Thank you for the review doomande, and I'm so glad you enjoy it so far! Thanks for the advice and the links, they'll definitely help me out as I continue writing this! And on the zebra's names, yeah, I didn't really know what would count as zebraish since in show we only know of one, and I never really liked how in FO:E fics every name seemed to be x's and z's everywhere, just felt repetative, so I tried to change it up a little.
Another good chapter, but that is not a surprise longer. It is still nice to see the personality of Shayle shining trough the way you write your story. Also nice to see a character with so much "knowledge" as she have. For it is nice to see how they are going to learn the Wasteland life
Also nice to see that you can write a interesting fight scene without loosing the focus from what there happens abound the Zebras. I think that this is also the first time I have read about a ghoul with glowing eyes. And by that way you sell it to us does I think that it should be lore!
I was surprised not to see any comments about fuckin' plot development... This chapter was good... It was nice to see some juxtiposition in this chapter with the humorous dialogue... When I first saw the decription to this fic I assumed it was going to hammer in the despair... No juxtiposition can be a good thing though... In Poe's "The Pit and the Penjilum" he really hammers in the fear of death and I still love that... I love this story and I love you ^_^ I cannot stress enough the fact that you should write the story however you see fit and their is no need to listen to others including me... This fic is by all means my favorite FoE fic... Besides the original... Your not that good... No offense
good chapter
Huh. Just yesterday I was hoping for this to update. And here we are.
Good update, and Yay Sepsis!
(This is rapidly turning out to be one of my favourite FO:E stories)
Thank you for the review doomande, and I'm so glad you enjoy it so far! Thanks for the advice and the links, they'll definitely help me out as I continue writing this!
And on the zebra's names, yeah, I didn't really know what would count as zebraish since in show we only know of one, and I never really liked how in FO:E fics every name seemed to be x's and z's everywhere, just felt repetative, so I tried to change it up a little.
Another day, another REVIEW TIME!
Another good chapter, but that is not a surprise longer. It is still nice to see the personality of Shayle shining trough the way you write your story. Also nice to see a character with so much "knowledge" as she have. For it is nice to see how they are going to learn the Wasteland life
Also nice to see that you can write a interesting fight scene without loosing the focus from what there happens abound the Zebras. I think that this is also the first time I have read about a ghoul with glowing eyes. And by that way you sell it to us does I think that it should be lore!
I was surprised not to see any comments about fuckin' plot development...
This chapter was good...
It was nice to see some juxtiposition in this chapter with the humorous dialogue...
When I first saw the decription to this fic I assumed it was going to hammer in the despair...
No juxtiposition can be a good thing though...
In Poe's "The Pit and the Penjilum" he really hammers in the fear of death and I still love that...
I love this story and I love you ^_^
I cannot stress enough the fact that you should write the story however you see fit and their is no need to listen to others including me...
This fic is by all means my favorite FoE fic...
Besides the original...
Your not that good...
No offense