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A new alicorn has arrived in Ponyville. She seems to have many extrodinary but unrealistic abilities,
such as being able to change the force of gravity and bending fire.
Yet she has no cutie mark.
Twilight Sparkle has a very hard time believing that this pony is real.
The strange, talented pony, named Turquoise, for her fur color, seems like she's not a real pony, and gradually, Turquoise begins to be suspected by the citizens of Ponyville.
Twilight Sparkle eventually decides that Turquoise does not only have pony blood in her.

She may also be part of another species.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 6 )

:facehoof: I accidentally deleted a total of 11 paragraphs that I just wrote, so sorry if this storyis going along way too slow. My ther stories will temporarily be pt on hiatus.

Yay!
I finally set up that cliffhanger for what's coming up.

The formatting needs alot of work. The enter and Tab keys are your friends. Also I spotted alot of capitalization errors. I suggest looking this over again or getting an editor..

A new alicorn has arrived in Ponyville. She seems to have many extrodinary but unrealistic abilities, such as being able to change the force of gravity and bending fire. Yet she has no cutie mark. Twilight Sparkle has a very hard time believing that this pony is real. THe strange, talented pony, named Turquoise, for her fur color, seems like she's not a real pony, and gradually, TUrquoise begins to be suspected by the townspeople (People normally means humans. 'Citizens of Ponyville'?) of Ponyville. Twilight Sparkle eventually decides, (No need for this comma.) that Turquoise does not only have pony blood in her. She may also be part of another species.

It normally helps if you make sure the description doesn't have obvious typos before you publish it.

Gotta say, you get a thumb up just for the cover.

Sorry for the spelling errors.
My iPad acts really strange when typing these days..

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