Sometimes, its hard to smile, though you've been doing it your whole life. Sometimes, no matter how hard you try, you can't hold back the tears.
She cried each night, then goes right back smiling and laughing every day. Nopony see's her pain. Sometimes, she wonders if anypony even cares. But, She goes right back to pretending. She's the element of laughter - of course she can fake a smile.
After all, she's not important. Pinkie has always put everypony else above herself.
A/N : The cover image was painted by an artist who goes by the name Tsampikos.
If he'd like me to take it down, I will.
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That was.....sad.
It was beautifully written too. This side of Pinkie is normally what I cry over because she gets depressed (I do like sad stories though). It would be hard for her friends to cope with their best friend dead.
1. dying, not dieing
2. SHe would see if Twilight wanted cupcakes
3. win.
1. bear
2. you're
3. win
In all honesty, this could really use some expanding.
As it is, it's a really great story, but it's just so vague on parts. It could really use some fleshing out.
Quite good, you should make it longer.
Very well written, tugs on the heartstrings quite well!
Honestly though, I can never see Pinkie actually committing suicide. Even if she is that depressed, she is incredibly dedicated to her friends happiness. (Maybe I just don't want to think of it any other way.
Either way, great job!
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so much sadness have been created in my heart
Your cover image was painted by an artist going by the name Tsampikos. He has galleries on furaffinity.net and various other places. His stuff tends to get around, as he's a pretty well known furry artist who does a lot of paid commission work. Much of it is adult in nature, though, so take caution and be ready to run across NSFW content if you go looking for more by him.
Uh... so.... that was so wonderfuly specific. Um...
You should make a sequel NOW!!!
1339752 Thanks! I'll put that in my description.
:1339466 How do you think I should flesh it out...?
In what parts does it seem to vague?
1339820 How could I make a sequel to this....? I mean,I don't know what more could be done with it. XD
1339853 Because I seem to be good at writing very tear-jerking stories.
My sister says it's probably because I have problems crying(Didn't cry when watching the Titanic, or at a funeral.), and need to fill the void by making other people cry.
I honestly depressed myself a little while writing this, though. XD
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Well, I think a lot more exposition could be useful. Also, I think I used the wrong word. It's not really vague as much as it is quick.
For exposition, I think you could do a lot to flesh out how she's feeling, how everypony acts towards her, the setting, etc.
Again, don't get me wrong, it's a fantastic story, I only want to help you improve.
1339914 Yes, Thanks for your time and review.
I'm about to go through and correct some misspellings, and probably flesh it out a tiny bit, but I'll probably come back tomorrow and write a bit more into it.
Liked.........
Let manly tears flow......... Well done
Wow, Oh man. That was deep, I nearly shed a tear out of my left eye. That was a really impressive sad story.
1342964 Thank you.
I try. :3
(I'm nut sure if its a gift or a curse, but I'm really good at making really depressing things. *shrugs*)
1343029 Well, if your good at it, then own it, see it as a potential gift. And I think I remember writing a sad story once, although I don't remember what happened to it.
A sad story and one that I think has taken place more than once in reality. It is always the biggest clowns who are the saddest people. Too often, no matter how often they are told, such a person can never believe that they are loved.
a good story...
however i remain emotionaly indifferent.
good story
sadly i don't really care much for pinky but it is sad just i remain uneffected
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MAY YOU REST NOW PINKIE...
Excuse me while I go cry in that corner over there...
All Pinkie wanted to d in her life was to make everyone happy, even at the cost of her own life. Pinkie was never my favorite pony, but after reading this, I like Pinkie a lot more.
This is really good. It is just really rushed. Try to give more details and make it seem real, so real we can almost see it happening and really believe you.