Spike angers Twilight too much and feels useless so he runs away, when Twilight finds out she feels guilty and goes off to find him.(Takes place before The Last Problem)
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Starlight Fan
I am a big fan of Starlight Glimmer most of my stories center around her. I do crossovers as well.
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Twilight would not want an argument with me, because by the end of it there is a 60% chance that I would want smoke. And rainbow dash, you can go straight to Tartarus.
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One, Smoking is very bad. And two, I agree that Rainbow Dash is a Bitch to Starlight. And I will just say LEAVE Starlight alone, and let her speak about Spokes's health. Otherwise, I will GROUND you from the sky forever!!! 😡
he we go again
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What? I’m trying to make the story better. Did I do something wrong? Or is it something else? I can fix it.
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Not that kind of smoke.
What makes this one different?
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I made Spike right back more and the extra scene I added in chapter 2 is there.
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No, it's not that I'm going to read it again, so the "here go again" xd
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Do you mean fight back?
...I mean, it’s a stab in the right direction, but all you've really done is taken the Mane Six's collective OOC assholery from the original and shoved it all into Twilight. A fresh coat of paint alone can't fix a broken vase.
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Yes.
Better than the first story was, overall I would say. Spike argued back harder than he did in the first story, and I say is the best version yet. As I said in the first story, writing "Spike run away" stories are tougher than it might seem.
About a year ago, I even gave thoughts about trying to write one myself after seeing how a lot of them tend to have the mane 6 be OOC, sometimes badly, But, as well as not having too strong an urge to try to write it, I doubted some about if I could get it as right as it should be.
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I had no intention of making Twilight OOC I meant for her anger to at least be understandable, I'm sorry if I did otherwise.
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Actually, it’s not as understandable as you may think.
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Explain.
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Twilight has dealt with some of the most heartless villains in mlp. From a b*tch with an ego the size of a blimp(sunset shimmer and trixie) to a cultist(starlight glimmer) and barely bat an eye. You mean to tell me all I have to do is accidentally burn a book in order to get her angry? If I spike I would have not only called her out for hypocrisy but would have said ‘f*ck it’ and burned a few more books along with her wings.
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The Reformed villains are not heartless and she did bat an eye shall we point to the laser show with her and Starlight Glimmer in Cutie Re-Mark.
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But, do you get my point?
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Yes. Twilight was a bit too harsh and I could've built it up more.
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Especially when others have done worse. And I hope she gets called out on her hypocrisy.
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Grammar, my friends. Grammar!
, = Pause in sentence
. = End of sentence
Thus your comment becomes like this:
No, it's not that I'm going to read it again, so the "here go again" xd
With that structure you are actually saying that you will not read it again.
Should have been written like this.
No, it's not that. I'm going to read it again, so the "here go again" xd
That little dot☝ right there
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I think that what Pete tries to say, is that with Starlight, she tried to intentionally destroy Twilight's friendships.
What Twilight did in return was to ask why would Starlight do this, try to explain why Starlight shouldn't do this and general battle banter.
Yes, there were a ''laser show'' and Twilight was clearly displaying frustration and anger towards Starlight, but she did not clearly vocalize them to Starlight (as far as I know).
I don't think Canon Twilight have ever just straight up insulted anyone in the series, for who they are, or their worth as a person.
The closest examples I can think of is towards the end of ''Bridle Gossip'', where she starts to buy into the xenophobia.
Here, Spike accidentally destroy memories of Twilight's friendships.
And instead of lamenting to Spike why she is hurt by that loss, she starts to directly insult Spike's entire person, and any slight he have done (be they willingly or not).
She even went as far as to say the insult of, ''I wish you were never born''.
As far as we know, Spike is an indentured servant of Twilight, from his hatching.
The show didn't hint that he did ever get any real schooling... Just instructions on secretary work.
Thus never gaining any friends of his own equal peers.
With that he became Twilight's ''pet project'' (I my thoughts).
Even Lauren Faust and Jim Miller have two different views on this.
TLDR: Did the punishment fit the crime? ''canon''-Twilight vs Starlight compared to Twilight ''vs'' Spike
PS: I noticed that Twilight said:
If one say this to another person, this exclude that specific person from being considered inside that ''circle of friends''.
Not ''our''... If one dig into this, it means that Spike is not considered her friend.
Kinda like Pinkie wanting Maud to meet ''all of her friends'', and then don't introduce Spike at all to Maud.
PPS: Tis story still goes into the ''Tracking'' bin!
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Wow, I was just calling twilight a hypocrite, but you explained it a lot better than I did.
Time for Discord to give the friends princess a earful.
Thank you. I don’t know if you took my advice or already had this in, but thank you.
I mean, you trying to turn the world into darkness kinda got ignored. Just saying.
I wouldn’t do that if I were you, luna. If another argument breaks out things will get more ugly.
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I was already confused, I don't know if it was me or the translator
y si and if I'm wrong with the commas/puntos
Now that I think about it, what would have happened if twilight didn’t hatch spike?
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King Sombra would take over Equestria.
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But, wouldn’t king sombra have to deal with other villains.
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ahem, Cutie Remark
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Is that the one where the main six get their cutie marks switched or something?
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No, that's the Cutie Map.
The Cutie Remark is the one where Starlight goes back in time too stop the Rainboom.
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What did he do in that episode?
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If Twilight didn't hatch Spike, she probably would've failed the entrance exam and won't enter Celestia's school, preventing her from being part of the Elements of Harmony.
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Ohh. Is that why you mentioned cutie remark?
Kids, do not talk to strangers.
Oh, things are really getting interesting now with this Sparkly character showing up.
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Since it was not common to see dragons in Canterlot, or in Equestria proper, to the point of them planting Dragon Sneeze Trees in lots of places... I'm going to say that was supposed to be a gage to measure magical aptitude, determination, creativity, and the courage to fail.
Twilight passing that "unwinnable" test is likely what made her so neurotic, and failing tests her worst fear.
So, if she had failed to hatch Spike, I still think she would have made it in, but whether or not she'd be the "faithful student" is up in the air.
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Oh ok. Also, I’m glad I saw this because there was no notification.
Why are you rewriting this story? What happened to the old version?
Come on, was that necessary?
It isn’t a bad idea. You just have to be a good fighter.
Every friend group has these two types of friends.
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People kept disliking it and I noticed the Mane 6 were too OOC so I rewrote it.
If I was spike, I would have came up with a snarky comment.
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Honestly, same
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Oh. I didn’t know you read this story.
I can see Luna really being pissed at Celestia about that.
Like with the whole "sidelining" route Celestia is going yet again but also apparently fear as well.
Wondering what happens next?