally (for Hidden) and getting shot (for Lost) I love it. Have I mentioned that I'm a big fan of putting one's characters through a meatgrinder? Well, I have now. It does seems a little weird that Hidden is carrying a pony's head around in her bags, considering most Wastelanders don't seem to bother with burial unless it's someone they know well enough to care about. But on the other hand, she does feel pretty bad for shooting him (though I'd say it's quite justified.) Also, yay for mystery Stable deathtraps; though I wonder how much loot they left behind…

Love Seethe, slimy and horrible and perfect.

Some tension between the sisters in there too, which is good; dynamic relationships are awesome.

#23 · Chapter 7 · 84w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

Fuck's sake... This is your fuckin best chapter so far! :pinkiehappy: Goodbye wirepony I will miss you :fluttershysad: Just wow, reading in one breath. :twilightsmile:

Look, say  me what LA at least bisexual please, even if I will see only attention to mares from her in story.  Fuck I need it, and it's not hard for you. :ajsmug:

#24 · Chapter 7 · 82w, 2d ago · 2 · ·

To all the recent ponies who have been favoriting and reading! Thank you SO SO MUCH!

You have no idea how amazed I am!

And, hehe, regolit. Just wait and see what happens!

Comment posted by Hnetu deleted at 8:35am on the 14th of February, 2013
#26 · Chapter 8 · 80w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

As a bonus to all you faithful readers! Here's an awesome commission of our FAVORITE goofball Steel Ranger, Praline!

ENJOY EVERYPONY!

(For more art like this, please see http://inkwellsartworks.tumblr.com/)

#27 · Chapter 8 · 80w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Hehe. Readers prefer.. to read about action ofcourse.. But not routine action. Somepony like me, who read a lot FoE stories, begins to skip trivial fighting scenas. But I know one thing that every reader prefer the most. It's a feels.  :ajsmug:

And chapter is awesome ofcourse. :twilightsmile:

#28 · Chapter 8 · 80w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

This was good and oh an Alicorn :yay:

#29 · Chapter 8 · 79w, 3d ago · · ·

I heard that "Wastelanders.Weekly.Episode" Awesome!  :pinkiehappy: I like your motivation.

You said, you like Walking Dead ending. Well. Makes me wonder, if you will just kill some, loved by readers, character in the end. :fluttershysad: I know many people not liked WD ending, because game just saying you: 'No sorry, your actions and attempts did not matter, we decide this long ago" :rainbowhuh: It's give you feelings, but also give you feeling what someone trying to fuck with you.

More Important. This your idea about "write two different version of story's plot and bla bla". I do not want to ruin your optimistic mood, but you not first with idea like that. And I Never saw idea, like that, succesfull. :ajbemused:

#30 · Chapter 8 · 79w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

I'm glad you liked the interview. It was a lot of fun, if harrowing. And no, I might not have ever seen something but that doesn't mean it doesn't exist! It's all about perception. We'll see. And no, I don't specifically mean to say that the actions of the characters won't matter. It's just a matter of how things will go in the end. There is a story to tell, and this is not a game. I was merely trying to give insight into the way I process ideas in my mind. As I said in the interview, the story has changed a LOT in just eight chapters compared to the original concept.

Either way, we'll see what happens when the final chapter releases, and it all ends. Hopefully the majority of readers will be happy with what happens.

Only time will tell.

Comment posted by regolit deleted at 5:18pm on the 23rd of February, 2013
#32 · Chapter 8 · 79w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2165628

Look, I hope you saw this 22 fuckin things, before you fucking start to write some shit, and bla bla

Just to be sure. It's really good stuff for writter. :twilightsmile:

#33 · Chapter 8 · 79w, 1d ago · · ·

I have dozens of those bookmarked. Thank you though.

#34 · Chapter 8 · 78w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

On chapter three, so far, its brilliant, a fav and like from me, keep it up :pinkiehappy:

#35 · Chapter 8 · 78w, 5d ago · 1 · ·

Finished chapter 3, loved the ending, great read, looks like this fic is my new time steal, awesome story.

#36 · Chapter 8 · 78w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

I'm glad you're enjoying it! <3

#37 · Chapter 6 · 78w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

Well, well, well. My favorite chapter so far. That was fucking awesome, to put it bluntly.

#38 · Chapter 8 · 78w, 3d ago · · ·

>>2193854

Who's your favorite Stable Ranger?

#39 · Chapter 8 · 78w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

>>2195245 Lamington, I have no idea why, I just think he's so serious it's amusing

#40 · Chapter 8 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2198160

I cant choose personally, Lamington is a darling, Praline is amazingly perky, Creme Brulee is a sultry flirt and the Berliners skittering over the table.... so cuuuute!

#41 · Chapter 8 · 78w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

That's STAR PALADIN LAMINGTON.

But in all seriousness I'm glad you're enjoying. I'm glad every reader has enjoyed so far! I can't even begin to believe I've hit this many views, or even written this many words. It's amazing!

#42 · Chapter 8 · 78w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

>>2199573 Creme was just, it's one of those moments when the inner psychopath in me yells "Just fucking sex her!" It sounds weird but I was anticipating Lost to get laid XD Inwardly screaming "You can do it!" Though she is my close second to Lamington

#43 · Chapter 8 · 78w, 2d ago · 2 · ·

>>2201009 If I had to rank it with all other Fo:E Fics, I'd say... Third, personally, the top being the original Murky Number 7 coming in second, yours and every other trailing behind. This is MASSIVELY underrated, lot of attention on other fics that aren't half as good as this.

#44 · Chapter 1 · 77w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

This sure sounds interesting. Characters are sympathetic, too.

Fav'd and watched.

#45 · Chapter 7 · 77w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

Ooh, that surgery scene. I don't usually get squeamish from reading, but that made my skin crawl several times. Great writing!

#46 · Chapter 8 · 77w, 1d ago · · ·

I want to apologize to every one of my readers who is patiently waiting for the next chapter to be out. Due to some... Idiocy on my part, and y'know, generally being a terrible writer, chapter 9 is undergoing a major revamp at the last stage of production. Despite looking like we could've released in the next week or so, my editors have pointed out that the chapter had some very serious flaws in, honestly, several ways.

Do to this, I'm reworking how the chapter is set up, and going forward in a slightly different direction. I'll work as fast as I can, while still keeping quality up, to release something soon. I'm really sorry everyone, and I hope you all will continue to be patient. I'm by no means putting this on an indefinite hiatus or abandoning, I just need to fix some glaring issues.

Thank you for your patience, and I'll keep you all updated. I need to make a Tumblr for this or something...

#47 · Chapter 8 · 76w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

I hope they meet the Stable 60 crew again soon.

Neat story, keep it up!

#48 · Chapter 9 · 75w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

Fuckin Sanctuary! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Eeee, just.. WOW. Great chapter :pinkiehappy:

Fighting scene is damn awesome. 'Buck' is cool, but 'Stampede' are even cooler!  :pinkiecrazy:

I love this story, keep it up. :rainbowkiss:

#49 · Chapter 9 · 75w, 6d ago · 2 · ·

That was one of the most amazingly intense action sequences I have ever read and with a moving conclusion to boot. I love how Hidden fights enemies that are completely out of her league thus making her victories all the more satisfying. This was well worth staying up past midnight for. Keep up the good work.

#50 · Chapter 9 · 75w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

Epic pistol fight :twilightsmile: I too rather like that Hidden keeps getting pitted against enemies that are beyond her. I also love Xeno's unnerving cigarette trick(s).

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