This story takes place during the events in the episode Leap of Faith
Granny Smith decides to drink the entire bottle of Flim and Flam's miracle tonic only to find out that it might have actually worked! The hands of time were turned back eighty years and she is now a much a younger mare. She then recruits Zecora to help her see if the tonic does as advertised but at the same time Granny also may have unintentionally discovered the true reason behind her youthful appearance. However, it will be up to her and Zecora to keep this secret from the Flim and Flam brothers from exploiting it.
Chapters (10)
Real interesting premise, but personally I find it annoying to write a character that constantly rhymes.
Im hooked and wondering what's next 😎
Oh! She said it. That six word phrase equivalent to the five word phrase (What could possibly go wrong?).
I agree with Kit. This ought to be good. Let me get the popcorn.
guess who's back back again
Aw...
Looking very interesting and just a guess but I am guessing a spark between Zecora and Granny Smith?
This is starting to get interesting. I like seeing Granny Smith being young and you know what they say, live longer live better. I'm looking forward to see what happens next. You earn six stars for doing a great job. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐
Being rather stubborn. As usual, I suppose.
There it is.
Those two better keep this situation as a secret and I hope the test tube result from the hot spring will be a positive. Nice job on your new chapter this is starting to get pretty good. Another six stars for doing a good job. ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐
In my opinion, those two got off easy.
Imagine that, the Flim Flam brothers have been turned into school colts.
And Granny Smith has challenge Applejack and Big Mac to a drinking contest. I hope those two will forgive her.
The thing is. The machine worked. Their split of the profits was the issue.
Wait a minute? Why is she upset about that?!
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I mean she was just concerned about Flim and Flam's saftey was all
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Despite their bad history?
bummer, I wanted it to fail
They did. You might have noticed.
Not exactly thrilled with chapter
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that pun was foalish
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Yeah, yeah. But it's my style of humour; I'm a punny guy.
Just take a long look at the pond memories that could be made here ya never know we may just have a swimming time
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this one feels forced ill admit
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My point stands.
Tsk, and I'm a Blue-Eyes White Dragon.
Poor choice of words. As I understand, that happens to the Crusaders a lot anyway.
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Well, once -no, twice?- bitten...
Side note: "to go along with it" might be a better choice of words? Just offering?
I can imagine her also seeing red at this point.
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I noticed some serious grammatical errors thanks for posting your comments.
They truly are morons
That was the most heart touching thing Granny Smith has ever said and it's great to see her young again as a second chance. I wonder if she'll ever tell Applejack, Apple bloom, and Big Mac about this or probably she'll keep it as a secret. Good job on your new chapter, I'm really enjoying it. I'm giving your new chapter 10/10 for doing a good job.
If it weren't for them, they'd have gotten away with it, too!
And so the wise triumph in the end. Everypony seems to have benefitted... somewhat from the experience, too. Granny Smith gets another chance to make amends for past erring, Zecora's... personal life has... warmed up considerably, the Apple family will keep their matriarch for many years to come...
Put shortly, presuming that this is the end of the tale, I'm giving this story a perfect 10 on the
itude scale. This is going in my All Time Faves folder and I'll be looking forward to what you produce in the future, as always.
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But where's the dog, it's always meddling foals with a dog ...
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https://m.Eh, he's probably with Snips and Snails. It's a long story.
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your comments made me cry last night a little, I am so happy I'm able to write a story that has touched others and I have so many more I'm going to write in the future. Thank you so much for reading
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You're welcome
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Looking forward to it.
This is the best story I've ever read. I'm happy to see Apples and Pears finally ended their feud. I hearby giving you a trophy for finishing your Guess Who's back. Congratulations.🏆
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I hope you stick around I got a few more stories involving Big Mac coming up
More like scarred. Figuratively, of course.
Nice save.
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Sure
I can also imagine a trail of flowers following behnd her.
Anyway, as this story comes to a close, I say long life to the Apples and Pears. As long as it's (ostensibly) been, Granny Smith has more to live for than she used to - and more energy to do so! Either way, this story gets a 10 on the
itude metewr! I look forward to your next issue. This one has been exceptional, as always.
Well done. A very enjoyable work
Is that an advanced rhyme?
Not bad. I like the idea, and the execution is pretty decent so far.
I did notice a few grammar errors and typos though.
his should be her, and a mile is absolutely huge for a clearing in a forest. To be fair, this is a magical forest with some hidden fountain of youth, so a mile out from a pond could be plausible if the forest has some space warping shenanigans going on.
Another thing I noticed is you didn't start a new paragraph when you switched speakers.
Other than that though, this is pretty good.
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Thanks for the feedback. I appreciate it.