King Sombra goes to Canterlot.
Princess Luna fills her thoughts with him.
Celestia hates Sombra due to being embarrassed in front of him and because he
paid more attention to Luna.
But if Luna fell in love with Sombra... What would happen if Celestia found out?
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Interesting
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I'm glad to hear you like it!
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I hear ya. So, they are human here?
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Yeah.
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Okay, nice!
So far interesting.
I'm very interested to see what you do with this story. One thing I know for sure, it'll be an absolute banger.
This is a pretty good start, I look forward to the rest of the story
I'm already loving this story and looking forward to more!
Awesome! Can’t wait for the next chapter! (Though I understand life is probably getting in the way 😢)
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I'm glad you liked it! And I've actually got the second chapter ready, I just need to add a few more things to it and I'll publish it tomorrow to celebrate Eid.
that was quite nice
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I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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mhm
Very good! I really enjoyed that chapter! Can’t wait for next Saturday! (And good luck on school assignments
I personally am SUPER behind in an assignment for one class 
)
Why doesn't she hate him because of the whole Crystal Empire thing?
I am really enjoying the story so far, it looks to be one of the best I've ever read, keep up the good work.
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I've kind of explained in the authors notes that Sombra was adopted by Amore and when she died, he became King. Unlike in other stories, I'm not going to have Amore related to the Two Sisters.
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Thanks! Tbh, I haven't gotten an assignment since last year but I've got tests and since the maths teacher was hardly there, everyone was slaughtered in the maths test. Imagine having 10 different teachers all come and try teach maths when they're not maths teachers... I hope you're able to finish your assignment in time!
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One of the best you've ever read? I'm glad you like it that much!
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Oh good grief! ☹️ Sounds like y’all need better teachers (and maybe ones that bother to stick around). Ooooor, YouTube tutorials. Not sure if you have access to YouTube in Bangladesh, but something close to a tutorial or something like that could help.
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Yeah... I'm able to access YouTube, so that's not a problem. Most of the teachers are unable to control my class, and they really need to get better at explaining stuff. I mean, I wrote a 21 page story, only for my English teacher to say we were supposed to write a 200 word narrative writing thing. Imagine that... I guess I can be blamed a little because she said the word story a lot, and I stopped listening as soon as she said it. 😅
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oh dear
I'm not a huge fan of Celestia to begin with, but this story is dropping my small taste for her, especially since I'm the oldest sibling in my family. I think you're doing a great job writing on how Luna feels and her thought process. I will excitedly wait for the next chapter update.
I read this yesterday and forgot to comment. I don’t particularly like how you wrote Celestia here. I’m personally more of a fan of the “I am your mother but I’m too busy for you sorry” portrayal of Celestia over the “Celestia was actually a horrible person and deserved to be betrayed” portrayal, but you do you 🙃🤷🏻♀️ (my personal head cannon was that The Voice was the one spreading the lies and Celestia’s schedule ~i.e. she works during the day and Luna at night~ didn’t allow them to really talk things out ~as indicated in the episode “Royal Trouble”~). I also PERSONALLY don’t like reading the SH tidbits. I tend to read in a method that is self inserting and empathetic. As a result, my actual arms and thumb started hurting when I read Luna’s SH bits 😖😰. Nothing wrong with the actual writing content, you wrote well. I will still read the story, I just probably will skip the graphic SH segments. This chapter felt short, I want MOAR!!!!
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I guess you're a little surprised/shocked at what Celestia did?
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I'm not giving any spoilers though~
You gave me an idea...
I'll try not to have too much of those. Not everyone is comfortable with reading that...
Thanks for the comment! I'll try my best to make the next chapter longer, though that might be a little hard as school is starting again.
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Thank you! I'm glad to hear you like it that much. I feared that I wasn't doing a good enough job with describing her emotions.
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yeah
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You've done a great job with each character's emotions.
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Ack, the suspense!
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Good things come to those who wait~
looks good to me
Man Celestia is a very cold hearted older sister Luna, sooner or later she'll get a dose of karma for mistreating Luna.
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Trust me, she will ...
Yay! I wondered if I’d know what the “idea” I sparked was when I saw it, and I did! This will be very interesting! Few fanfics really cover Celestia struggling with a “dark side” the way Luna does. Even the ones that do acknowledge it describe Celestia as handling it very well and keeping it under control. This could be a very promising perspective that doesn’t get covered much! Great job on this chapter!!! Looking forward to my new Saturday tradition! 😄
interesting and nice
I thought I saw a love triangle brewing!!!! Aaagh, who will Luna choose? A close and loyal friend but is also her personal bodyguard, or a charming and dramatic handsome king from a far off land away from her sister’s presence? Ah, choices choices… GREAT CHAPTER!!!!
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Thanks!
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Yep, you can see it alright. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter!
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youre welcome, loved the song reference
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It's one of my favorite songs and when I was writing the previous chapter, I decided to have a little fun.
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i like the song too
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I'm going to have to re-read the last chapter as I absolutely LOVE "Soldiers of the Night" song as I've lost count of how many times that I have listened to it.
Anyways great chapter, loved the idea of bat ponies being vampires in a human world and how Luna was actually accepted by people in Applelose until Celestia found her.
no you dont, i ejoyed it
I loved the chapter, continue with the story my friend
This was a great chapter, seeing some light come through in Luna's life for a moment
Love it! I kind of suspected Shadowlance may get a good slap out of that suggestion, but it could honestly go either way. Great chapter!