This was a wild and hype building chapter, you know a soon as Celestia saw the guy she know shit was officially about to go down. I can't wait to see where this goes (no rush).
Princess or Queen? Your previous chapters said Princess instead of Queen.
“Are you trying to get us fucking executed!?” Zander whisper-screamed.
Zander snarled quietly. That sounds better do you think.
“Of course, Queen Celestia,” Twilight said. “We planned our attack for a few days while watching its movements. I studied the residues it left behind to figure out its health and what it could be weak to while Sunset and the girls worked on scouting a good place to ambush it so we could-”
My suggestion would be for her to say " My Queen" or "Your Majesty".
Comment posted by Deltafire34 deleted Dec 29th, 2020
A tense quiet reigned over the crowd as they silently cursed at whoever dared to speak to the Queen in such a way. Twilight and her party openly gawked in shock that someone would be so bold as to speak like that in front of Queen Celestia. The Queen herself, however, was staring at them with a blank look.
I've also noticed you're repeating in some of the paragraphs in some previous chapters, just a heads up.
This was a wild and hype building chapter, you know a soon as Celestia saw the guy she know shit was officially about to go down. I can't wait to see where this goes (no rush).
crazy and shit. But what gonna happen to poor guys once they be tell them?
I am getting the Rising of the shield hero vibes here.
I hope Button passes his exam.
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Don't worry, there's no one like t h a t here.
Princess or Queen? Your previous chapters said Princess instead of Queen.
Zander snarled quietly. That sounds better do you think.
My suggestion would be for her to say " My Queen" or "Your Majesty".
"She" cleared her throat before saying. Add that if you want.
I've also noticed you're repeating in some of the paragraphs in some previous chapters, just a heads up.