Spike is tired of being left in the castle again. He wants to adventure out in the world but knows that Twilight nor Princess Celestia will approve it. Spike thought he was anonymous, a nobody. Spike then think darker thoughts. What will the dragon do when all hope is lost
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I applaud you miss! Or mister!
6933657 I'm a guy and thanks! I didn't know it was that good! Thanks for the favourite too!
At least you're not directing anymore, Mr. Wiseau.
6934514 Tommy Wiseau?
It good... I find the lack of a note left behind a little weird considering the fact that spike is also twilight's scribe dude..... lazy purple snowflake.... all he does besides clean is write letters.
7138875 Oh dang.. should have left a note
Thanks for the depression fuel.
This was actually really good! I loved it. This calls for a like!
7173907 Thank You!
7175441 welcome!
Nice fic short sad hits you right in the gut very well done
7238452 Thanks for the compliment..I guess...
Your story was great too.
7242917 no problem
thanks that means a lot im working on the sequel now so keep on the look out for that 
7243011 I'll be sure to!
Wow! That hit me right in the stomach with pain and sadness. Anyway, awesome story!
7430988 Thanks!
hey. you started writing again!
oh, look. tears washing down my cheeks!
7921273 Hehe, thanks
Constructive criticism:
I enjoyed the fic but it felt waaaay too fast paced. Spike made that decision too quickly. Plus, I think it would take a lot more than a chopped off hand to kill somepony. Especially a dragon. And I don't know how he chopped through the scales so fast, they're pretty hard.
Also, a few words that are capalized and shouldn't be. A few sentences in the wrong paragraphs.
Instead of using ----- to switch the where-abouts of the story, type 'hr' (without quotation marks) in brackets ([ ]).
Try to make more sentences by using less commas and replace them with periods when you can. And don't let there be too many commas in a sentence, three AT MOST (not including lists).
You should also go more in depth in this story and give it some emotion.
All in all, the idea was fine but you didn't really bring it with the story. I hope I helped with this advice, keep in mind it was meant to be constructive criticism.
7941695 Oh okay! Thanks for your advice, It will help me when I'm writing more stories!
7950445 Thank you!
I kinda wished there was a fight or argument but Spike end it then and there.
7953861 I wanted that too but...
I'm shit at writing
Can you make a sequel
8195742
Urr...
But Spike's dead...
8265522
After math. Tell how Spike's death the main six and the CMC.