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Fleetfoot, the second-in-Command of the Wonderbolts, takes a small break after a rigorous training session. Little did she know or even comprehend she'd be reliving not only past traumas but a long lost friend in the process.
This is a story I wrote for the May 2022 Pairings Competition and I'm actually quite happy with it.
The amazing new art for this story was made by my friend Leanne264 and I am so delighted for it!
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This is a cute little story. You did a good job with this for how long it is, but like a lot of romances, I think it could have been better if it had been a little bit longer. I realize you're doing this for the pairing competition, but Fleetfoot was a bit of a risky choice for this, as she doesn't have a very strongly defined personality to build off of. She definitely has a personality as you've portrayed her here, but she still feels like the blander of the two main characters. If you had spent a little more time adding some character details, I think this could have been a lot better.
It's a very short story but a very nice one and a very interesting shipping fuel between these two so fleetfoot wanted to go somewhere to eat but her hunger got the best of her but the pony got her up but it was not just a pony it was donut Joe and apparently fleetfoot knows him and they never seen each other for a long time and basically catching up with each other how they been doing lately and it turns out they met each other when they were little and he was helping her when she got injured which that Was pretty sweet of donut Joe but when they look outside it was starting to rain but those two would just sit in there finally together and again this looks pretty sweet keep up the good work