After leaving the Wonderbolts Accedemy, Lightning Dust was never the same. Bitter, scorn, and down trot, she ventured her way through Equestria only for doors to be slammed in her face repeatedly, when no one else will help, she turns to the last pony she'd ever expect to forgive her for her trangressions, will Rainbow Dash forgive her, or will it lead down a dark part for our heroine?
Originally written for Quills and Sofa's speedwrite prompt of "Never should have come here."
This is the extended version. I didn't think to copy the original speed write, so you get to see this.
Preread by: https://www.fimfiction.net/user/302575/The+Red+Parade, https://www.fimfiction.net/user/218083/Cosmic+Eclipse, ninja
Edited by: No pony. My editor has been really busy! (All mistakes are my own.)
Art credit to: https://www.deviantart.com/poniesplus/gallery/
Oh, at first I thought this was a review for another story, but I’m pleasantly surprised to find out its yours! This looks awesome! I’m so excited to read.
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I hope you enjoy it and thanks for the lovely comment!
I’ve been waiting for a good LD fully falls into darkness revenge story.
That was good! I liked it. Interested to see where I goes.
Great story, so far. *Boops your snoot*
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*is booped* Thanks glad you are enjoying it!
God, I despise Rainbow in this episode. It's not even Lightning Dust's fault that she got kicked, she was being encouraged at every turn by all of the instructors, but no it can't be their fault because why.
Can't wait to see where this goes.
Nice chapter, I can't wait to see Lightning rise from her muck and kick Rainbow down a notch or five.
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thanks! I'm glad you are enjoying it. Might I ask what about the chapter was nice or perhaps your favorite part?
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The fact that we get someone else's story that can relate to Lightning's blight and that it puts things into perspective for her. I also appreciate how she's still hesitant to just sign up for it wholesale, and wants to know what she's agreeing to before she commits.
Chapter 2 was even better than Chapter 1.
*Boop*
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Oh? what makes you say that?
10280754 I meant story-wise. The Shadowbolts were just figments created by Nightmare Moon to get Rainbow Dash to abandon the rest of the Mane 6 so that they wouldn't find The Elements of Harmony to defeat Nightmare Moon in the pilot episode of My Little Pony friendship is Magic. Then a few seasons later, Rainbow Dash had a shadowbolt flight suit made for her as a Nightmare Night costume, so I'm wondering if the nightmare is still around but doesn't have a host to inhabit but it sensed the negative emotions that Lightning Dust felt & approached her in the form of a shadowbolt just as it had with Rainbow on the actual show, when the nightmare was still possessing Princess Luna. This time, it's trying to tempt Lightning Dust to fall to the "dark side" by appealing to her ego & the hatred that she has for everypony else, especially Rainbow Dash.
Thunder and lightning. How classic.
Really enjoying your characterization so far. Looking forward to seeing what happens next!
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Awwh shucks! Thanks. I've been putting a lot of effort into getting it just right. Gilda was a pain.
Interesting development. Hmm...I wonder how the addition of Pinkie Pie into the picture would influence matters, for it seems that her impact is not too obvious yet.
Dust was truly being sincere. I can sense that Dash’s rejection is really gonna come back to her in the flank and hard.
I like where this is going. Gilda's really trying to get through to Dash and reconcile the two pegasi while also evaluating the meaning and significance of friendship and forgiveness.
Oh, Dash, open your eyes! You wounded Lightning. The backlash will be just as harsh. You may still have a chance to amend...
This mirrors another Lightning Dust-centered story, revolving around her discussing her psychological evaluation. She's alone and wants help, but who can help her, and how?
Dash is giving Lightning the cold shoulder here. The blade that strikes back will slice deeply.
So are the SBolts really just figments of Dust's imagination because she’s desperate for companionship, or are they just reeeeeally good at stealth? The plot thickens.
But, what about the Washouts?
It seems poor Lightning Dust has hit rock bottom.
Uh... didn't she almost kill your friends!? I would think that'd rate higher than the recruit thing.
A review, for you.
I understand where you are coming from, I too have problems staying on track so to speak. What matters is that you haven't given up on continuing this story. I look forward to how this story continues. This is one of my favourite Lightning Dust stories.
Lightning dust is one of my favourite character tbh, I would make a romance story of lightning dust and thunderlane I'd I want to but I still have to get a job cause I didn't pay my rent for 4 months now.
Rainbow dash have no right to say this at all he has endangered plenty of people's lives in the show before and after the incident that took place. On top of this the whole incident was half her fault, feeling guilty for doing something wrong that's not change you did something wrong.
This part is hilarious be quite literally left two of her friends in the middle of a desert with no way to get back as a April fool joke.
I am confused so she's having the mental breakdown or was that real and she could not enter because it wasn't night time.