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I'll tell you in the car.

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While Twilight is working, Flash takes time to keep their foals busy with a few silly questions of his own.

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Nice, short, cute and adorable

Regarding long description:
"of his own"? Are we supposed to assume the foals ask silly questions? Seems like saying that in a new sentence before the existing one would be clearer.

Story itself:

“Oh my. It sounds like you had a much more interesting day than mommy,” Twilight said. The twins nodded, yawning as they clung to their mother. “What do you say we pick up some toys and have a little nap so auntie Luna can see you before she has to go to work?”

Nice bit of continuity/world-building... and a clever way to get foals to nap by Twilight (although who knows who invented it... Luna, Shining, Cadance, Flash, and her are the most likely candidates).

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