When Varius, a Centurion of the Roman Ninth Legion blacks out after a disastrous campaign in Caladonia he finds himself and the shambled remains of a Cohort in a strange new land.
A strange new land with talking coloured ponies no less!
However confronted by a force of armoured pony's led by a white stallion, there forced to do something many thought never possible for a legion.
Run.
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Oh wow, this idea!
I like it.
As a fan of Greco-Roman culture this rules
I like it, and the concept is great. MOAR.
Interesting...havn't heard of a Roman in Equestria, I shall be watching this one
Seems interesting. There's a good balance of humor and story.
Though there were a few grammatical errors. The first word of a new sentence and all names should be capitalized.
Still, it's very good and I'm quite intrigued with what you're going to do with this concept.
1795917 Thanks for noticing that. I do normally have somebody proof read for me. Being dyslexic I try my best but a few always manage to slip by me
Thanks for noticing them though. im double/triple/quadruply checking the next chapter 
Instant like and favorite because I love the concept, as well as the story. There are some grammar and spelling issues, but I'll let it slide (this time). If you need anything (except for artwork) feel free to ask. Kira approves.
1796441 Hey thanks so much!
Yea looking over it again i've noticed the grammer and spelling issues (i think) I'll also make sure to keep your offer in mind. 
Also is that a Death Note reference. or im i derping again
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Actually, my whole profile is a Death Note reference. You just earned fifty respect points for being a Death Note fan.
1796623 Yey can i replace the respect points for cookie points?
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I love Romans but they never seem to have any stories about them. This intrigued me and hasn't disappointed. Looking forward to more.
-Sturrn
Very good.I wonder, how do the Royal Guards wield the Eagle, do they know what it is? Also, who is Caesar at this time? Julius? Nero? Caligula?
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Hmm well i don't think the guard will have ever seen a standard like the eagle (all though they might know what it is) never-mind an empire like Rome, since Equestria is the domination "country" (or so im told) I also imagine them to fight much like the Greek Phalanx so the Roman style of fighting (if it ever comes to it) might be a shocker.
As for emperor Its around the time of the Antonine walls construction, so the current emperors Antoninus Pius, The successor of Hadrian (Guy who build Hadrian wall
Also hopefully if i don't sound "pompous" saying this. Julius Caesar was never and emperor, just a dictator until his murder
Unless i looked at it wrong and you already knew that. 
I knew he was a dictatator, he was still Caesar, if only in name. Also, thank God its not Caligula. Plus, aren't the helmets of the Royal Guard based on the Galea, according to the MLP wiki. Also, to be a Phalanx, they would need either a spear wall or shield wall. Also, what city-state would they fight with, like, the Spartans, Corinthians, what? Also, are any of the guards a Centurion, and, if so, will they meet Celestia, and be shocked that a FEMALE (not to be sexist, its just that their were no female Roman leaders, to my knowledge).
1799342 Well to get to celestia I'd assumed they would need to get into canterlot then (I smell I good old fashioned siege perhaps) but i would assume they would find the thought of a female ruler much entertaining (and shocking) not to mention heretical since there also gods as well as rulers. As for the Phalanx question your right I derped hard they would need shields and im sure they've never used them (but they do have spears) As for a city state i feel Sparta would suit them mainly for the two sisters ruling much like the two kings of Sparta, Varius himself is a Centurion of the first cohort of the ninth legion.
Also looking at the guard amour the helmet looks like a cross between the Greek Corinthian helmets and the medieval Barbute helmets. And there armour looks like a cross of Greek bronze armour, medieval plate armour.
Also Caligula is best emperor. Making your horse pro-consul is best political move ever.....wait...was Caligula the first ever brony?
This looks more like the guards crest?
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I must have moar!!!!!! MOAR I SAY!
(Joke) Alt. Title: The Humanies And The Ninth Revolution
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Personally I’ve always imagined that the guard would fight in a pike and shot like formation. A phalanx of spearman intermingled with unicorns that would fire magical blasts much like Twilight during the changeling invasion. Magical shields and Pegasi skirmishers would also help.
As for the story, I think so far you’ve done a good job, just the odd grammatical mistake here and there. I’m looking forward to what happens next.
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That's acctualy a good theory, pike an shot sounds like something they would use. and strangely i did think about using that but I went against it simply because i didn't want to match 16th - 17th Century Tactics and fighting with Roman equipment and tactics
But the magical shield and pegasi skirmishers are definitely sound pretty awesome
1799360 Yes, Caligula is best troll, making his horse pro-consul, also, I feel that Tiberius was the cause of him going all whacked up. Also, the galea thing was from the MLP wiki and the Corinthian thing is a good guess. Viva Noctus! Continue this
Wow, Varius is a douche, burning a town of ponies who HELPED them.If i served under hime, I would unsheathe my Gladius and knock him out, kill if I must, then take over, and leave the town alone. If I as Caesar I would'nt hire this dude. Yay Sextus is my favorite Roman. what rank is he?
I’m sure that Princess Celestia is about to receive a very interesting letter, and that a certain captain will be furious. If they do somehow get to Canterlot I have no idea how they will get in, especially without any siege equipment.
Good going.
1808124 Remember they still think there in Caledonia (even if he was told he's not). And for a Roman centurion (a veteran of probably a few battles and occupations) he'll find it hard to trust any local population, never mind a few talking pony's (as was the case in many places)
And being a centurion he needs to show his Authority as his rank or his men will lose heart. Roman rule for people who were, well not Roman could be quite brutal and harsh. Especially for the British, And I just showed a tame version of such brutality, (if i wanted to show it properly I'd have to bump this up to a mature and gore tag 
In Varius's mind his men are his priority at any cost. Might seem harsh today but two thousand years ago it would be a normal day probably
So hopefully if you guys thought i wanted to burn a town for no reason, that's my excuse.
As for Sextus he's a simple Legionary, a new recruit if you will from modern day York in England. and because of that he has seen the brutality of Roman rule hence his hesitation at his orders.
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As for this many siege equipment were build on site of the castle/fort/city Such as ladders, rams and siege towers (although they would be far to challenging for a small company of men) another tactics to dug under the wall and light fires brining the wall done. So on the opposite they still have a pretty good way of getting in,
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Digging may be a possibility, especially as Canterlot is built on abandoned gem mines and caverns. But building siege equipment on the side of a mountain with the possibility of them being outnumbered and against Pegasi (who also control the weather), I imagine it would be a bit of a challenge.
It’s your story though. War or diplomacy, it would be interesting to see what happens.
1809138 Ah, thanks for the clarity of Sextus character. Let's hope the Mane 6 got out
1809317 Hmm yea your probably right, mind you during the siege of Masada near Jerusalem the Romans built like an 375ft dirt ramp just to get a tower up there....Talk about dedication
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Impressive.
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Yeah, I remember doing a project about that for history class. Although an entire legion plus auxiliaries is a lot more men than one bruised and lost cohort. Plus the Jews didn’t have magic, or two physical deities...
1810226 Indeed but just shows that if the Romans wanted it. They really did want it
Why do I get the feeling Varius is going to die soon...
So, with very new numbers, some food, no siege weapons, the fact they had very few weapons, and their against living goddesses, and two legions of Royal and Night Guards, with the addition of magic, Pegasi that can control the weather, and the Mane 6, the 9th Cohort is royally screwed with a pike.
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I agree... maybe if it was humans with at least primitive firearms, but like this? No, these guys are fucked beyond words.
1812185 Also, that they're tired, maybe hungry, and they are wounded also adds to their screwed factor
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All what’s really needed is a controlled hurricane and its goodbye Romans. Or imagine the last thing the Romans see is the flutter of bat wings of Luna’s guard in the dark shadow of a night.
Make way, fellow Roman coming through!
Ah, there we go. I finally got the time to read, and am very much looking forward to seeing where this goes. Unfortunately I won't be able to read again for a while as I have a story of my own to tend to.
Now, fellow Primus Pilus, I shall look over and peruse your tale of many wiles. Let the error-spotting and review begin!
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after the ';', I think that should be 'most TOO busy...'
*Also space the paragraph after the above one.
You should use more commas and periods here, especially in the first sentence; try to separate the ideas a bit more. Also, 'his eyes again darted...' - Capitalized the 'his'.
*Also the same with the next sentence.
*And the next, and I suggest merging the 'Ready to pounce and eat him...' sentence into it.
** Here's a little tip.
"Varius!" a voice called - CORRECT < Same idea.
A voice called, "Varius!" - CORRECT <
You see, the letter AFTER the quotation should be small if it's a verb -- "a voice called", "he said", "she intoned", -- and if the speaker is not proper.
** You need to look over the sentences again and capitalize some stuff in case you looked that over. Also, use commas more, and space certain paragraphs apart. Aside from that, watch out for misspells.
Just a little detail, but it may be important: Romans never used steel, the most they had was strong iron.
Separate into two paragraphs.
Aside from that, keep to your writing style, Primus Pilus! For it is sharp as a blade, nicked and blemished only by grammar and punctuation errors! Develop your characters, and let them speak more, for it is then that we shall see what type of meat they're made of.
1813724 Or Pinkie Pie on Skooma (The Morrowind and Oblivion version) now THAT would be terrifying
1813758 Gosh well i knew i had some errors but thanks for correcting the biggy ones
But on a quick note Romans acctualy used a mixture of iron and mild steel. David Sim (at Reading University) has shown that the plates of lorica segmentata armour were soft iron inside and (some at least) were mild steel on the outside. This seems to have been a deliberate act, rather than an accidental consequence of the forging procedure. (See "Iron for the Eagles", by David Sim& Isabel Ridge, p.96).
But again thanks for the corrections. i'll get to work soon as possible!
1815107 Alright, thanks fr the info.
1816393 No problem don't want a fellow Roman buddy without any information tiny of big.
Is English your second language? The spelling errors and multiple sentence misstructures are saying two things. Either english isn't your first language or you just lack a proofreader. If you lack one, I can point you to a group of some and they'll help. At this current stage, the story is legible and fairly easy to read but pulls from the story with the errors abound. Just let me know if you want that group and I'll send it ASAP.
-Sturrn
There are still a few grammatical mistakes here and there. But the story is still going well.
I can only imagine the following battle to be like Thermopylae, and the rain and snow will not help. Unless Shining Armour as a trick up his sleeve I predict a bloodbath, for both sides. The only real advantage would be Pegasi/Luna’s Guard being able to fly around the back of the Romans.
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How is it that the ponies understand the Romans, though? The ancient Romans spoke Latin, not English. I fail to understand this little paradox.
1829441 Well i was supposed to have a friend proof read it, but he's never around to do so
But if you want please send it to this group 
sorry about all the errors though,
1830190 Indeeds it was only at the end of the chapter i realised the position they were in, its perfect
1830895 I blame it on the timey whimey things. Some paradox's are best left unanswered.
Moar.
Because moar.
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once its been looked over yus :P