It's been four years since Gabby and Gilda had a falling out. They haven't spoken since, and those around them have noticed. Spike sees the pain in his fiancee's eyes whenever Gilda's name comes up. Rainbow Dash could see the masked pain in her friend's letters.
The chance to mend the broken friendship finally comes at a simple Hearth's Warming party. Will Spike and Rainbow Dash be able to help their griffons bury the hatchet?
Hastily written as a gift for Decaf for Jinglemas 2020.
Preread by Semillon and FamousLastWords
I claim responsibility for the mediocre cover art.
Happy Hearth's Warming!
Chapters (1)
I liked it. It's a fairly classic idea but it worked well, mainly focusing on the build up and Spike/Dash's awkward lack of sense. The conflict itself was resolved very quickly, but these sorts of misunderstandings do happen from time to time, especially if both parties are stubborn. Something I suspect runs in gryphons.
This has to be my favourite part.
It certainly didn't feel like it was rushed though.
And I've now got to do the same thing and crunch. Funnily enough superfluous gryphon is a major part of mine too.
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Well, I'm somewhat mixed. I'm happy they finally recoiled. ( Although, they didn't apologize much, and that they didn't comment they wasted FOUR YEARS over nothing??!!)
But, I didn't like it took Four Long Years that they find out that it was just a ridiculous misunderstanding and a crazy break in their bakery, that mess up their friendship.
It would be better for me if it was months, instead of years. But, that is just my opinion.
I'm never going to complain about adding griffons to the story, especially not for something as well-written as this. Thank you for it.
Huh, this was really good! You absolutely sold Spike and Gabby as a couple without even trying, introducing them and their situation naturally without heavy handed exposition. I also liked how subtle little things, like mentioning Spike and Twilight's height and Pinkie being pregnant, let us know the timeline.
That said... yeah, I agree with the author's note. The conflict felt a bit... meh. The setup was great, the tension between Gabby and Gilda was palpable even before they saw each other. But the actual reason for the conflict was thin, and then it's completely resolved, from "why did you..." to hug and make up was like four lines of dialogue. Perchance, was this a Breezie story? Or did life just do you dry like it did me? Hell, at least your fic is longer than 1.6K!
Either way, I still really enjoyed this one. Great job!
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You definitely nailed Spike and Gabby as a couple, yeah the whole conflict feels a bit rushed, I was expecting something with a bit more tension. Feel bad for not signing up to Jinglemas now, these entries as a whole are pretty fun.
Question: During their relationship getting started, were there's some special occasions in her mail carrier days?
For a story where the author himself admits the driving conflict is half-baked, rushed and easily resolved, it honestly could have been worse. I'm not going to dwell there, because everyone else already has.
[Though in an ironic way it kind of feels of a place with the show, given what the root of Starlight's vendetta against Cutie Marks turned out to be. We'd all have been even harder on something like this were it in the show too, of course]
Up until the turnaround where it was all straightened out, and the conflict itself was revealed, I was definitely on board with this story. Characterisation was quite good, establishing character facts offhand in a concise and effective manner, and while I don't know that I personally agree with the story prioritising the griffons over the two given character as much as it could, and being transparent about it, you barely notice it without hindsight. Strong dialogue was a nice benefit too.
And while the conflict's resolution is a bit of a wet fart, it recovers a little face in the last few paragraphs after that. So it still stumbled back on its feet.
Overall, hobbled by the driving conflict once it becomes clear, but quite strong otherwise. So I do feel positive towards it, mostly.
I got a lot of warm fuzzy moments from this one which was really nice. The Spike and Gabby dynamic was on point, but what somewhat surprised me was rainbow dash in this. You can tell it’s still her but she’s a lot more mature and laid back which was awesome.
Only thing that did confuse me is where this is actually set. It’s obviously in the future. So did Spike move out of the castle and then back to Ponyville, but still works with Twi at the castle
The Spike and Gabby coupling was nailed splendidly. Pinkie Pie and Cheese. But, are Gilda and Dash a couple here? Is Rainbow with Applejack but she's back at the Acres in Ponyville? Are they not even together yet? Lotsa ambiguity on that part.
Vary cute 🥺😇😍
Spot on