Just a little fanmade reboot of the show I decided to make. I'm basically gonna be remaking all of the episodes that I can remake, while also adding a few of my own original chapters. I hope all who read this take the time to understand the themes and messages it presents, and that just because it's a darker take on the original source material, doesn't mean it's bad. I'll make sure to balance it out with light hearted moments as well, so it doesn't seem like it's always taking a shot of grim dark stuff. And yes, Spike is the main character of this story. Twilight's the dueteragonist, and the other Mane Six are still main characters. I just wanted to try something new. I hope you all enjoy it. Also warning for farts in some of the chapters, but it's NOT a fetish story, as that would mean there were farts in EVERY chapter.
Little side note: Actually read the story before liking or disliking it, or at least post a comment stating constructive criticism so I know you actually read it.
For those who wanna read more after season one, please comment below whether I should make that a separate story from this one, or make season two a part of this story. Whichever one gets more votes will determine whether this story gets an 'On Hiatus' status, or a 'Complete' status, and also part of how I'll do season two.
I'm sorry it's been so long since I finished season one. I've just been more motivated to write other stories I'm currently working on. Hopefully, once I finish writing some of them, I'll have the motivation to write season two. All hail gay princes and epic character arcs!
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Sounds great
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Glad you think so.
What did you do with our queen!?" ?????????????????????????????????????????????
do you mean princess
Whoa, to many mature themes/tags. As a pro tip, you should only use one, maybe two because it looks bloated. Having said that, I'm mildly curious. I'll keep an eye out for this. Also, hi
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*Side note-I didn't place a like nor dislike on this as I haven't read it.*
I don't need to read the story to point out the mess you already made in the description. That is nothing but the author's notes in a place they don't belong.
As for what little amount about the story you actually put in the description, it doesn't read as interesting. Nothing about it is new, and has been done so much that people might just be getting sick and tired of it.
Hence the downvotes.
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I'm curious- You mind providing links to those stories? I wanna see them myself as to provide context.
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I felt it was dumb that Celestia and Luna were referred to as Princess and not Queen, especially since we don’t know their parents or anything like that, so I changed it.
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Thank you for admitting to being a biased, immature, pessimistic fuck who doesn’t know how to properly develop an opinion, and would rather shit on those with stories he finds uninteresting without reading a single word of it.
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The reason I put so many is because there’s gonna be a lot crap in the future seasons. Thanks from looking out for the story though, and I hope you enjoy it.
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oh ok
10312457 Makes sense but I suggest only keeping tags that are relevant at this particular moment as it just looks... well, bad since none of it(that I know of) is currently present. Just food for thought
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When it's a valid criticism of a lack of a proper description, then it needs to be said. If that makes me immature, then so are a lot of other people on this site.
I like the concept. Spike is a more engaging viewer perspective, in my opinion. His implied interest in Lightspeed is a relatable feeling for me, as a gay guy. There are a few small typos, but nonetheless, I think the story is off to a solid start. I am more than excited to see where the story may go, though those tags are mildly concerning. It's a good concern, anticipation.
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Thanks for the heads up. Which ones do you think I should keep for now?
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What’s immature is the fact that you think you can criticize a story without reading it. If you’re not interested then fine, but what’s written in the story is what matters most.
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I’ll certainly be developing this relationship as much as I can throughout the story. And I won’t be pulling any crap like waiting until the last minute to have them get together or kill one of them off on their wedding day, so it’ll be safe from that.
Incompetence? Shot in the dark here, but based on context i think you might have meant impatience.
A few times you jumped between Princess and Queen. But other than that, pretty good job.
I really enjoyed the more brother sister bond Spike and Twilight had. Their banter was definitely my favorite parts.
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The reason I put incompetence down is because Spike doesn't take his duties as Twilight's assistant seriously.
And thanks for pointing out the princess and queen switch arounds.
I'm glad you're liking the story so far and I think you'll also really like chapter two.
Stores not too bad I think pretty good you should do one Spike ends up in the Star Wars universe becomes Darth Vader's apprentice with Starkiller
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Not too big on Star Wars, so I probably won't do that. It's an idea though.
I am loving thos so much!!!!
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I'm glad to hear that.
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Celestia's such a delightful snark.
*Looking at the cover art, with no context*
Oh GOD, Spike's regenerating!
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I just know it'll be epic what comes later down the line.
This Spike is a bit on the meta side, but I'll forgive this because the fic has strong new game plus vibes.
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I’m glad you’re enjoying the story so far.
And about Spike. So you like him in this story, or do you not like him?
Male foals are colts. NOT fillies. Just saying.
This reminds me of the one Megaman fanfic I read back in 2011. Forget the name, but it had a fair amount of fourth-wall breaks at the start and end of each chapter.
Finally coming around to reread and continue this, since I forgot about this until recently. I figured this would be an exciting read to come back to since I've been trying to dodge my Danganronpa phase trying to cling to my spine like a vicious little demon. And you know what? I like this.
It's got a vibe about it, a flavor that sets it apart. I commented in chapter one that I liked the Spike/Lightspeed pairing and felt that it could go great places, I stand by that. Seeing My Little Pony's first season with new faces and a fresh perspective is some kind of change that really sticks and feels like a great way to kind of... take creative liberty. A rewrite isn't vital to the early seasons of My Little Pony, but this is more than welcome, in my humble opinion. I'll prolly be reading the rest tonight, so expect more comments that are shorter than this one!
Interesting, not bad. I like that Spike is literally just trying his best to get a boyfriend here and it's been a massive pain in the ass apparently.
I'm pretty sure the word "lesbian" isn't a slur, but I guess it can be derogatory depending on the intention with which it's being said. I also understand not wanting to put actual slurs in your fic. I wouldn't do so myself, honestly.
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Gilda was saying it in a psuedo-homphobic way to spite Rainbow.
Male fillies? As the other guy said the correct term would be Colts or you could say Male foals
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Thanks. I’ll be sure to fix it in future chapters.
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Well, she has had a few thousand years to perfect her pranks. It is common in the Fandom that she's a prankster.
I think it's safe to say the author has a gas fetish.
Not a fan of punk Applebloom to be honest. Also, Spike, what have you done?!
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What’re you referring to when it comes to Spike?
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Introducing the crusaders to each other.
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He wasn’t introducing them, he was letting them get to know each other since he felt they’d get along. There’s a difference.
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He still played a part in creating the Cutie Mark Crusaders, and has no idea what he's unleashed!
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I’m guessing you don’t like the cmc in the show.
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Oh no, I loved them. It's just that with what they get up to, I like to imagine the universe itself trembled when they first formed their group.
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Ah, I gotya.
Mind if I ask why you don't like Applebloom's new personality? I understand that change can be off-putting, but I wanna know if there's something in particular that bugs you about her.
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I just really hate bullies and punks is all.
10871334
Ah, okay.
Was a interesting read, at first.
Then, without warning, devolved into a fart fetish fic.
Not. Cool.
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Dude, there are only two farts in this chapter. A fart fetish fit would be a short story that focuses entirely on farts, and has farts in EVERY chapter. Not trying to be a dick, but half of these chapters, specifically chapters one, two, five, six, nine, and eleven, are fart free. Not a fetish story.