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Ever since Princess Twilight Sparkle's coronation, a subtle shadow has loomed over Equestria. As it would happen with such a big change in the world, her new reign has started many smaller ones. Some will be for good.
Some won't.
Trixie has just discovered the emergence of a great evil that's taking advantage of these changes. Such a monster will stop at nothing to grab any power it can.
Unless the magician can stop her.
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*Shivers*
Dude I know you may not feel it.... but you still got the skill.
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Eh, let's call it a draw. I'm definitely still out of focus.
Nicely written and very dark.
You know, when I saw the title, Trixie character tag, and the new great evil, my first thought was "Is her evil sister, Checker Monarch from GBoYH gonna be in this?" And I called it!
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I used to be subtle, I swear. Though, there's an indication I'm still out of focus. A better tittle would have been stalemate, or look up a type of chess gambit that applies.
Anyhow, glad you liked it.
What a very exquisite story, I must say that you have done an excellent job with the writing on this one. I actually have heard of The “Trixie's Gettin' Back On Her Hooves” universe but I am unsure whether it is a good read or not. Would you by any chance recommend this series, from a reader’s perspective or not? Also, the story and how it develops are excellently well done. The only suggestion that I could give you to make it even better would be to make a sequel one shot that goes over the aftermath of this event. After all, the deaths of two ponies, one the head of a massive corporation and the other a distant friend of Twilight would most certainly be a headline story for the papers, wouldn’t you agree? I would love to see the various reactions that Twilight and friends would have about such a event. That’s all I have to say for now, once again thank you for the absolutely excellent story.
Kind regards,
SonicDJM
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I've only read the original fic, and the Magic Duel sequel. Both are great reads, and high ranking in my personal favorites, so of course I recommend them.
IDK about a sequel, though starting with the journalist perspective sounds like a tempting idea.
Glad you enjoyed the read.
Well, coming in I didn't know it would be from that universe. But Monarch is kinda telling. The story... I'm kinda dissapointed. No, the story is good. I'm sad that Trixie will not live to tell Twilight what she has done, and just live to enjoy life without that freak. Pyrrhic victory, and I don't like it. Leaves extremely bitter taste.
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Oh, definitely. I was in a dark place when I wrote this (as you can see on the notes, the dictatorship was on my mind). I needed to get out a lot of poison, just as Trixie's radiation spell (hence why it shines blue, like ionized air, instead of the usual green or purple for poison in fantasy).
Setting wise, I don't consider this to be on the same universe as Shadow Raikou's story. More like a divergent, where Trixie never saw Monarch again, canon happened as in the show, and after the coronation, Monarch and Trixie were set to collide. But even then, I had a far different backstory here. Like, the Monarch family on itself being dedicated to power and control, and Trixie leaving them behind and changing her name to Lulamoon, like some queer people end up having to do. Hell, at the back of my mind, Trixie was trans in this story, something I'm pretty sure isn't the case in Shadow Raikou's version either.
All in all, this was a dark story I'm not too proud of. But it did came out better than expected, by all accounts.
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Apart from Trixie being trans(gender?), and "bad ending" this story would get an upvote from me. Like I said, solid story, I just don't like the ending. Maybe you can rewrite it, with Trixie either just not falling to posion(having a number of anti-posion and vitality spells with Twilight's help, maybe), or being saved in prologue, by Twilight, who knew that SOMETHING was happening. Twlight, being friends with Applejack and Fluttershy would not approve direct murder, but rather found Trixie's death note, or something, rushed to Monarch's office, barrel through security, and found dead Monarch, and seemingly dead Trixie. I'm also not above Twilight having problems not being able to get Trixie out of jail(but no death sentence), but trying to.
Also, Hulk is green, and he basically IS radiation. In some cartoons he also glows green, when he get's extra angry.
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In story, Trixie just released a lethal dose of radiation. Neither of them is gonna get out of there alive, which is basically the main point; Trixie concluding there wasn't other way to stop Monarch other than killing her, and accepting she as a killer can't get away impune. To save Trixie (preventing her from firing the radiation spell), is to save Monarch, and that would be back to square one, only now Monarch would have the leverage of an attempted murder against her for public image.
From a meta perspective, changing it around so to save Trixie and still kill Monarch defeats the purpose. The point of the story is being a dead end. Trixie encountering a problem without an easy solution and deciding to give herself up for others. A stark contrast from her usual characterization of a selfish pony who would have ignored the situation and move away to avoid the fallout.
So, all in all, it reaches a Ship of Theseus situation; yes, this could be rewritten around a different end goal, different set-up and different characterizations. But after that, is it still the same story, or an entirely different one? I don't have the answer, just mussing over the concept. Personally, the subject in this story are a tad too heavy for me to revisit at the time being.
On the radiation thing, I was taking more inspiration from real life, like the blue light described by witness at the Chernobyl plant disaster, or the ones during the Demon Core experiment. A quick googling says the effect's name is the 'Vavilov–Cherenkov effect', also known a Cherenkov radiation.
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Also, yes, transgender. It was around that time I found out Lauren Faust meant for one of the characters from Season 1 to be trans, and that Trixie was meant to be originally a stallion. So, I found a couple of fanfics on the subject, and the idea of Trixie as a trans mare stuck to me.
But that's just background info, since it didn't come up in the narration. I did consider make Checker commenting on it, preying on Trixie's dysphoria, but it fell a wee bit out of place along everything else, so it got scrapped.
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Well, it's not transgender then. Just a different character, with same interests and name, or whatever. How to describe it... alternate universe flip. Celestia was the one, who fell to Nightmare, or whatever. They never WERE different for themselves. Trixie was ALWAYS a mare, or was ALWAYS a stallion, nothing trans here. But that's my take.
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Well, I would think it is the same story, only with more consequences. Twilight is VERY cross with Trixie, Trixie is tried for murder and is put away for life. Maybe the dirt on Monarch DOES surfaces after Monarch bites the dust, and any ponies who are interested in keeping it quet are not enough anymore, not with this much scrutiny, as Trixie had to have motive for murder. Maybe Monarch is tried post-mortem for high treason?
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Eh, I still wrote her as trans in this story, hence her cutting ties with her family up to the point of changing her last name. So, that's a thing
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Again, I think that starts being another story. For starters, nothing of what Monarch does here is illegal or even considerable as treason (both plotpoints of why Trixie can't just tell Twilight). Or at least not without heavy anti-trust laws to prevent a media monopoly, implied to not be the case, since Monarch Entertainment managed to become a media trust through Celestia's period.
Again, ship of Theseus; to get that kind of continuation, it requires a lot of changes.
And again, this was a really heavy writing for me. So I'm not planning on revisiting it in the time being.
Trixie isn't much of a Great and Powerful Trixie here. It could be good with some other background pony like Lyra or Bon Bon, Octavia, even Dr. Hooves.
Also Trixie is dead - again. Foreshadowing? Don't do this to me
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Yeah, kind of an accidental pattern there, isn't it?
I promise she doesn't die in Weltendämmerung or Ash Witches.
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Just coming back to this comment:
You might want to rethink green color. Green might stand for radiation.