Applejack finds a strange visitor in her apple orchard one day, with even stranger stories to tell...
MLP/L4D2 crossover. My first story on FiMfiction.net! May add more tags as story progresses.
Credit for the image goes to brokencreation on DeviantArt.
Left 4 dead... Ellis was one of my favorite!! KEEP GOING MAN IM LIKING IT!!!
And one more reason to hate Rochelle.
Not bad. Take my stars.
Oooh what Nick said to Coach was just goddamn brilliant! Tracked!
PLEASE UPDATE FOR THE LOVE OF CELESTIA!!!!!!
GREAT character work btw
1) I always knew it would be Rochelle that messes things up (no offense to her or anything).
2) Hot Damn, that was good. Keep it up!
Rochelle... You are always there when we need you... BUT THEN YOU FUCKING STAND AROUND EATING MEDIKITS LIKE WHORE!!!
wow some deep stuff cant wait til the next part
Hey, this is Manny^, I made an account just to rate and track this story. Keep up the good work!
i really had no clue as to this deep-seated hatred of Rochelle... To be honest, I kinda sorta always liked he-
Rochelle: AXE ME A QUESTION!
dude, this is some good stuff, keep it up man. take all my stars and a track.
That's my queue to hit her with an axe. Which I enjoy.
I can't even explain why I hate her. I think it's just cause she is the computer always doing the stupidest things.
i.e. I shoot a which and start to run away (lol) when Rochelle starts healing me and gets me slaughtered...
Same here. Except it's when eveyone is about to die, and the only survivor left is Rochelle...and she also has a medkit, which she then uses on HERSELF.
MOAR CANNON ACTIVATING IN
Hahaha, she uses the medikits in all the wrong ways!
Wow... The dialog is exactly as I would imagine it. I could just see all of this happening in my mind.
AH LUV HURSES
Freakin' Rochelle, ALWAYS mess it up!
God dammit Rochelle...
Rochelle was a bot wasn't she
Still this fanfic looks soooo awesome please keep up the good work and update soon.
That creeps me out.
please sir> take all my internets
Oh, I've gotta see where this story goes...
I like this, Keep it up. And if you don't..... Oh celestia save us all.
Great, i am getting bored and i think i have read all the good fanfics then this pops up. It's dangerous to go alone! take these! *hands five stars*
Like the story so far, although there are numerous errors like "Coach pick zombies off," pick should be picked, and other things like that. I'm just being nitpicky though. You did better than most people.
this could get very interesting
Yet another story to track at one in the morning.
PONIES, Y U NO LET ME SLEEP
You had me at Left 4 Dead+ Ponies. I feel compelled to re-buy the second game now, I wonder if anyone still plays it...
That is all
I dropped everything and read this as soon as I saw it. I look forward to more.
THIS ONE TIME ME AND MY BUDDY KEITH.....took an arrow to the knee by some bastard who stole our sweet rolls that we bought from some people from HammerFell that had CURVED. SWORDS.
Keep this up now you magnificent pony
NOT CURVED SWORDS! THE HORROR!
In other news, tracking. I want to see where this goes.
update this now.............
i ever tell you this one time my buddy kief and i watched this show called my little pony?
You had me at hello.
GET READY EVERYPONY HERE COMES THE MOST CREATIVE COMMENT EVAR:
Dayum. Rochelle, rochelle, Rochelle. This is why EVERYBODY KILLS YOU FIRST!!! So you dont fuck shit up and kill Ellis.
Ellis and Bill are best survivors.
Man, the MLP community produces a lot of quality fanfiction, doesn't it? I'm interested to see where this goes. Track'd.
That said, there were a couple of errors that detracted from the experience: the story never seemed to stay in one tense - it was always switching between present and past, which is awkward to read. Additionally, there were a decent number of minor spelling errors (it's = it is, its = possessive). While not enough to ruin the story, they were prevalent enough to make it wonky to read.
These are fairly minor errors, though - the story itself has a lot of promise, and I really look forward to the next updates of this. I mean, we must have at least "AH LUV HORSES" out of Ellis when he wakes up to find himself in a land of marshmallow ponies.
I don't understand why everyone hates Rochelle so much. The only reasons I ever hear are A) things all the bots have in common, and B) AXE ME A QUESTION, which come on you guys, every group needs someone to make the bad puns.
TRACKED.. Take all 5 of my stars you villian..
>>8146681466 I thank you for your feedback. Quite frankly I wasn't aware that "its" is possessive. Just goes to show that the English language is one of the hardest in terms of grammar. As for the tense change, that is probably my biggest flaw in writing right now. I just got done writing a present tense script-fic and even then I kept switching to past every once in a while. I should probably proof-read my stories, anyway... I usually charge through them and then shove them on the internet for everyone to see.
Again, I thank you for your time and feedback and I am glad you enjoy the story.
▲ ▲ The Tri-Force demands moar!
▲ ▲ The Tri-Force demands moar!>>8156281562 Dammit....
One time, me and mah buddy Keith...
>>8114481144 yeah people still play it
The detail in this is stunning. Beats my writing hands down
I await the next chapter. I go!
I'm starting to think that this is just a L4D2 Fic on the wrong website but it's good but you need to update so I could know it's not completely L4D2
Wow, i'm a guy who played left 4 dead 2 for OVER 500 hours, beaten every campaign hundreds of times, seen teammates die over thousands of times, read terrible L4D2 fab fictions... But this? This is amazing, you captured the characters so well, Nick's cockiness, Ellis's rough and tumble/ hill billy attitude, EVERYTHING! Honestly, I'm a little upset there ponies here, i mean i LOVE ponies but as is? i can see this being an amazing just L4D2 fan fiction.
Keep it up!
>>8201182011 Have no fear, my friend. In the next chapter, we will have CONTACT!
Okay, criticisms first...
The tenses switched quite a bit a one point, between past and present. But I think I've been subject to that, from time to time, so I shan't detract stars (I'm so kind)
I have to admit, I wasn't really into it at the beginning, but I changed my mind since "best buddy Keith."
Few spelling and grammatical errors, but none too big.
Now for the good
I love the premise, and am now hooked on this story.
4 stars and a track, sir!
Keep it Up!
Solid first chapter; It kept me interested and there weren't any nonsense distractions.
The last part of Chapter 1 made me Tear up as Ellis embraced death, So moving
In the carnival level, during the tunnel of love safe-zone at the start, I once heard a bit of conversation from the crew that ran like this
Coach: The tunnel of love! Used to be one of my favorite parts of a carnival!
Nick: "I don't know...the sign back there said cousin-couples only..."
Rochelle : Oh HELL YES! That's what I'M talking about!
2'nd Cousin Greg: ...
Mother: Rochelle! *Stunned*
(Near as I cna figure, Rochelle picked up a gun she liked and the timing was just too perfect)
everyone hates rochelle. one time in vs when she got pinned by a hunter we all just sat and watched her die. anyway GREAT story i can't wait for more. and one other thing will all the chapters be from eliis's point of view or will we see what happens to the other survivors eventually?
You think that's bad? "Ghoti" is pronounced "fish". Enough, women, and the suffix tion.
Welcome to the English language, motherfucker. Enjoy your stay.
Um, that was...an interesting comment Dirigible...
Anyway, nicely written, great story, wonderful intro for a fic...5 stars and tracked, keep up the good work!
Hmmm... We're going to need more than the MOAR cannon here.
CTK: Command! This is Clone! Requesting the Orbital OMEGA MOAR cannon!
Command: . . . . I don't believe I heard you right son, did you say the Orbital OMEGA MOAR cannon?
CTK: You heard right, this story is worthy of it.
Command: Alright stand by. . . . the cannon is charged. Coordinates?
CTK: . . . My position...
Command: . . . I understand- Ready to fire on your go.
CTK: Roger that command . . . MARK
Mother of Celestia. You sir have made my night.
Ellis will fit right in with the apple family. Keep making more!
The current amount of this story does not meet the required quota, therefore the only solution is MOAR of it.
YOU YES YOU GENIUS WHO WROTE THIS! GIMME MORE OF THIS!
>>8202582025 You've played over 500 hours? I'VE PLAYED OVER 9000!!!! Seriously though i have. Not a joke.
IMMA PLAY IT RIGHT NOW
I was liery of this at first, but I gotta say man- you've DEFINITELY got my attention!
Oh Rochelle, why do want everyone to hate you? Do you like the hate?
Rochelle has a revolver-style grenade launcher? The normal in-game one is a single-shot (before reloading)!
GODDAMIT Rochelle! You hax to get an uber-gun, then waste it by TK-ing!!
HAHA, I wish I was there to hear that! Priceless!
>>8426384263 Only one complaint i have for the l4d games. Not enough people on EVER. I only rarely pick up more than 8-9 games on versus not to mention realism versus reg realism or the one game mode with the gas cans. the name escapes me. The only thing i find fun about it any more si slaughtering survivors as infected by epic l33t hunter pouncing. and the mutation game mode.
>>8114481144 i play it. if you have it on xbox we could go on it together. message me
>>8505085050 I need to rebuy it first, I only have the first L4D at the moment.
>>8505185051 ok when you do get it send me a message not a comment because i wont know when you wrote it
That was freakin' hi-larious! Great job.
Oh Ellis, you so silleh.
i don't care where your from thats gotta hurt!!!
My god this is getting awesome
I NEED MOAR! i mean, if you wouldnt mind
Ellis is best L4D2 character
Your L4D Crossover is the best crossover. Carry on sir.
i was waiting for a good new chapter, and was definetly not dissapointed. you've portayed ellis extremely well and mixed alot of comedy in there, keep up the good work!
“OH MAH GAWD A TINY TALKIN’ HURSE!!!”
Best line in any fic, ever.
OUCH! Right in the pills! Oh man, Ellis, feels bad bro.
This is just text. How the hell can I love their accents so much?
Brilliant! Keep it up
Amazing job Mago, simply amazing. I was wondering how you were gonna make the meeting for Ellis, and that...that was...sorry, I'm still laughing a bit! I can actually PICTURE this happening, and I had a little bit of a sympathy pain for poor Ellis because...DAMN Applejack can kick hard. Besides a few grammar and spelling mistakes here and there (Not the speech ones that were there for a reason), this new chapter is great! Keep up the great work and I'd love to see what you've got in store for us next. Tomorrow's Christmas though, so go and enjoy yourself and relax. Everyone can wait for this amazing story until after the holidays.
OH MAH GAWD AH TINY TALKIN HURSE! best line ever + 5 loling rainbow dashes for you
Definitely one of the better HIE fics I've read. Keep up the good work!
I mean it
“OH MAH GAWD A TINY TALKIN’ HURSE!!!”
I imagined this being said in Ellis's voice.
Can anyone help me find my head? I appear to have laughed it off.
This is good. Very good....
The techpriest had me cracking up...
umm in the l4d2 lore the survivors are carriors of the infection
so will ponys get infected or are we using l4d1 lore?