The mane six end up incarcerated at the hooves of chrysalis
I’ll be keeping an eye on this.
I’m particularly waiting for Twilight’s capture and seeing how she’s treated in this place.
If I can give you one piece of advice: drop the usage of "would" when it doesn't describe either future in the past, hypotheticals or past habits. Otherwise, stick with the past simple for a narrative usage.
10954364Thanks for the advice, I think it’s just a force of habit when I’m writing. 👍
Fun, it's been a while sense I have been hopping for this pink of story, can't wait to see the next chapter of this, keep it up.
The words, “permanent bondage” scare the fuck out of me so I won’t be reading this.
10955698No offense, but why even comment, then???
10956885To be fair, something like this is good to know for a writer.
We can’t expect good things all the time. AND negative comments are good for building a tougher skin.
This set up is great.
I’m so glad you took a whole chapter to do it.
It really builds the environment. And the horror.
This is definitely going on my watch list.
I’ll be keeping an eye on this.
I’m particularly waiting for Twilight’s capture and seeing how she’s treated in this place.
If I can give you one piece of advice: drop the usage of "would" when it doesn't describe either future in the past, hypotheticals or past habits. Otherwise, stick with the past simple for a narrative usage.
10954364
Thanks for the advice, I think it’s just a force of habit when I’m writing. 👍
Fun, it's been a while sense I have been hopping for this pink of story, can't wait to see the next chapter of this, keep it up.
The words, “permanent bondage” scare the fuck out of me so I won’t be reading this.
10955698
No offense, but why even comment, then???
10956885
To be fair, something like this is good to know for a writer.
We can’t expect good things all the time. AND negative comments are good for building a tougher skin.
This set up is great.
I’m so glad you took a whole chapter to do it.
It really builds the environment. And the horror.
This is definitely going on my watch list.