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On ponychan's training ground, a thread popped recently proposing a characterization exercise. For the exercise, I asked on the TTG channel who I should pick, and they chose Trixie for me. This is the result of the exercise.

Quoting Ganymede here:
"Here's how this works:

You write a short scene, 500 - 2,000 words, and then we read your scene and tell you how well you wrote that character.

The scene is:

A young filly is crying in the town square.

Write a scene where:

1) Twilight Sparkle happens across the filly during her normal errands.
2) Rainbow Dash sees the filly as she's practicing her stunts.
3) Pinkie Pie comes across the filly as she's doing... whatever it is that Pinkie Pie does.
4) Rarity notices the filly on her way to get more supplies.
5) Fluttershy comforts the filly as she's coming to visit Rarity.
6) Applejack greets the filly as she's coming to setup for the market.

This is a "pick n' choose" list. You don't have to do all of these, and you don't have to write them in any particular order. If there's only one character you think you need work on the most, feel free to only write the scene with that one character.

We're looking for:

1) Dialog
2) Body language
3) Vocabulary
4) Thoughts and internal dialog
5) General approach (how does the character handle the situation?)

There are no rules as to how the scene plays out or how it ends. Just imagine the character in the situation, and play it out exactly as you think it would.

It is HIGHLY SUGGESTED that you put these in a google document, so it doesn't clutter the thread. Also, enable comments.

You may write the scene with a character that is not one of the mane 6, if you wish, although it is recommended that the character have a personality firmly established in cannon. "

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Comments ( 5 )

OH, I LOVE IT. Short, nice, believeable story where Trixie is not weak-helpless-stupid-arrogant-jerk. Just showmare with little luck and nice intentions. Good work, I also suppost AJ\Trixie.

This was a nice story, I look forward to more updates. Totally agree with Gapaot, nice to see Trixie trying to be a better Pony.

That was rockin' :raritywink:

Very nice, there. :D I'm glad Trixie had her fire, and you got her right, too. She's not a bad pony, not really. Anyone who faces down an Ursa has a good side. Nice dialogue there, and bit at the end with Applejack. Honestly, if she can put up with Dash, Trixie is foal's play! :heart:

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Thanks, glad you like the story :pinkiesmile:
there is no plans for pdates though, this was only a writing exrecise, and trust me the first version was terrible XD. But thanks to the reviewer I managed to make it decent :) I will look forward other characterization practice though, os look out for them if I make a new one. :pinkiehappy:

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