No other comment about the chapter other than I can't understand why you haven't more readers than you have. Because your story are looking really really promising, but with that said.
Remember to have a space after your triple period and in the sentence "until I saw the rest of their body" is it wrong to use their there
If I may add to the above comment, the grammatically correct way is "his/her". Alternatively, you could rewrite the sentence to remove ownership altogether.(i.e. "the body)
Good chapter. Lots of character development at the start, decent fight at the end. I'm glad I'm not the only person who will write any execution scenes for their main character, sometimes it just needs to be done. Not a lot I can really say on this one.
Well nice to see you resolved Doc's death well... I thank you for that... I still love this story... You are amazing at making me feel the emotion of the characters... Perhaps to well... I didn't cry but thats because Imma sick bastard... Anyway I'm tired and need to go to bed but I'll continue this story in the morning... Love you...
No other comment about the chapter other than I can't understand why you haven't more readers than you have. Because your story are looking really really promising, but with that said.
Remember to have a space after your triple period and in the sentence "until I saw the rest of their body" is it wrong to use their there
If I may add to the above comment, the grammatically correct way is "his/her". Alternatively, you could rewrite the sentence to remove ownership altogether.(i.e. "the body)
Otherwise, great work, Camo.
Oh, thanks for pointing that out I'm glad you both enjoyed it
Good chapter. Lots of character development at the start, decent fight at the end.
I'm glad I'm not the only person who will write any execution scenes for their main character, sometimes it just needs to be done.
Not a lot I can really say on this one.
Well nice to see you resolved Doc's death well...
I thank you for that...
I still love this story...
You are amazing at making me feel the emotion of the characters...
Perhaps to well...
I didn't cry but thats because Imma sick bastard...
Anyway I'm tired and need to go to bed but I'll continue this story in the morning...
Love you...