This is, what fallout should feel like. That gritty sensation that everything in the world is shit, you're shit, and there is nothing you can do to get rid of the stains that will forever mar your soul. Something no other FO:E spin-off has done successfully (that I know of) to date.
for you. Because you deserve it. I look forward to seeing where this goes. (Do you happen to have a guestimate at when the next chapter will be released? Or is it going on a 'when you complete it' basis?)
I unfortunately cannot provide an exact date for the next chapter. It all depends on my schedule and how much time I have between my classes to get the chapter done. Sorry about that.
And I'm glad the story is being enjoyed, thank you for the positive feedback everyone
By Celestia, that was good. Like the prologue did you get the world just right, and can't wait to see what kind of Wasteland they will find, for with water to "baths" in and other hygienic foalishness and bread that do't sound to be 200years old does it sound to be something to look forward to on the other side of the wall.
The narrative style is still amazing, personal and hinting to a lot of thing here and there so you want to know more. And it is still nice that it is told in "bite" sized chapters. Not that I don't like to read 30K+ Fo:E fanfic in one go, but it can be a little much from time to time.
The only "bad" ting I would nitpick a little at is the use of Shayles tail, for there is a big difference between a zebras tail and a horses tail. Not that what you did was wrong in any way. But it would be nice to see in the text some more that she is a zebra and are using her body in a other way than ponies. And why did she use her mouth on the yucky leather when she could use her hoofs or tail?
I figure I'm gonna do like a chapter by chapter reaction to this fic because it's so good... Descriptive language I know... Anyway I was wrong when I said this was going to be a character study like Catcher in the Rye... I mean I expected that I was going to be wrong... But I still feel as if it was a justifiable comparison with the information available to me... The lesson to take away... Don't judge a fic by it's prologue... I see that the rape is a major plot point instead being rape because rape is rape... Sorry it's just I was scared it was put in mainly for shock value... Sorry for that unjustifiable apprehension... Also I keep reading the comments that say either "Pick up the Goddamn plot" or "Nice to see your picking up the Goddamn plot". I want to let you know that plot isn't everything as long as you have a writing style that compliments your message... Catcher in the Rye is the perfect example where plot is thrown out and characterisation is the primary focus point Do whatever you like ^_^
I see that the rape is a major plot point instead being rape because rape is rape... Sorry it's just I was scared it was put in mainly for shock value... Sorry for that unjustifiable apprehension...
I can't say I understand what you mean by that bit about rape but most of the time, I'm pretty sure the writer is to trying to make a point. To some extent "shock value" is in your head. Raiders might seem like okay ponies if we weren't given reasons to think otherwise. There's a limited number of ways to give the impression of living in a daily hell and, aside from gore, rape is one of them. It's meant to be shocking and if you weren't shocked, then you might have a hard time seeing things from the character's perspective or understanding how naive some particular character is.
Maybe I haven't read enough of fics, but a lot of the FoE stuff seems to avoid dealing directly with characters with jaded points of view or ones who aren't particularly bothered by some things.
I was half expecting Felix to be standing behind her when she did it. I would've been all like,
I really hope the plot picks up a little.
Okay... Umm... Wow. You win today sir (or madam).
This is, what fallout should feel like. That gritty sensation that everything in the world is shit, you're shit, and there is nothing you can do to get rid of the stains that will forever mar your soul. Something no other FO:E spin-off has done successfully (that I know of) to date.
for you. Because you deserve it. I look forward to seeing where this goes.
(Do you happen to have a guestimate at when the next chapter will be released? Or is it going on a 'when you complete it' basis?)
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I unfortunately cannot provide an exact date for the next chapter. It all depends on my schedule and how much time I have between my classes to get the chapter done. Sorry about that.
And I'm glad the story is being enjoyed, thank you for the positive feedback everyone
1274318 Yah, I understand. Real life and all. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra2.png
Well, this is more like Fallout Equestria! You do the intra-fandom fandom proud. (I hope)
By Celestia, that was good. Like the prologue did you get the world just right, and can't wait to see what kind of Wasteland they will find, for with water to "baths" in and other hygienic foalishness and bread that do't sound to be 200years old does it sound to be something to look forward to on the other side of the wall.
The narrative style is still amazing, personal and hinting to a lot of thing here and there so you want to know more. And it is still nice that it is told in "bite" sized chapters. Not that I don't like to read 30K+ Fo:E fanfic in one go, but it can be a little much from time to time.
The only "bad" ting I would nitpick a little at is the use of Shayles tail, for there is a big difference between a zebras tail and a horses tail. Not that what you did was wrong in any way. But it would be nice to see in the text some more that she is a zebra and are using her body in a other way than ponies. And why did she use her mouth on the yucky leather when she could use her hoofs or tail?
"CAN'T WASH THIS BLOOOOOOOD OFF OUR HANDS!"
Anyway that's definitely quite the way to start a story. Going to read some more and hope you keep the quality up.
I figure I'm gonna do like a chapter by chapter reaction to this fic because it's so good...
Descriptive language I know...
Anyway I was wrong when I said this was going to be a character study like Catcher in the Rye...
I mean I expected that I was going to be wrong...
But I still feel as if it was a justifiable comparison with the information available to me...
The lesson to take away...
Don't judge a fic by it's prologue...
I see that the rape is a major plot point instead being rape because rape is rape...
Sorry it's just I was scared it was put in mainly for shock value...
Sorry for that unjustifiable apprehension...
Also I keep reading the comments that say either "Pick up the Goddamn plot" or "Nice to see your picking up the Goddamn plot".
I want to let you know that plot isn't everything as long as you have a writing style that compliments your message...
Catcher in the Rye is the perfect example where plot is thrown out and characterisation is the primary focus point
Do whatever you like ^_^
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I can't say I understand what you mean by that bit about rape but most of the time, I'm pretty sure the writer is to trying to make a point. To some extent "shock value" is in your head. Raiders might seem like okay ponies if we weren't given reasons to think otherwise. There's a limited number of ways to give the impression of living in a daily hell and, aside from gore, rape is one of them. It's meant to be shocking and if you weren't shocked, then you might have a hard time seeing things from the character's perspective or understanding how naive some particular character is.
Maybe I haven't read enough of fics, but a lot of the FoE stuff seems to avoid dealing directly with characters with jaded points of view or ones who aren't particularly bothered by some things.