Starswirl and Autumn Blaze, both seeking adventure and understanding, find themselves transported to Veldin, a planet located in a remote corner of the Solana Galaxy, as infants, with no memories at all, and happen to arrive at the same time that Ratchet crash lands into the planet. Together the three siblings grow and experience all sorts of things during their time on their home world, but eventually it grows boring and they set their sight on the stars, imagining what sort of adventures would await them once they left Veldin behind and started to explore their galaxy... unaware that fate was going to bring all of them into contact with someone who would set their lives in motion and allow them to truly discover their places in their vast universe.
(Ratchet and Clank/MLP Crossover)
(Part of the Demon War series, but doesn't require reading the others)
Timeline
Ratchet and Clank: Complete
Going Commando: Complete
Up Your Arsenal: Complete
Deadlocked: Complete
Size Matters: Complete
Tools of Destruction: Complete
A Crack in Time: Complete
All 4 One: Complete
Into the Nexus: Complete
Rift Apart: Complete
Interesting I see where you are going with that necklace. Now how will Starswril handle this adventure.
There could be more spacing between sentences as it's kinda hard to read, anyways great story concept and I'm looking forward to seeing how things will go.
an interesting enough start, but i will keep watch. incidentally, a thought occurs that is not related to the story, per say, but to the over arching narrative perhaps...have u ever thought of sending a pony or other creature to the many wolds of the Transformers multiverse? and before u throw the idea out entirely, there was a time, though not often spoken of, that humans were able to match both Autobot and Decepticon...fight on equal footing in fact...it was a time of Pretenders, and the Master Force...
There's a lot of potential for trimming down just this one chapter. Let me show you. Here's your first paragraph:
Now here it is again, the message intact, after I've given it just a single pass:
...Okay, so I changed the idea behind the first sentence because it's strange that the residents of such a chaotic town wouldn't find a normal day to be either a blessing or simply the calm before a big storm. Of course the change in style is undeniable, too. I do have my own after all. Still, I cut down that first paragraph to less than half its original length, and didn't lose anything. Considering the identity of this website, I think writers can safely assume we all know what MLP characters look like. It's just another part of the process. After all, if things drag too much, people aren't going to want to keep reading.
11030649 I understand what you are saying, and will endeavor to trim things down, both now and in the future.
This is really good 👍👍👍
So the adventure begins.
Well it looks like Autumn is going to be doing lots of improvements on her weapon. Still this could be interesting once she gets back home.
Tats did sort of the same thing in Sparkle of His Eye with Little Twilight
Seriously I hope they do a complete line trace and nab everyone who mishandled those plans.
11060666 If memory serves, and it's been a long time since I've read his story, I think he used the glitch in an omake chapter, saying something about the flow of the chapter breaking if he used it... at least, that's what I recall.
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yes, but it was still Twilight playing with a new spell...
11060929 Really? That's interesting to hear.
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its Twilight...she read about the spell, and in true Twilight fashion, had to do some tests...
11061021 You got me there. Just totally forget he even did anything with that glitch.
One thing I’ve found is you keep making really long paragraphs.
A good rule is for each change in character focus, place focus, or object focus you make a new paragraph. Other ways to break them up is to separate paragraphs by events as well, for example with this chapter would be when you start describing the situation with Autumn you would start a new paragraph.
Having never played the games, I don’t have a Sony system, that the environmental repair machine seems to be something the ponies really seem to enjoy making.
11078453 Indeed. Given an earlier comment, on a previous chapter, it seems that Tats and I agree on something else: that ponies would make such a machine in the face of Drek's pollution.
So they get to meet the Thugs leader. I hope they can turn them into a sort of ally and see if they could be better.
11112200 To be fair, he's pretty set in his ways. On the other hand, there's ponies involved, so canon might not happen. Time will tell which path I send him down.
I don’t think any of them are going to be forgiving Quark anytime soon. He is crossing lines that will have ramifications.
these mean the same thing...so Rachet is worried, but hes not worried about Angila?
11142231 No, he's worried about Angela. I must have been distracted when I wrote the bit about Ratchet's sister, to miss that error.
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happens to the best of us, i assure u...i rember one time i wrote that the character was stunned but not surprised...i have no idea what i was thinking writing that...
11142398 I see. Well, I've modified that part of the chapter... as best as I can tell I was focused on thinking ahead, to the Plumber's scene and mentioning Ratchet's sister, and wasn't thinking when I wrote that bit.
Thought Acceleration? nasty technique, but not one native to either Ratchet and Clank or MLP...that one first popped up in That Time i was Reincarnated as a Slime
11145560 I think that was where I got the inspiration from... and while it might not be native to MLP, whose to say whether or not such a spell even exists in that world, with everything else that's there.
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true, though that is hardly compelling evidence...
11145603 I only say that because there's chaos magic, the magic that opened the way to the comic book world, there's portal magic, dark magic, and who knows what else. I just figured that with all those types of magic, and anything we haven't discovered, that there's a possibility for Thought Acceleration to exist in the MLP world.
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eh, fair enough
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We also know there is mind based magic like what Starlight used in the mind control episode, so magic must be able to manipulate other parts of the mind as well.
11146412 True enough.
So your making Rivet Rachet's sister?
11150581 Indeed. Take away the game aspects, like keeping them the same size and shape so the armor fits, and just listen to how they act. The two really seem like long lost siblings, as they're so similar to each other.
Now with the second game complete I hope Ratchet gets some answers about his people that he may have.
An interesting change from canon. Now I wonder if Ratchet will be getting multiple partners in this story?
11158071 I never liked how Angela was forgotten, especially since she's a Lombax, hence why I have her stick around with Ratchet. As for Sasha and Talwyn, well, you'll have to wait and see.
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the Lombax r very cat like in a way...Prides?
11158319 Could happen. The games gave Ratchet three potential girlfriends, even if one is canon and the other two were forgotten as time went on, so him having a pride could happen later on.
Nice chapter!
Ah, Autumn’s turning the Galactic rangers into the Mann Co. Mercenaries. Nice spread for winning a battle.
11178905 I wasn't too sure what to turn the Rangers into, especially given what happened in Tats' take on the series, but figured the Mercenaries from TF2 were a good option.
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mmm, not bad, certainly...its a good balance of powers,
11179003 I'm glad you approve.
ill just leave this here...
so, similar scheme to Twis while she was growing up with the pair...basic but one has to start somewhere
11184909 To be fair, there aren't a lot of ways to deal with Courtney Gears... I mean, we basically topple her in canon, and I busted her up when I did Starlight's version of the story, so after that saving her was really the only thing left.
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I think you need the word of Starlight into Starswirl.
Sorry I didn't mean to be criticism and rude 🙏
11200240 It's perfectly fine. Don't know why I had Starlight on the mind when I wrote that part, but I've changed it back to Starswirl.