When Nelly, a girl of young age and elder mind, is transported to Equestria, it isn't the one she was expecting. Princess Celestia is a tyrannical mad scientist who brings humans to Equestria, conducts experiments, then does something horrible to them. (It's not raping...why would you think that?) Twilight Sparkle, still her faithful student, helps with all this, however unwittingly. But the most horrible thing of all is that nopony know what friendship is. In a utilitarin-futuristic Equestria, will Nelly be able to escape the wrath of Celestia? Find out in...Test Subject!
Rated Teen for language. Nothing else, folks; this is by no means a clopfic.
Chapters (4)
Hey everypony, so this is my first fanfic...PLEASE give me some feedback, and I'll get to it right away. Grammar mistakes, more character development, or anything else--I'll get right to it. Yeah, it's another human-in-Equestria story. I hope this is interesting. I yearn for your mustaches
Honestly, people. If you don't like my story, please leave a comment explaining why. I feel bad that my writing was not as good as it should be. So, really. I can do whatever you want me to do to this story. I hope that I get some feedback. I will even take out the swears. Just tell me what's wrong.
MOAR
Alright, I have to say, this story isn't that bad. But also, it's not that good. While it has an awesome story premise that could be expanded on greatly, the way you executed it just kind of makes it worse. I will keep an eye on this one, but for now, I am with-holding my mustache.
pretty okay....
>>Pharilax
Thank you for the info. I'll try to work on it. Just so you know, I did not plan ahead for this story at all.
Writing fanfics is a lot easier when people are willing to help. Thanks again!
This is pretty good! A few grammar mistakes here and there, but other than that I like it.
good. Waiter bring me moar!
Yes, it's a bit inconsistent. Sorry, I just made it up on the spot.
Ideas you guys have will most likely influence the next chapter. Iron Will appears more in the story, so don't worry. At least...he might... 
But anyway, please tell me I captured Pinkie Pie's personality! 
Pinkie's personality is... okay. As for the next chapters, I had the idea of her getting strapped down to some kind of table, and just before she's gonna' get "experimented" on, do a daring escape!
For how you pull this off, it is up to you 
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GREAT IDEA!!!!
Thanks Pharilax!
I considered turning into a unicorn, you know.
1143942 mmm... Yeah, no, too easy!
Aaaaaand dislike. Sorry the human-turned-pony just kills it for me
I'm sorry, guys. It just wasn't working out. It turned out to be a bust. The story wasn't going anywhere, and I had absolutely no idea what I was doing.
This next story is a crossover. I hope that at least one of you is a Star Trek fan. If not, tell me now. Post it here or on my page.
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Sorry about that. It was my only idea. I'll try not to do something like that.
1138457 No clue why people don't like this.