With so many different realities, any kind of combinations are possible. Such as with the cellist Octavia Melody, and the former siren Sonata Dusk. Still, with such a pairing, it would of taken just the right chance of events to bring them together. However, as uncommon as it was, it didnât make their romance any less special.
This, is how in one such reality, they came together...
At the moment, written In insperation of this picture as well as for pride month So I at least have something for Monachromatic
*story may and will get cleaned up a little later, and title is possibly subject to change. feedback welcomed
Not gonna lie- I thought it was as Octavia/Vinyl story but I'm still gonna give it a go.
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Thanks for the chance ^^â hope you still enjoy
We have one proof reader atm, the returning Viola rules. May add a second note if anyone else wants to help, but for now...
Ended up deleting it, but keeping it here as this edit was at least less self aware aggressive as Viola mentioned. As no more for this story being experimental in that regard
I just couldnât win!! QwQ
But I hate straightforward, howâs the weather, intro more! >.>
My eventually edit;
A couple of hours later, Sonata learned this fact, as the wet cardboard collapsed around her.
Might touch this up, but decided just to keep this as a more reflective look back
Not in the story, was after they made it to Octaviaâs house before the scene change.
This made the trouble I had with the intro worthwhile
And that be it for this portion of notes đ
There's a kernel of a good story here, but I think you need a lot more editing and polish. I nearly gave up on the obscenely gratuitous fourth wall break. The rest is so oddly paced, weirdly phrased; it needs work, a lot of work.
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You know my proof reader said the same thing :(
Sorry this took so long to get to. Now that I have read it, I did enjoy it. While the 4th way parts were a bit odd, I still enjoyed the story overall. Good job
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Thanks :)
Yeah, those moments were kind of experimental for me after thinking about a bit from the book thief. Although just today removed one Where I was on the Fence about, but decided to just get rid of thinking it could really take someone out of it. Turns out I had some timing
This is a neat little story. It's a good start to a story. A few edits here and there and we really got something to start here. I did like how music was a common interest between them. Unless I misread the meaning behind the cello scene.
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I thought that was yours/your friends idea behind the pair
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Nope his idea, I just draw.
Now, this is an interesting rare pair!
This sentence needs to be redone as I think it should say this.
You have an extra comma after world in the first sentence.
You should either remove where or add a comma after it to make the sentence make more sense.
This sentence needs to be redone as I think it should say this.
You have an extra comma after world in the first sentence.
You should either remove where or add a comma after it as doesn't make sense/the sentence sound like it should be.
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Albeit* over I be it,
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Mask we wear in public?
Awww.
Also in the authors note it's interest.
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(Whistles) thanks for all the comments
Don't worry, I do appreciate them â¤ď¸
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Your welcome I guess
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Just a lot of comments, just was a bit surprised! And honestly they're the best kind of comments! đ¤
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Again, your welcome I guess.