Applejack checks up on Rainbow Dash. She hasn’t been doing so well since recovering from a car crash, and everyone can see it, but nobody dares to confront her. Nobody but Applejack, at least. It’s always the same song and dance, but nothing lasts forever.
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Genre: Angst.
Cover art: ANOTHER screenshot edit by yours truly.
Story involves mentions of heavy drinking, hence the tag, and some light violence.
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That ending makes this sad as hell
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Well done story. I have more experience than I'd like with friends and family ruining themselves with addiction, so this one hurts like hell.
And your streak of putting Applejack through the ringer goes unbroken!
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Sorry to hear that, that really sucks. But thanks for the kind words!
And yes, I will never give in on that front!
Well-presented—very strong opening—but it feels like a chapter midway through a larger story. At the very least, I hope it's not an ending. Thank you for it, and best of luck in the judging.
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Thanks! And yeah, I am not the best at writing short stories, especially ones that are literally the bare minimum in terms of length, so I expected something like this to be the case :P. Perhaps it’s a case of “left to viewer interpretation.”
Thanks for the comment :)
I haven't personally had anyone in my family drink (none of them like alcohol) but I've had friends who's parents struggle with this. I've also seen some online friends suffer from addiction. It's truly a horrible thing, especially when you're trying to help but they don't accept it.
You've captured that perfectly here. Though it feels more like a beginning chapter.
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Hey hey thanks! Yeah, someone else said that it feels more like an opening chapter and I am again inclined to agree. I have always struggled with being succinct, it’s just not my thing! Short stories are my kryptonite, but hey, I tried!
oof, it sounds very gross.
oof yeah, if anything could get Rainbow Dash into a state like this, that would be it
this is my first time reading about a straight-up fistfight between Rainbow Dash and Applejack, and it's not fun at all!
oof, says a lot about what has been happening before the story began. wow, Rainbow really is determined to push away the very last of her support system. and of the mane six, she is definitely the only one i can imagine doing it in this physically violent way. it must be so painful to see
ending with the title, very nice
as always, love the effortlessly evocative prose and the subtle depictions of broken people (i feel like there's a thread connecting Wallflower in Obelus, Applejack in Letting Go of the Reins, and Rainbow Dash here, as different as they all are). so sad to see Rainbow reduced to this, and all too real that i, like Applejack, would not really know what could be done for her
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Hoo y’know I always forget I wrote this story because I think I want to just pretend I didn’t. Maybe some day I’ll rewrite it but not restrict myself to a thousand words because, as my writer’s craft teacher said, I am everything but succinct.
That being said, you always know how to be nice! Yeah, I see what you mean with the connection between those characters. I guess tragically broken characters are kind of my thing :P. To be honest, I don’t know what I’d do in Applejack’s shoes either.
One of the best stories, wish there was more
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Thank you very much! That means a lot to hear it :)