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Shimmer_Bolt


To write is to create entire universes. You are a god. But will you be a kind god or a cruel god? Unfortunately, many are cruel, simply to entertain other gods.

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In my read it later folder as I have quite lot of reading going on right now, but an interesting concept. I came into mlp during season five and fimfiction after season six and FO:E was the first fic I read. The only problem I found was being written after only the first season was that it missed out on a lot of the later lore that was built up with successive seasons and films. As this is using the main cast eight seasons and a lot of lore later it’ll be interesting to see how they react to how things went in the ultimate MLP AU.

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See, that was the main idea, because Kkat wrote the original Fallout: Equestria during season two, and I saw so much more potential with the other seasons.

Scaramouche, what are you doing here?

Well this will be interesting.

The Elements are going from a land with friendship being a unstoppable force to a land where Pain is inevitable.

Hopefully the minds of the unfortunate Elements surive this adventure.

This has been really good so far! :yay: I love it! Can't wait for more :heart:

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Well, I just sorta asked him, and he was interested, and so we're friends now. Pretty simple. Everyone on the team is a great help. I couldn't possibly do this on my own. :twilightsheepish:

We're also always accepting new team members!

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I'm so happy you like it! We hope to get the majority of the fandom to notice this tribute to them.

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It will be very difficult. I hope you stay for the ride and watch our heroes try and persevere. :pinkiehappy:

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Definitely! I hope it does happen. If it continues the way it is now, this story deserves the attention :pinkiesmile:

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Thank you! We're very thankful to have you all reading!

y'know what, this might be just the trick to get me interested in FoE
cuz my main gripe is the lack of the m6 in it

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Scar is a good worker and friend. He's been helping me with one of my own stories as well

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what exactly do you mean by team members?

Interesting concept, intrigued on how things develop further

I’m shocked by how few stories there are like this.

I usually avoid FE fics, I already read the original story, the rest, welp, hardly any main six, the original barely has some, but this one really got y attention, so let's see if it gets better :D.

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We have a team of around thirty individuals, all helping to make this tribute the best it can possibly be. We're going to show the world our passion for the fandom and the show!


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I sincerely do hope you enjoy the ride!


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I know, right?~


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Don't worry! It'll get better!

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Stick around. We'll be getting better as time goes on!

I know people have mixed feelings about project horizons, but could you please put like a reference to it here somewhere please? It would really make my day. Honestly I love project horizons almost as much maybe even more than the original. Though honestly that could be because it's longer so I've spent more time with it having reread it twice.

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>_> I'm sure there'll be a few references, considering how I'm on the last chapter.

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i must question though, is it all the m6 in this story, or were they just in the prologue?

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They're all in the wasteland. Don't worry. Your favorite character will be in there, I assure you.

And I mean it.

Warning: Spoilers to the series finale.

*sigh*

I really need to get on watching the finale.

So many stories I'm postponing because of it...

Have you ever read Fallout equestria Chrysalis? I think it's one of the best fallout equestria stories, and you should definitely read it.

Interesting concept, but I'm barely past twilight's entrance into the wastes and already seeing red flags for some of the OCs and the way the story seems to be paced has me feeling like it's trying to force it's way to the gritty action and drama of exposing a bunch of canon characters to the horrors of the wastes. I would advise you to take a little more time to establish your characters and their place in the setting as well as maybe figure out how to realistically explain any unusual abilities or views they have.

Convenient plot armored baton kitties included. I mean really, the first parts of FO:E took time to really introduce the main characters and some of the important driving motivations, situation, and limitations. Confidence and coolness were something that didn't come til much later. Instead, the focus was on the emotional struggle and the gradual introduction of important information as it was given piece by piece amongst the fluff and character exploration and development.

Also, try to keep things realistic within the setting. Even littlepip had to use cover, pick targets off one or two at a time, and often suffered for her trouble. Most people in the setting would have seen that and at least went to get help first even if they were the hero type. It's just a good idea for not dying pointlessly.

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There are points where you are right, yes.

However, the are points I would have to disagree with. See, Tricks isn't a pony. He has a vastly different psychology. Also, there is a major reason why Tricks rushes into things, and they will be explained later into the fic. Trust me, I think you'll find the explanation satisfactory.

As for rushing into the story, you are very correct in saying that I shouldn't have rushed things. In fact, I had attempted to pace it as best as I could. Sadly, I am not James Patterson.

I will attempt to fix the pacing later on. As you can see from look at chapters in my previous fics, I have been steadily stretching out the length of my chapters, trying to put more detail. I assure you, it will be better over time. Thank you for your comment. Here is an upvote from me. I sincerely do hope you stick around for the ride. We care about our readers.


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I will definitely have a read of that fic.


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Please forgive me. I understand there are many who have stopped around season 5.

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Oh no, it's none of your fault at all! :twilightsmile:

Just me who won't bother to set aside the time to watch the rest of season 9.

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(TL;DR for this first part below)
Oh, i hadn't really meant that tricks couldn't realistically manage a quick non-lethal bezerker fighting style, but I feel that he would need a bit more than just a pair of batons and maybe a little different tactics. I understand sometimes you can't help being alone, but you need to compensate accordingly with things that make sure someone can't shoot you, even with just lucky blind fire, while you are dispatching another target.

For example, small concussion bombs made from gun powder, crushed flint bits from cheap old lighters, and cigarette rolling paper would help him stun, stumble, and throw off the aim of people he's rushing down while only inflicting minor burns, temporary tinitus, and possibly a bit of bruising and tiny bits of flint shrapnel.

I also believe that he would do better to go for temple strikes and nerve jabs to the insides of thighs, wrists, and the base of the skull as blood deprevation to the brain requires at least a few seconds before it becomes effective. Simple hitting the neck wouldn't knock someone out unless you managed to crush their wind pipe or cause a spinal disconnect, both of which are exceptionally lethal. It's also a fairly standard martial melee skill to use other opponents to block the advance or fire of other enemies so against groups it would be a good idea to nerve strike and then drive one enemy back into another to cover his advance towards the next enemies.

TL;DR for above:

Give him distance stunning weapons (impact stun/smoke bombs, bean bag loaded sawed off shotguns, whatever else you can easily explain him consistently getting his paws on in the wasteland) and some solid tactics that can be explained beyond "he ran really fast and clubbed their weak points".

Not TL;DR:
As for his introduction, on a meta level the whole scene seemed like a way to show off his fighting skills before we even knew anything about the character as that is basically all that is shown to us in that first impression we are given. It's not always a bad introduction but considering how helpless twilight was, how he could subdue all of them with nothing more than a pair of batons by himself, and how every hit was some seriously technical and fairly difficult non-lethal takedown, it feels like he's literally just there for "hey guise, look at my super kewl OC". Okay, sure, i would love to read about a kitty zerker but when fights hold about as much tension as watching him take garbage out to a dumpster, it's boring and I lose interest.

Also give twi a little credit, a dirty, spikey, deranged robber would have elicted a far more combative response wether she knew what a gun was or not. Maybe not immediate fighting, but a more guarded and aggressive response to that would have been far more reasonable than the clueless reaction she had.

In the immortal words of Joker: and here. We. GO!

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Given Tricks' background and personality, those kinds of weapons would actually cause him extreme fear. And that entire situation, as you've pointed out being unrealistic, is unrealistic for a reason.

This isn't to disrespect you. It's just that this played out as it did for a reason, a reason that far outweighs everything anyone here will ever point out. Because of that one single reason alone, which I cannot spoil, Tricks is able to do those things.

We have some very interesting messages for the fandom in this fic, as some of you will need to decipher over time. If you haven't been able to tell, I've left clues, and these clues will ultimately lead you to learn a secret within the story.

If you can figure this secret out, good for you, I'm proud. Just don't spoil it for others. If you can't, that's fine. There's just not enough hints in this single chapter to help you decipher the message anyway.

Mares and Gentlecolts, you shall be tested through reading this.

Also, here, another upvote, because I enjoy your company. ^^

Hrrrrrrrrmmmmmmmmmhhhhhhhh..........

you know im hyped to see how Twilight react in finding Celestia's skeleton ... while she talks her mentors ghost while a brave unicorn sleeps in her pod

Comment posted by Eon Dragon deleted Nov 30th, 2019

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Oh, I'm pretty sure it'll be fun.~

:ajsmug:

:derpytongue2: *scribbles on her chalkboard* So, what happened to you guys?
:rainbowderp: I may or may not have died after fighting against my childhood friend.
:raritydespair: I was melted alive by a necromantic gas cloud.
:fluttercry: I was turned into a tree and forced to watch the world die around me after giving military secrets to our enemies in the childish hope that everything would turn out for the best.
:pinkiecrazy: I was burned alive by a megaspell, alone and full of regrets.
:twilightoops: I was dragged, kicking and screaming, into a vat of chemicals to become part of a mutant abomination.
:trixieshiftleft: Excuse me?! The Great and Powerful Trixie became said abomination because you convinced me to volunteer for your unethical experiments!
:ajsmug: I survived the bombs inside a bunker!
:trixieshiftleft: While your sister, your friends and the pony you loved died outside?
:ajsleepy: Oh, right...
:rainbowhuh: By the way, what happened here?
:derpytongue2: Well, I don't have enough chalk to write the whole story and it would take time to read Littlepip's book, but if you want a quick recap you can watch this awesome video.

I wonder if anyone else will be pulled through the portal...

Friendly tip: Use nonverbal page breaks. A seperator and a few blank lines works, but the current format is just distracting.

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Nothin' to it.

If it needs a title(like a flyer or newspaper) simply make a headliner for the paragraph.

Needs polish, but nice work so far.

PS.
Did you forget to level up?

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Nope, because the Mane Six are ALREADY AT MAXIMUM LEVEL.

Also, we will have other characters level up, don't worry. :twilightsmile:

Also, thank you for the advice! I'll definitely take that into consideration for this second chapter we're working on! Here's an upvote from me!

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I thought of Spur because of this comment here:

I see three possibilities:

• She's a great motivator, figuratively spurring others on.
• Given her pet, she's the Equestrian equivalent of a Pokémon trainer, which requires a certain degree of discipline with one's wrangled monsters.
• She's actually a refugee from the Equestrian Wasteland (blame Starlight) and is doing her best to adapt to life outside of a mildly radioactive raider camp.

Note that none of these are mutually exclusive.

She's actually a refugee from the Equestrian Wasteland (blame Starlight) and is doing her best to adapt to life outside of a mildly radioactive raider camp.
Makes you wonder, really...

Wonder how the Alicorns will react to Twilight and Trixie, as the purples are kind of Twilight's daughters and the blues are Trixie's. Also a fully functional Celestia and Luna in a world where a lot of damage was because they where missing, if the princesses fix the day night cycle possibly teaching Alicorns how to move the sun and moon the changes in the wasteland will be as big as the day of rainbows! Lots of story possibilities placing the heroes of prime equestria in FoE.

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Just cause it sounds "simple" does not mean it will actually be.

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Didn't pip burn that?
all Twi would find is an AI a sleeping pony and a pile of ashes.

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Pip burned Luna's skeleton. Celestia's skeleton was never found because she'd gone to the SPP.

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Didn't Celestia ask Pip to burn her remains however when Pip got into the tower?

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Ah yeah probably. That or Pip did it of her own volition, as well as everyone else's remains. I don't recall.

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Mighty interesting. Been waiting for a story like this.

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