Me gusta this story!

I won't spoiler it for anybody but I can already guess what the epilogue is going to be, and I'm going to be DYING to see it get there-- even if I enjoy the trip between.

Congrats on getting an all OC story onto Equestria Daily!

Thank you, thank you! It took some doing, but somehow I managed it. Hopefully I can continue to hold enough attention to warrant the full 40 chapters I wish to make this.

lovin it

Wow, what an interesting turn of events. I still have no idea whats going on. But way to go and kill the mare. OR DID YOU?

wow, didn't see that coming.

loving the story so far, I think I have something in my eyes

Oh man. This just keeps getting better and better, nice work!

Many of you who've read through all my chapters may have noticed that the Prologue and Chapters 1-4 have 'Chapter Topper' art - that is, a scene from the chapter in digital grayscale - but all chapters afterward do not. I would very much like to remedy this and my artists have encouraged me to range out in the community for new artists who would be willing to add their own artistic flare to this story.

So, if any of you are interested and are confident in your skills as an artist, please send me a private message with an example of your artwork and we'll work out the details from there.

Thanks to any of you who offer! I will, of course, add a link to your DA page under it like I have for both Wisdom Thumbs and Master Shake.

well done

Very interesting, I shall read more!

You have once again delivered a masterpiece of a chapter. I love these several thousand word chapters

And I enjoy writing them! Of course me continue is due in no small part to you, P3GACY, and the other commenters cheering me on. Thanks :)

If anyone has any critiques for me, don't be shy! I love being told what I'm doing wrong, so I can do it better!

Until next week!

Whisper's so adorable, and Novell's so oblivious. I think they make a wonderful couple. Heh. Keep up the good work, man. This story is lovely - and to think that I disliked shipping before I entered this fandom.

Loving every chapter of this fic! I patiently await the next installment of this great story!  Also, very curious to see how things develope between Whisper and Novell.

I don't understand why this isn't more popular. This is a fantastic story. GREAT CHAPTER, glad whisper is ok :)

Good chapter - but I must ask, what kind of roux did she have lying around? White, light, dark? Random as that is, I simply must know. Hehe. Also, I've probably said this before, but Whisper and Novell are a cute couple.

@Pegacy: I imagine it's the rather cliche synopsis I used that's keeping people from reading or maybe even the sheer length of each chapter. Of course, it could also very well be my writing, too!

@Dream: Dark, of course!

>>200076200076

Maybe the Google docs version is more popular?  

I hope you do the full 40 chapters you mentioned in another comment.  I for one would love to read it!

Roux is what exactly?  If it is something used in French cooking, I think I know, but I didn't think that's something you could really store for later?

That was a cool chapter.  It could use some more proof reading though.  A couple things I'd like to mention are in the dialog with Luna.  Several of the times that thy was used the word thou should have be used.  It might have sounded better too with shalt and art in a couple spots instead of shall and are.  Also, when novel was surprised that Luna knew his last name, she had already stated it before.

I still really enjoyed it and hope you continue to update.

>>223009223009

Thank you for pointing those mistakes out. They are corrected.

Really, really love this story!  Keep it up!

At the end, "Elcome to the griffon kingdoms" Fixit. Time to to read dis...

Thank you. I had some minor technical difficulties with my iPad, so it messed up in Google Docs. All fixed up!

Great update, and I like the resolution we got about Novell's cutie mark and his conversation with the Crusaders.

An invisible cutie mark? To quote Sweetie Belle: OH COME ON!!

I'm sorry but I feel GYPPED. Considering all the times it was dropped about him observing details,  using similes and metaphors and trying to think of turns of phrase for something, and the fact that the story up to this point was essentially him telling a story, and the fact his name ('novella') means "SHORT NOVEL",  I expected a storytelling cutie mark of some sort.

But an invisible cutie mark?

"Now come on and tell it right!"--- Fred Savage "The Princess Bride"

>>279500279500

Your disagreement with my idea is heard and understood completely, my friend. In fact, in the original version of this, that's exactly what Novell was supposed to get. But then I thought some more on it and realized that his name can mean two different things. Novell, if said as 'novel', can mean both a book, as well as something 'new and interesting'. An idea, if you will. Potential.

The pieces together quickly fell into place after that. You may have noticed that after Chapter 2, his similes, metaphors, and the like dropped off significantly. Instead, he started noticing things, began to see the potential in everything, became more creative in all aspects - not just storytelling and literary references. That was the purpose of the sculpture, a subtle hint that Novell isn't just all about storytelling and books.

I could go on and on about my reasoning and I admit forthright that there was a bit of deception involved, but if you look back, you'll see I had Novell be a creative pony, someone who can tell a masterful story or sculpt a figurine, however rudimentary, on his first try. To see the possibilities and understand them, see the potential.

I'm sorry you feel the way you do, but as some people say, 'write the story the way you want to write it'. It may not be to your liking and I don't expect everyone to agree with my decisions, but it is the way things are. I do hope you continue to read, because this story isn't over. It may be different than you're expecting, but I'm hoping it's still something new and interesting to you.

Novel, even.

>>279706279706

It's STILL a gyp and a cop-out. The point of a cutie mark is to be a VISIBLE representation of a pony's personality. A good writer knows when to stand his ground, but he also knows when to listen to common sense. It's the difference between George Lucas from "Empire Strikes Back" and George Lucas from "The Phantom Menace."

You just spent too long in the story (in fact, right from the START) establishing Novell as a budding storyteller. Changing it to "an ability to see potential" comes out of bloody nowhere. Anyone with any observational abilities is going to read the story, come to this point, go "WTH did this come from?", conclude you're just jerking their chain halfway through the story.... and then be really annoyed. when they get to the end and you're still sticking with the "invisible Cutie mark" angle.

1)  I would seriously recommend that you go with him still being off-base about his cutie mark, especially as the story is only at the half-way point. Yes, he's shown aptitudes at things other than storytelling, but a special talent is not a pony's ONLY talent. It's perfectly feasible that Novell had other talents but that they didn't quite sit right with him.

2) If you simply HAVE to persist with his talent being "seeing potential," one might argue that he doesn't have a cutie mark yet because he simply doesn't know or can't think of a symbol yet for Potential. As seen in the show, cutie mark interpretation is highly subjective--- it has to be something that the pony themselves sees as symbolic of their calling. Noone would ever guess that Cheerilee's three-daisy mark was a symbol for schoolteaching, after all.. except her. And "potential" is a pretty abstract concept (I've been googling for half an hour looking for appropriate symbols!)  Potential's pretty abstract concept, and he might just not have anything in mind yet as being an appropriate image of it--- like having a concept in mind but not knowing the right word to express it. And if he doesn't know how to express it, his cutie mark magic doesn't either.

I've found exactly two symbols that Novell might use. http://www.symbols.com/encyclopedia/32/322.html and http://www.symbols.com/encyclopedia/14/149.html

Image: http://www.symbols.com/pics/big/32/3201.gif

Image: http://www.symbols.com/pics/big/14/1408.gif

They're both old symbols.... The first is called the "seed of life," A japanese symbol for the conceptual starting spark of the universe---- the second is from ancient tibet, again a symbol for "potential."

>>281555281555

Actually, I knew from chapter 1 that his talent could be storytelling or something "novel", and by the time I got to this chapter I had already pretty much interpreted the clues as the author states above, especially the carving.  So, I wasn't really surprised when is talent was revealed to be seeing potential or seeing the possibilities (still seems open to interpretation a bit).  

But, he really didn't seem quite sure yet to me.  And yeah, I had not accepted that the mark is invisible till I read the comments and still have not.  Seems to me, as I've said, that his talent is "seeing" possibilities/potential, so his mark should be an eye (or anything to indicate sight, extrasensory ability, or perceptiveness) along with something to represent possibilities or potential. Symbols for potential by themselves only work if his talent is potential itself, but that doesn't quite work for the story thus far.  It would be an interesting route to base a story on though.

@ Croswynd

Some of the above is directed at you.  Feel free to respond.

I'm really digging your story so far. Keep up the good work!

Also, I like your new avatar. It's awesome!

Don't think it'd work though. Communal child raising? Eagles and lions both are very protective and possessive of their young.

Top-down totalitarian hierarchy? For lions, MAYBE. But raptors are solitary, as are most felines. and, again, very territorial.... as are most predators (one tiger to a hill, as it were.) Overall they'd have even less inclination to close, integral society than humans or ponies... and next to none for the collectivist features (communal child rearing, top-down assignment of life careers, etc) that you've added here.

Such is the beauty of a culture from a species that does not exist. You can make them anyway you choose.

The way I envisioned the culture is completely a Meritocracy, aside from, somewhat, the Matriarch's position. If a griffon is good at one thing, they are judged for that alone, rather than the actions of their parents. Such is the reason they are arranged in clutches from random families and raised by nestmaids unrelated to them. After they are sent to their specific areas, they are given knowledge of their family name and its history, but only to satisfy their curiosity. They can then connect with their families or not, and must keep secret their family names from any siblings who might still reside in the Nesting Aerie.

The Matriarch's position is a little different, due to how the Scepter of Will works. It cannot be stolen and can only be received by the griffon the previous Matriarch wished it to pass to. Thankfully with the way the culture is raised, most of the Matriarchs pass their station down to some griffon who deserves the position, from any of the Aeries.

But most of what I've just said here isn't required to enjoy the story, so I don't include all of it in the chapter.

>>390267390267 I was going to ask if you made the whole culture up yourself.  I found it quite fascinating.   Do you have any particular inspirations for it?

I really liked this chapter.  I noticed some doubts about Novell's mark?  Interesting.

Please keep up the good work!  You can be assured that this one reader enjoys it.

>>401818401818

I came up with the culture by myself, one that probably wouldn't work anywhere except the 'perfect world' scenario that the utopian society of Equestria resides in. I'm sure there were plenty of inspirations with it, mostly having to do with dwarven cultures in various fantasy worlds along with the matriarchial societies that animals often form. Even so, I couldn't name a specific one at the moment, but it's probably been done before, so I can't take credit.

I'm glad you're reading and commenting, elliot. Gives me a boost to my motivation to continue writing whenever I get a comment like yours or Realtycheck's.

>>402715402715 I was hoping I'd have that effect.   I really want to see this story done properly.  In other words, I don't want to see it given up on or made shorter than it deserves.  So you just keep those creative juices flowing and write this beyotch!

On a side note, at this point I'd rank the quality of this as very high, just under where I'd be willing to buy it as a paperback, but that's really high praise cause I'm quite cheap.   I think it's on track for a ranking upgrade though.

“By Clover the Clever’s Crafty Cerebellum?"  Even though all the words begin with C, the alliteration breaks down.  "Cranium" would be better.

Good point. I'll fix that forthwith. How's the story so far, if you don't mind me asking?

It seems like Novell's special talent should be sculpting.  First his initial effort at the inn, then his discerning eye with that ice sculpture.

Sometimes you have Luna use informal speech and at others thou hast caused her to speak most formally.  Why is this?  It has neither rhyme nor reason.  Particularly when thou takest care to point out in the narrative the oddity of her syntax.  Thy choices in this thing I shall not correct, save few.  As for the others, if thou wouldst allow me to proofread and guide thee to better usage, I know thy writing shall have improved flow.

“Where did you hear that name?” --> didst thou

“What did you say?” --> What saidst thou? (or) What didst thou say? (or) What art thou saying?

“You may perform the necessary arrangements.” --> Thou mayest

Recount how Havoc has been released from his prison, pegasus, for what you have done bodes ill for Equestria.” --> thou hast done

“Regardless of your feelings, Havoc has escaped... --> thy feelings

“We can still recapture him, if I have to do it myself. --> if we have to do it ourselves.

“Nothing. You and your friends are free to leave,” --> Thee and thy friends

“Thy wishes a punishment for being controlled, --> Thou wishest

Thy are free to go, young Novell.” --> Thou art

Perhaps thou will find information on Havoc in thy endeavor. --> thou wilt

“Quills, Scrolls, thou may use the Southern Belle to find thy Professor and help this young pegasus find Havoc.” --> thou mayest

“And finally thou, young Novell Light,” --> And finally thee (or) And as for thee

“Thou will find Havoc and report any of thy findings to one of our embassies stationed around the world. --> Thou shalt (or) Thou wilt

We would ask that thou do not engage or consort with this draconequus in any way, --> thou dost not engage nor consort with (or) thou engagest not neither consortest with (or) thou neither engagest nor consortest with (That one's a little tougher than the others.  Silly negations.)

Is this acceptable to thou?” --> thee?

No wonder one of our moonstones found its way to thou. --> thee

There are three fillies in Ponyville who might be interested in your story. --> thy story

Tell them of your trials with thy cutie mark problems before you leave on your journey. --> thy trials; thou leavest on thy journey (or) your cutie mark problems (Pick one style and stick with it.  Switching it up like you've done here creates confusion.)

I figured that the stressful situation with Havoc would cause Luna to be more formal with Novell, while interaction with Quills and Scrolls would be more informal.  She wouldn't change between Thee and You as freely as she seems to, though.  Unless she's making a conscious effort to switch over, and if that's the case the awkwardness of the shifts could be alleviated and explained by her apologizing for her stilted and archaic speech.  But just pick a reason to do what you do, and adjust everything to fit that reason.

"I have misssssed your jokes.” --> jokesssss.

“You remember well my placesssss, Ssssssearch,” --> placcccccesssss

“I musssst be gone sssssoon, as Celesssstia granted me leave only for a few daysssss in this Equessssstria. --> Cccccelessssstia

And should the CH in "Search" be extended too, as it has sibilant qualities?

On that note, how can "Boo" be a sibilant?

I'm enjoying this story, and dreading what will happen when Havoc reappears.

>>462343462343

This, this is exactly the kind of comments I love. Thank you very much for taking the time to go through all of the errors, Blik. It is extremely appreciated.

For Luna's speech, I had her intentionally switching between them as she became more stressed or relaxed, as this is some time after the events of Nightmare Night and the Princess is adjusting to the new world she finds herself in. I suppose that didn't come across well at all, so I'll go back and have her comment on her own speech like you've said (and correct the 'thee's I incorrectly used, of course :P).

For the dragon's speech, sibilant is strictly used with the letter 's' and, as you've corrected correctly, the letter 'c' in some cases. Therefore, 'Boo' cannot be sibilant and neither can the 'ch' in Search, since it is a sharp ending to a word.

Thanks again. Hope you continue to enjoy it, as the next chapter has some...items of contention contained within it.

>>462177462177 I like the story so far.  As we have left the magical land of Equestria, worldbuilding has increased, and Havoc presents a very real threat which the plot is steadily and visibly approaching.  The characters all have flaws and their interactions are natural, and none of them are Mary-Sues.  Dialog is also well thought-out.  I can see the characters changing and developing.  So you have passed pretty much all of my conscious green-flags for a good story.  I'm definitely subscribing to this one - I really want to see where it goes.  

My guesses for the upcoming plot: The Aerie is attacked by hippogryphs before they get a chance to either find Havoc or interview the Matriarch.  Also, a griffon will be added to their intrepid band of adventurers.

>>462605462605 Conjugating verbs in archaic style is not an easy thing.  I have an eye for it due to reading Shakespeare and the King James Bible which are fairly standard in their systems.  While I can't always explain why something is the way it is, I can usually tell what it's supposed to be.

And au contraire, mon frere.  The CH in "search" incorporates both a lingual plosive and a sibilant fricative.  So you could make the dragon say "Sssssearchhhh" if you think it appropriate.  And I pointed out that "Boo" is not a sibilant because in the text you clearly stated it was.

>>462638462638

Learn something new everyday. I'm happy to find someone more knowledgeable with the written word than I. Still, I think I'll keep it at the hard end with 'Search'. I overused the sibilance as is.

I hate when I read other stories then I completely erase my memory of this ones plot. Well whatever, a very interesting chapter, this one indeed

More like I just take forever to update that makes people forget :P

Hippogryphs with antlers?  If it weren't for the bird's head, I would be thinking you were describing a Peryton.

>>477700477700

Image: http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20071215003335/wowwiki/images/4/4a/HippogryphAPG.jpg

This is what I am basing them on, if you're curious.

Thanks, that definitely helps.

And you told me no one reads this story, yet look at all these comments. Tsk, tsk, Cros.

I demand a new chapter by....next Tuesday.

I wasn't feeling well this past weekend, so it took me awhile to get to this.

I totally was not expecting that opening.  Well played, sir.

Novell: "This was dangerous in so many more ways than he thought their rescue could get."  Apparently he's the one who's naive, not Pensive.

>>476142476142 I run into that problem too.  I usually check the end of the last chapter to remind myself what's going on some.  When this is complete, lucky people will be able to read through it without that problem.

Anyone else guessing that Havoc was responsible for the egg-breaking?

Look forward to seeing your stories in the que!  Can't wait for the next chapter!

Glad to see this return from Hiatus!

Checkov's guns.

Checkov's guns everywhere!

@ ending: Oh, come on!   A LITERAL cliffhanger?!

Oh, you!

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>>648669648669 I thought that was something that happened in the distant past.

Edit: But not so distant as to have occurred during Havoc's time.

No worries. Chapters'll be out in short order these days. Summer is finally here! But I do love my cliffhangers. Tune in next time for the startling next episode of Unmarked!

>>663695663695 What's the ETA on the next chapter?  I keep thinking about this story, wondering when it will update and worrying that I somehow missed it.

>>796129796129

I'll have to be honest, I've hit a rough patch of writer's block. The chapter has been coming together extremely slowly compared to usual. Story fatigue, probably, which is why I decided to end Unmarked in the next few chapters. It just came swifter than I thought it would. At any rate, the chapter is about half-finished but I can't really speak to when it'll be done. But your comments definitely help inspire me. Trust me, I know how annoying it is to wait for updates on stories you enjoy. I'll try to keep trucking on and moving faster.

>>802985802985 I hope that doesn't mean it will be ending too soon!   I mean, I can see it ending in the next few chapters, but ... just don't rush it please.   I'd rather wait another couple months for you to work through your block than see the story done a disservice.

If you're getting worn out on Unmarked, you might try writing something else for a bit, letting ideas for this story get worked through in your subconscious, and then coming back to Unmarked.  That seemed to work for a friend of mine.

Are you still planning a sequel?

>>802985802985

>>803554803554

Aaaaaa!!!!

Do not kill the story, pleeeeeese!

+100500 2 every word of lordelliott

Most of the authors simply pick one or more from mane6 with 'ready to use' personality, it nice to read in the first 5 fanfics, but later you get tired from it.

It is very hard to find good OC story here, with detailed personality of characters and interesting plot.

Unmarked is one of the best in my opinion.

Yes, it is bad situation when author gets entangled in global conspiracy plot so bulky that it overwhelms the story itself.

But I do not see nothing like that here.

You have breathtaking adventure here, your characters are not flat robots - they have volume and they develop during story, as well as their relations (Novell and Whisper relationship is delicious :)

And I like the way you do not give us more info that the main character could have - it keeps the story much more interesting.

Man, I hated you for one full day, because I unfortunately found 'unmarked' at the evening. I usually do not read from google docs and there was no link to fimfiction at EQD, but there was veeery interesting concept and nice cover art, so  I thought - 'give it a try, read few pages and if it worths something - add to readlater list'. It was horrible mistake. I simply was not able to put it down and go to sleep. I tried, I even turned off my mobile and went to sleep about 3 or 4 a.m., only to awake in one hour later and continue till morning.

I had one hour of sleep that day, and during of all full working day I hated myself for making such a mistake as starting this fic at evening, and you for writing such brilliant piece ;)

Please, do not kill the story !

May be it is really better to put it on pause for one or two month and than came back to it ?

I volunteer to remind you about if you are afraid that you will be too lazy to continue. Just let me know the date. And I think that I am not alone.

Anyway - you can always end story in such brutal way...

But may be you can instead give it one liiiiiiittle chance ?

>>804272804272

>>803554803554

Haha, thanks for all the comments you two, but the Unmarked's self-contained story arc (Novell and his cutie mark) is nearing its end. I've been planning for awhile to split the gigantic story in half once I realized that it's been around 400 pages so far. The sequel will be created, but Unmarked needs to reach its end. The sequel will be put on hold a month or two and then I'll start releasing chapters for it, as well.

This has been the plan. Have no fear, this story will end at its appointed time, not brutally cut short because I'm having trouble getting through it. Sorry if I made it seem that way. Regardless, your comments are definitely inspiring. Maybe they'll needle me into get that writin' done and moving. I think I'll go do that right now, in fact.

>>804406804406 That's good to hear.   Judging by past communications, I didn't think you would intentionally cut it short, but my inner Twilight just had to know for sure!   I'll just check that off my list of worries.

I'm also glad to here the sequel plans are still in effect!

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>>804406804406

It is a big relief to hear that it was misunderstanding and story is developing as intended.

And I am happy to know that there will be a sequel

Thank you for the story!

I wish you good writing mood

Is it bad that I immediately started to silently wish for a Novell x Whisper ship?

It's Han Solo frozen in carbonite! Ugh, wrong story again!

Excellent work, keep it up!

>>820419820419

Yes! Very bad! VERY VERY BAD!

Why? Um.....I dunno.

Anyway, the chapter was pretty good, Cros, if shorter than your norm. Not that that's a bad thing, because you ended it at a great spot. Certain spots could have used some work though, as I believe they fell short of their intended purpose.

Regardless, it was still great. I'm glad you've stabbed your writer's block in the face multiple times. Now we can steamroll towards the ending, right?

Thanks for the update !

Wonderful chapter

Well, that explains how she's still alive.

it's obviously Captain Amareica

>>10175941017594

...genius...

>>10239121023912

why thank you.  i may or may not have lifted that from someone else i cant remember

>>10036671003667>>10054971005497>>10117271011727>>10175941017594

Alright, I'm really sorry about all this blasted delay. I don't know what came over me this past summer, but it totally destroyed any progress on Unmarked. So, with college back in session I have less time, which means I'm working harder. With that comes progress. The next chapter is 2883 words in at the moment, where it's sat for the last six weeks. I'm working on it now. Fatigue, writer's block and anything else, you're going down.

I'm just unhappy I made you guys, my fans, wait so long between updates. Off we go.

>>12660981266098  Yeah, summer can be the boon or bane of all inspiration.  You tend to make your chapters really full and long, so I imagine it takes quite a bit of time and effort to write it all.

>>12660981266098

>Off we go.

>>12682251268225>>12669191266919

Good news! Chapter's done, just waiting for my pre-readers to edit and it'll be up, probably near the middle of the day on the 16th of September. Look forward to it.

ow!

cliffhanger !

Excellent chapter anyway :)

Raise your hooves, who saw that kiss coming from miles away?

*puts hoof up*

Out of the crypt and into the dungeon.  Ouch!

Instead of replying, she grabbed him and pulled him into a kiss. Novell’s eyes widened, Whisper’s own closed as they hovered there for what felt simultaneously like seconds and hours. When she pulled away, the white pegasus almost forgot how to flap.

Bout time!

they FINALY kissed. I saw this coming chapters ago.

*sees cover art* all OCs? well well well*sees the two in the right hand corner.* LOL

will read later

Kalyn laid a hand on his nestmate’s shoulder

I think you mean claw?

Also, there are a few paragraphs that start with "____" instead of an indent.

At the end, I'm assuming (ass u me ) that Search stepped on a trap, although you never really said or, more importantly, addressed why Whisper was the only one who couldn't tell.  Is she blind?  "Come on!"

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>>820419820419  

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I think that's the best idea ever.

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Amber will be reunited with her mother

Amber is the mother, right?

wings flared out and send a shockwave of air rippling

*sent

Instead of replying, she grabbed him and pulled him into a kiss. Novell’s eyes widened, Whisper’s own closed as they hovered there for what felt simultaneously like seconds and hours. When she pulled away, the white pegasus almost forgot how to flap.

Finally!

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The story could just end there! ... On second thought, no, but yeah, I'm happy.

Got about halfway through.  I'll drop another comment whenever I finish the chapter.

And so it begins. I shall have read this story by the end of tonight hopefully

very nice. Your very good at painting a picture. When I was reading about the Pegasi diving i was listening to a song called "no ordinary morning" by "Chicane". Fitted it perfectly

this chapter reminded me of a story from my childhood called "the not so ready Yeti". I doubt you've read it, and I doubt even more that you were thinking of it when writing this chapter.

so good

I want to scream

I am hopeful its the old story cliche of Pony thinks new friend has died, then they get reunited.

But the fact that Novell is accepting Whisper's death so easily points towards it being different

I liked whisper

Yey! I knew whisper couldn't be dead. Also, this needs more views.

>>15803981580398

Oh, wow, that's a lot of comments.

Anyway, thanks for reading so far. I do agree it needs more views, but that's the egotistical writer in me. Share it with all your friends and ask them to share as well! Favorite and like!

For the rest of you, the next chapter will be out this month. That much I can promise.

Finally finished!

So, I found a couple more little errors, but nothing big.  I would share them, but I was too into the story to keep track as I read.  The second half of this chapter was exciting, and the end was just: Woah!   Just when I thought I had figured out most of the mysteries, you threw in a whole new batch!   If the end really is coming soon, as you said, then it seems it's going to be one hell of a ride from here with the fast pace that will be required.

Edit: I was just looking at the story page, and I can't believe this story still has fewer than 100 total comments still!!!

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This chapter got a major fist pump. I was skeptical at first. But this story is just incredible. I mean it. I'm looking forward to the next chapter now. and THAT KISS!!! you have all my likes and all my support!

I gotta say, this story's getting really good.

Another great chapter.

No, seriously. Give me another great chapter. Like, now.

UPDATE !!!!!!

Squeee!!!

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Emmm...

I mean - wonderful chapter dear Sir, thank you !

I friggin loved the ending. Skycrasher is amazing.

Hell yeah, this was a great chapter. Please sir, may well have some more?

I love how the relationship between Novell and Whisper has developed, it's very believable.

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Just one more chapter and an epilogue left for Unmarked. I'm only 5 thousand words in at the moment, but with NaNoWriMo spurring me, the last chapter is coming along fine. It might end up at 15k+ words, though, so at least the last chapter will be full of content. Best of all, you won't have to wait two months for it at the rate I'm going!

Glad you've all enjoyed the ride so far. Bear with me 'til the end, yeah?

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I'll gladly bear with you and see where this story goes. You've done an excellent job thus far and I don't doubt you will impress us further as we continue on this wild journey with you.

So I guess the end is upon us...

Anywhoozle, it's been a great ride so far. I'll be looking out for your update with eager anticipation. I do hope you'll still be writing fan fiction once you've finished this one. Right? RIGHT?

I can wait 2  months.

. Its been entertaining

100th comment! Woo! A milestone, to be sure.

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And don't worry, Unmarked is only half the story. Well, maybe a little less, since I've been planning to write a compilation of stories from each character in individual settings called 'The Professor's Logbook'. That should be coming soon after Unmarked is finished. It'll tell of how Rell was given Rez, what Scrolls was up to while everypony else was in the mountain and the adventure that led to the falling out between Amber and the Professor! Not to mention short stories on Skycrasher, a letter from The Warden of the Stream and maybe even a few illustrations now and again about plants like the Dazey.

Aside from the Logbook, though, there's still the sequel to Unmarked. I'll be releasing a journal after Unmarked's finished to delve deeper into that and ask for some input on the release schedule.

But I'm getting ahead of myself. Look forward to the thrilling conclusion of Unmarked sometime before the end of the year! Hopefully November, though!