Turned into a Pokemon, John, a International Police officer, find himself in a world of Ponies.
However none of his skills will prepare him for what he has to face. For a darkness looms all around the Crystal Empire, and it is up to him to both save Pokemon from this new world... and to save the world from this Darkness.
This story is a spin off to the "A New World, A New Way" by zeusdemigod131
Please leave a like if you enjoyed my story. It really helps my progress.
Chapter 1 to 11 Pre-read by: Dragaen
Chapters (22)
...oookay... what was that? I'll admit that this is...different, but I'm not really finding this as good as the other stories in the series.
4536958 Ya I havn't read all the others so i don't know all the things. But hay, im doing my best.
I see great potential in this spin-off, but I propose an editor would have to make that potential actually happen.
Either way, I'm following this.
4537150 If you or anyone would like to be an editor, I'll be happy to take them.
4537153 There are some groups who have people willing to help. I would, but I'm busy with my own stories.
I use Microsoft word, my own Pokemon knowledge, and the information from the other stories for assistance. I recommend doing that.
4537165 k
I'm going to probably working on chapter 1 before I upload or write chapter 2
4537172 Wise decision my friend, wise decision. And make sure you have enough proper material to attract positive attention from readers. References and other forms of laughs. Maybe some drama to throw in their too.
I was wondering when a Crystal Empire story would be written, now to read.
After I get some sleep
4537402 Well I have yet to read the other stories, but I will. Right after I rewrite this 1st chapter...
Well, this looks like a promising story.
4537402
Damn, I have wasted enough time. I must finish my own before the Crystal Empire is picked clean!
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Err, yeah, before you rewrite, please consult zeusdemigod, as there is an unofficial rule that all spin-offs set in the main universe need to go through him so that the pace can be in tune with the main fic (if not, this fic may have to go to the non-canon section)
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MEssage has been sent and I am now appending my doom! Or you know. Approval. Also adding the story in the Cannon' section was a mistake, mostly by a missclick. If he likes my story then it's staying right where it is.
Ok?
Yay! new spinoff!
^you used road instead of roar and roared a lot
"when in doubt just hit something!"
lemme one up you...
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Well shit... I lose that one.
When I read this all I see in my head is the two "almost american foreigners" from Family Guy.
4542747 Not what I was going for but ya.
Now I have to go look that up.
"To top it off, this is the best wet dream I have ever had"
Wow, when I signed up to edit "New World, New Way.", did not see all the spin offs incoming.
You just said he was a pokemon twice.
Wierd
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So...how did it go? Approved or denied?
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He Approved and is also my editor.
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Good.
ME GUSTA.
Great improvement since the revision, keep up the good work.
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I will. Though I have not had any time to really sit down and write anything... Next chapter should be out in say... next week. Check my profile for a timeline %' of how the story is going.
If you can provide this quality for all future chapters, this will be worth reading more of. It's great if all the side stories can manage a decent degree of quality.
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Thank you. I'll do my best!
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>Ecocat<
This looks fun,can't wait to read more.
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If you have not read the Re-written chapter 1 of "A New World, Burning an old way" then I recommend you do. I'd also like to have someones opinion on the new chapter.
4596173 I've read the re-written chapter, and I got to say that it improved significantly. I approve!
... I miss Volt the Pichu though. She was growing on me.
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In that case....
So, Flash Sentry started the fight? Must be trying to make up for the Sunset situation,
more please
Mistakes found:
Keep either "From" or "is" and eliminate the other. Both of them are unnecessary. Also shouldn't it be "he's"?
Later on you call her Holy Heart. If that's the real name you might want to go back and fix this.
This one should be easy enough to fix as well
Once again, easy fix.
Admittedly this would be very interesting to see... but if you have autocorrect I think it interfered here.
The word you are probably looking for here is feminine.
Hold up. I was under the impression that everypony was in the school of thought that the feraligatr was a guy until John said "she"
Once again if you or your editor has autocorrect, you can blame it here.
Unneeded caps here.
This one is kinda obvious. There's another instance of this later on towards the end of the chapter.
Missing a letter in the first one and missing an apostrophe in the second.
Missing another letter here.
I'll leave this one up to you.
Missing a word and autocorrect being a jerk again
That is the last one I found.
Your story is good so far but you might need to get a second editor to catch what the first one misses. I'm interested to see how the rest of John's team enters the story and it was a nice touch making the Feraligatr female. Good luck on your next chapter.
Good
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Damn... Looks like I got some more work to do. Thank you for this.
4599962 At the very least they're in chronological order so it should be easy enough to find them.
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Alright! I went back and fixed the ones that you pointed out. Thank you for you help, and I'll do my best not to let any others slide passed me.
That should be "past".
Caught a few more...
Either drop the "most' or the -est off of "fairest". I'd personally go with "most fair".
Capitalization is your friend here.
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Um... Those are not mistakes. I think.
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1st one you have "every strong" shouldn't it be "very strong"?
2nd you have "laghted " instead of "laughed"
4602500 You replaced the words in your comment with the correct one. I didn't know the mistakes that I had because you didn't shoe what was really there. I recommend you don't do that.