Derpy tries to reform Cozy Glow instead of her being sent to Tartarus. Cozy finds that the cross-eyed mare is actually more wise than what she looks
I'm a Christian brony born in 10/19/1996, profile pic done by sweetstrokesstudios.. I may write M rated stories I take commissions $10 for first chapter and $5 for additional chapters
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Think you meant to say "tear" as opposed to "year". Regardless it was a pretty nice story.
Also felt like Cozy changed her views really quickly a little too quickly, and with a little less pushback then I would've expected, given the way you set both her character and the story up, but I still enjoyed the basic premise and the lead up anyway.
I appreciate that Muffins listened to Cozy and acknowledged when and where her views were correct, something that didn't happen in the final. And the ending was pretty decent all things considered; if more than a little rushed.
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Fixed. Thank you kindly for pointing that out. I was using docs and I guess auto correct changed it to year. I'm glad you liked it, I actually may edit this story in the future, I just wanted to try and see if entering contest would help with some inspiration.
Thank you for your feedback.
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Yeah auto correct is pretty weird sometimes. Glad I could help!
Although this was very sweet I feel like it was rushed.
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Duely noted, I might actually add more sometime, I'm not sure.
Glad you liked it
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Cool.
Interesting pairing. It was enjoyable, but felt rushed at times. Cozy changed a bit too quickly from one speech, for example.
... I feel as though this transited too quickly between these two paragraphs. A couple more paragraphs of Cozy Glow asking questions and Derpy giving wise answers, each one slowly bringing Cozy down to this crying part, would be much better and a little more believable. Good idea, just a little rushed right here.
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Thank ya.
I do plan on adding more, but after the event
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ok :)
"I can fix her"- Derpy Hooves