Rainbow Dash gets to pass a day with her idol, Spitfire. During this day she will find out about things she never expected, like the origins of the Wonderbolts and what it means to become part of the team.
This is a story I had in mind for a while now, I don't know if it's any good, i just wrote it because I felt like it. Feel free to give any criticism, this short story is something I can actually rework way more easily than my main project :)
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I Really Like It..................... :3 :3 :3 :3
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(god I like that smiley a bit too much)
Glad you do, yay for first comment on the story, and even more yay for it to be positive
:D awesome
face spamming time
well that was my reaction tbh :D
It's a good feelgood story, But it feels rushed, like there isn't any actual story but the history lesson.
Without the end it would still be a nice story, but with it, it just seems to get our hopes up for some good Scoot/Dash shipping after the reveal, and we didn't get any.
Maybe some expansion is warranted. I personally didn't see any grammatical errors in there, so 4 stars for you good sir.
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I'm glad you liked it. To put it bluntly, it was an attempt in writing a short story. My other story had turned into a chapter fest ( I thought it would be done in less than 7 chapter; actually im now at the 6th and not even through half of what I wan to tell) so I wanted to see if I was able to make something shorter. I think I understand what you mean by it feel rushed. In a way it was (I wanted to finish it before "may the best pet win" aired, since I was among those who believed Scoot would find a way to enter the contest), but only the first version was rushed. This one is the second one, which had reviewers from the TTG to help me. Most of them had a common comment though, the story is good and simple, but there is something amiss. Problem is, no one was able to figure what. I feel the same but I don't know what I can add without breaking the flow of the story. (I guess it will come with practice)
P.S. I don't do shipping, I only wanted to create some Scootalove to compensate for all the Scootabuse already on the net. (I don't have anything against those who like shipping, but I can't enjoy it unless there is a massive comedy tag with it)
P.P.S. I just sent this version of the story to a reviewer specialising in grammar... I now have over 120 things to fix in my mailbox, gonna start working on it tonight. The story was rejected once from EQD but I'm not giving up! I'll try to get it featured!
very nice! This was quite interesting. I commend you on your awesomeness.