It's perfect👍

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Thanks. There will be more chapters to come, and I hope they'll receive the same response.

awesome chapter mate keep it up can't wait for the next chapter

10966079
Thx

Like the new zebra OCs, and your writing continues to improve!

10966111
thank you!

A good start

10966312
Thank you

10966619
Youre welcome, eager to see how it continues

The story looks entertaining and has a good scoop. Especially the background that the ruling Celestia wants to send support to certain countries to unify them or have a certain level of control over them. (My conspiracy)

I must say that Zuri is an interesting girl, I liked the description. I can tell that these girls may already have a history of nastiness for these things, or at least with the substantially well endowed studs.

I could say that the story certainly hooked me enough to want another chapter.

And another thing I noticed was that the young Midnight does not have that notorious characteristic of his Innocence, as in this "universe" he has some knowledge of sex or at least he feels particularly attracted to girls, either for a Background story that we don't know about Midnight here, or maybe you just wanted to change it.

In any case I like it. I hope there is a match for Midnight if it is the case of what I mention. If you know what i mean?

Zafire: I like my idea ... At least a wink in your story would not be bad, dear.

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Ah, thank you for noticing Midnight's shift in personality.

I like to think of his new personality as conservative. He's concious about sex, as we'll see in the next chapter, and he's attracted to girls, but he never tries to know anything about it more than what he already knows. He tries to steer away from any lustful thoughts that his mind might produce. This is somewhat easier to do in Equestria since he's always stuck in the military which at least is competent enough to begin helping other nations (perhaps Shining has more free time to realize Midnight's innocence earlier and explain everything to him). But in Zebrica he isn't in his usual environment and is exposed to a lot of girls who want to get into his pants, or who are either sexy enough to look at or at least more open about the subject.

Zuri is open about the subject, since she mentioned his wingspan and how she was looking at it, but has never explicitly wanted to have sex with him, and more or less wants to be his friend for his journey, somebody he can go towards for help. Tisha on the other hoof might already have her sights on him, and spoilers, she'll be the cause of why three zebra mares will be sharing the bed with Midnight.