The Seventh Company of the solar guard should have left the town Grimbush to its own devices, but when a letter asking them to clear out a pest invasion lands in their possession, they have no choice but to oblige.
Disgruntled and annoyed, the soldiers march into the mire only to find something far deadlier than they expected.
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lets FUCKING GO
Glad to see this finally go live. The setting is oppressive, eerie, and always rife with the sense of something larger just out of view, but the comraderie of this tightly-knit royal guard platoon is just so well captured. I feel like I've read an entire novel on them even in the short little window into their lives we're shown.
Brilliantly written. Thanks very much for posting this.
This is excellent. It's gripping from beginning to end. Thanks for writing it!
this slaps
leave it to you to write a story set in a swamp with a perfect, despairing, melancholic, beautiful atmosphere
everything about grimbush is simultaneously enticing and repulsive
the characters all feel alive, Sinnet waves bright red death flags from her introduction but you took her and you made her into something more poignant and fitting with the kinds of themes you're circling around throughout the story
Sonnet's narration, the way that his tribe and culture play into what he's seeing and feeling and the building tension leading to the action are all very well done
shit's pretty fuckin creepy, i desperately want more
make time lapse and sonnet kiss next >:3
This is really really well written. Very engaging throughout.
What a lovely story. This scratches a "Southern Gothic thriller" itch I have had rather well.
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This gave me some real Hunt :Showdown vibes, to the point that I thought this would be a surprise crossover. Damn good writing too
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I'm so incredibly flattered by the feedback I've received for this story. I'm pretty shy when it comes to my writing, so this has been some amazing encouragement to keep putting stuff out there.
I wish there were better words than "thank you" to express how much this means to me.
You guys rock!
It's strange. Normally in situations like this it would turn out that the swamp ponies were actively hostile to outsiders or something but here...
Here it doesn't seem like they're against the Guard. Sure, the old mare was being aggressive and mildly racist, but on some strange level I kind of get the impression that she doesn't really mean the guard ponies harm. If anything, the fact that she was willing to warn them that the swamp tends to alter things for the worse and that none of the locals kept dogs suggests that she doesn't want them to throw their lives away.
There is a dark, twisted mystery lurking at the heart of Grimbush... and the Equestrian Guard is now aware of it.
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As you said, showing more of your stories is a good place to start.
Two words: more pls
Wow this is the best thing I've read in a while, the setting was so detailed I could almost smell the swamp mud and hear the Buzz of the mosquitoes. Your getting a thumbs up and a favorite, and I'm gonna read this again.
Well I certainly enjoyed this
Absolutely love Guards just doing guard stuff even if it dosent turn out good at all. Poor Sinnet tho She didnt deserve all that but it dose explain the weird things about her.
10/10
This is great, I'm not joking, This is just *Chefs kiss*
A rather terrifying story, that's for sure.
Is Evening Sonnet a stallion? Because there's a portion of the story where Docks is referred to as "our stallion" so I'm a bit confused.
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Yep! Evening is a total dude and a cutie.
Very good horror story and very well done.
You definitely have talent.
Monk
"Anon had never known a bat pony to shy away from carnage. They were cuter than kittens, and much more bloodthirsty." -HeideKnight
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I'll have to take your word for it since I can't get his pictures up. But I loved the chemistry between the three of them throughout the story.
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he's a good boah
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Yeah he's a cutie alright.
I have a guard character who would probably get along with him well enough. Although he'd take very poorly to Stepping Stone.
I thought this was gonna be an everybody dies type story.
I am happy it was not
Poor Hitch... She is gonna be disabled for the rest of her life cause of this
Hey this was pretty good.
was thinking to myself, "man this feels very cold in gardez-y." The hollow shades reference sealed the deal, lol. Really awesome fic overall!
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Oooh, does he have a story centered around Hollow Shades?
11659948 I would highly highly highly recomend "The World Is Filled With Monsters!" Sort of a similar vibe to your fic, with lots of explosions and kissing and stoic ponies
Nice. It felt...I dunno. It felt like a good story written by a person you can go and have a beer with. When you see stories on the shelves, the authors feel like some abstract person on another social tier. This felt like someone real had written it. That probably doesn't make sense, but it's how I felt reading it.
Also, quick note, I think there's a spelling mistake with "manicale". Other than that, it was good. I was expecting a tragedy, but it was something better.
Pretty good, though the ending doesn't make sense to me. Why in the world didn't Lapse unleash the spell on the monsters and just let them retreat? Yell to every unicorn that can cast electric-based spells to charge up, and fry the entire lake with a massive lightning blast. Bit of illegal fishing, but hey, I'm sure he could have gotten away with it.
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Oh shhhiiiiiiiid thank you for the catch! Much appreciated.
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MMm, yeah, I wanted this scene to be more about Lapse letting them know that both sides would lose a lot if they decided to fight. I haven't explained much of how I think magic would work in that universe, but asking all the unicorns to conjure up something that they might not specialize in would be a big ask.
I'll try to be clearer on this in future stories!
oh this is a wonderful story! creepy shit in the woods is my favorite genre ever
Grindylows remind me of Langoliers.