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After she stood up to her mother, Diamond Tiara worked very hard at school and eventually, took over the family empire and has had a successful career as a business pony. However, there's always been something missing from her life... After Crusaders of the Lost Mark, she left Ponyville for boarding school, never to see her best friend Silver Spoon again... Now, ten years later, something new happens...

Chapters (18)
Comments ( 23 )

11123644
Knowing me and my writing, that's for later on! However, sex is never really the focus of my stories...

Looks like you started out the first paragraph in third person past tense before switching over to present tense. No real harm though. A lot of nice little details here and there that aren’t necessarily vital to a story but provide color and atmosphere.

11123920
That's part of the art of storytelling, my friend! The idea is to provide the right details in the right amounts in order to create an immersive experience for your audience. And my writing style tends to change tensing a lot, depending upon how I want certain passages worded. Technically, no grammatical rules have been broken, as long as I remember to change clauses between tense changes.

Baked potato on a pizza is not something that one would expect to be good until one has actually tried it. Even one slice is surprisingly filling.

very nice and sweet, I hope you might write a serious clop chapter, but I love the interaction between them.

nice chapter, please continue

Very nice chapter, I like where this is going

Takes awhile to break through Diamond's shell

11155459
This is true! She's ultra stubborn, like me! That's one reason she's not a bad archetype! I decided to move away from "stoner humor" in this story and branch out a bit. Also, I just now noticed the centering issue and corrected it! I really should do a "pre-flight check" from here on out! :P

11155464
curious to know if you've checked out any of my stories and what you might think of them

11155466
Well, I'll be done with the current story I'm reading soon and I'll definitely scope that out later when the time comes!

11178127
Well, yeah! Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon are both mares! As in, female ponies! This is a lesbian romance story...

11207019
I was married for six years you know... I... I swear, I had that at one point! Somebody to come home to, you know? But with the estrogen in my brain changing it, and everything else that happened to me, it feels disconnected now... Like it was another life if that makes any sense? I'm going to write a lament about this in my blog soon, but I'm not ready yet...

Not bad...
The wedding was sweet.

I loved the wedding, hoping to see more of this story soon...
(also interested in a full clop scene if you're feeling adventurous,LOL)

11410748
I'd be lying if I said the thought hadn't occurred to me. The real problem with that is, I'd need a premise...

very cute chapter, nice to see Filthy being more than accommodating to his daughter.

Very nicely done, thank you.

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