It's the autumn of the girls' senior year, two (very eventful) years since the last time Sunset Shimmer had any aspirations at becoming Princess of the Fall Formal (and three years since she actually won). But it seems the title isn't done with her yet, as Trixie, taking a shot at winning the coveted crown, has now sought out her aid -- by asking her to be her date to the dance.
And, in a move that surprised even herself, Sunset said yes.
But as the two prepare to head to the dance, Sunset can't help but wonder if Trixie, whom she'd grown to consider a genuine friend in the months since the Memory Stone crisis, had more on her mind than Sunset's clout in asking for her hand at the dance -- and whether she herself might have any such feelings as well.
Winner of the Sunset Shimmer x EQG Villain "Second Chances" Contest (story folder here)! Pre-read by The Sleepless Beholder.
Featured from 8-10 April 2022!
Takes place senior year, two years after the events of Equestria Girls (sophomore Fall Formal), five months after Forgotten Friendship (late junior year) and in-between Sunset's Backstage Pass and Holidays Unwrapped.
I see what you did there
Hmm. A lot of seemingly-superfluous setup details, but I'm with you so far... Maybe setting up things for later? (it's a short story...) Trixie is at her best when she's a huge ham, and you have that figured out!
"In a couple" what an image, if that was, in fact, intentional. Great voicing in a serviceable reflection chapter.
Seeing those promotional events -- and our heroines interacting with them -- seems like valuable opportunities lost, even if they're a little outside of your chosen scope... Lots of talking points here in the formal probably really belong there, alas.
I have no problem with the formal itself. The conclusion feels a bit rushed or forced to me. Going from "am I humoring, am I bi-curious, or what" to "we're an item now!" deserves more. I also missed the six opportunities where a smoke bomb would have been useful, if they were written in.
The impeccable voicing and Trixie's ostentatious presence made this worth reading. Thanks for writing!
"Eh, it could be always be worse."
"How so?"
"Well, let's just say Flash Sentry has been banned from AJ's farm for the last three years."
This was a sweet little story. I really enjoyed getting to see this rare pairing having fun at a dance!
An enjoyable story, but I agree with KwirkyJ, the story could've been a bit longer. I get that you're trying to get this in in time for that contest, but any chance afterwards, you can post an expanded version of it?
Nice story. Though unfair to Dimiond. I'm not sure if she's mean in this universe and it's just not cool to have your special moment taken. Still I liked the story.
Burns my ass that you’d even lay claim to such a thing. The presumption of it all. How da
...I reluctantly concede.
Ever since they named that syndrome after her, it’s as if she’s forgotten where she came from!
Twilight doesn’t know this yet, but Trixie ran over Tim Spruance on her way to school that morning.
So, I want to wait until I finish reading the story before I give you an actual review, not just snarky asides and quasi-MST one-liners, but I must object to your use of
Lavender Unicorn SyndromeMarigold Human Disorder. It makes the prose needlessly florid and awkward-sounding.It’s weird enough when someone describes Twilight as “the lavender unicorn,” or uses hexadecimal codes to denote Cheerilee’s mane color, or whatever, but it gets even weirder in a human setting.
Not that EQG spends much time pondering the subject of human ethnicity, but...Anyway, I do love me some Trixie, so I’ll keep rolling with this.
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Catching my references? Well aren’t you quite the Secretary of Partying Down!
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“Particularly with that wardrobe. 2005 called, darling! They’re missing an ensemble~!
Twilight Sparkle homophobic moments
The great and powerful Trixie would indeed ask out the girl she loves out that way.
Pinkie once again proves she is the BI character.
That was a cute story and I really appreciated such a fun entry!
Now I wish for more
Any reception is a hostile reception if Trixie attends.
As an aside, you’ve got a long paragraph here that’s dense with info, with a double-whammy of parenthetical asides in there too. Kinda feels like it’s bursting at the seams,
like Trixie’s ego.If you’re going out with Trixie, you’ve given up on a lot of things, expectations chief among them.
Trixie finished by flinging white phosphorus into Applejack’s face.
“And the thing they put on your head isn’t all that important either!”
I generally think that this story is cute, and a decent cross-section of high school life, but I question this moment. It’s a high school dance; a couple of girls making out with each other during the crowing ceremony might draw a little bit of attention, but not, like. THIS much. It’s a bit of contrived teen movie logic. You gotta figure they’re not the only ones smooching during the ceremony, either.
I guess you could argue that it’s because Sunset is the one making out, but still.
This is also unrealistic, as nobody would ever be sorry for Tim Spruance’s absence.
All told, I thought this was a decent piece of SunTrix fluff. If I’m judging it as a narrative, it’s got some flaws. I can’t help feeling like Trixie makes a bigger deal out of campaigning for princess than the story, itself, does. On a related note, despite being shown up at the end (and having attention specifically drawn to her being shown up), Diamond Tiara is a non-factor for the whole story. It feels like there’s something there suggesting some kind of comeuppance that she... doesn’t really earn, I think?
Her big storytelling crime is winning a thing that Trixie wanted. Trixie has many things as is. Y’know?
And I guess I’d knock you on a little bit too much of the old talking head back-and-forth. There were more than a few places where the lack of dialogue tags made it hard to follow who was talking in ongoing conversations. I had to double back once or twice.
It’s fine on the whole. It’s a nice bit of fluff, like I said. I could see SunTrix working out pretty much the way you write it, too.
I'm sorry what!?!? 😨
powerfullest isn't even a word.
Agreed.
Huh, wasn't expecting Trixie to be in a suit. And I'm also curious as to what the dress Sunset is wearing looks like.
You can't always get what you want in life Trixie, take it or leave it.
https://m.Took you this long to realize that.
Only you can answer that Sunset.
Finally got around to this. It was cute and i felt the characters spot on.
Outstanding work, especially Trixie helping Sunset get a way to feed her ego in a more socially acceptable manner. Thank you for an unexpected but delightful shipfic. I’m glad I finally got to it.