A Hotel Relax...A trap!?
A carriage was pulled through an open field with a few trees seen. Inside the carriage were six mares, two Unicorns, two Earth Ponies and two Pegasus. They were named Twilight Sparkle, Rarity, Applejack, Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash and sleeping in the back of the carriage was the number one ghost hunter in Ponyville, Fluttershy. Everypony was excited today. They were heading towards a brand new hotel in means of relaxation. Then the carriage made an odd sharp turn that nearly threw everyone off their seats. Luckily everyone was able to stay in and go back to chatting. Fluttershy slept through the sharp turn but when the carriage hit a bump, it works her up.
"Huh! What?!" Fluttershy asked scare before relaxing.
"About time. Glad your up Fluttershy." Rainbow said to her long time friend.
"Sorry Rainbow. This trip is a bit long don't you think?" Fluttershy told her.
"Yeah, I can have flow there, but I don't even know where this hotel is." Rainbow agrees.
Before more could be said, everypony heard a bark and watch as the Polterpup from Dark Moon Valley appear and had something in its mouth.
"Fluttershy why did you bring that ghost?" Rainbow asked rolling her eyes.
Fluttershy just smiles as she pulls the invitation out of the Polterpup mouth.
"He's just a puppy Rainbow. I couldn't leave him behind even if I try." Fluttershy explains as she looks at the invitation.
She smiles as she thought about the Hotel. It told her that she could invite her friends and family, while her friends didn't mind, Fluttershy was a little unsure about bringing her family. She loves her mother and father, but her younger brother was somepony that she was worry about messing it up. She was snap out of her thoughts when the Polterpup licks her cheek. Fluttershy smiles and gives the ghost pup a good rub on its belly.
Fluttershy sigh as she thought all about the Ghost Adventures she had. First winning a Free Mansion from a contest she never enters, only to learn that it was a trap and her friends were captured. She then met Ghost Studies and learn that Nightmare Moon was reborn as a ghost and was trying to get back at her and her friends. Luckily Fluttershy saves her friends and stops Nightmare Moon. A few months later, Fluttershy was called by Ghost Studies when another ghost problem arises. With the help of her friends, Fluttershy was able to repair the Dark Moon and stop Nightmare Moon who returns to cause trouble once again. Now it been five months since then and Fluttershy was looking forward to a chance to relax.
She was, once again, snap out of her thoughts by the Polterpup who bark and jump towards a window. Fluttershy lookout and saw the Hotel. She was joined by the rest of her friends and they all gasp at the sight of it. Soon the carriage pulls up at the hotel and everypony steps off happy and excited. Fluttershy steps out and took a breath of fresh air. She quickly ducks and turns around as the Polterpup jumps out of the carriage barking happily. Fluttershy giggles as she walks around the carriage and saw the hotel. Fluttershy was surprised to see the hotel. It looks to be 15 stories high and looks almost to be made out of gold.
Fluttershy wastes no time to enter the massive hotel and in the 1st-floor lobby. Fluttershy looked around and saw how it was decorationed to welcome the Mane Six. Fluttershy even saw pictures of her and her friends as streamers went into the air. This was a very nice and quite welcome. Fluttershy watched as the Polterpup ran over towards Pinkie Pie who was looking at some of the food that was set up.
"Oh, so many good foods. I don't know what to eat!" Pinkie said to herself.
Fluttershy giggles and flew over to Pinkie who grab a piece of cake before noticing her.
"Hey, Fluttershy!" Pinkie smiled.
Before Fluttershy could talk back, Polterpup appears on the table and ate Pinkie's cake from her hoof, surprising both mares.
"Oh, doggy." Pinkie laughs and started to look at the food again.
Fluttershy shook her head and notices Applejack, Rainbow Dash, and Rarity were trying to get Rarity things ready, but once again Rarity overpack on everything.
"You didn't need to bring this much Rarity." Applejack told her.
"Well, you can't be too prepared darling. Plus this is a hotel, I wanted to make sure I have everything I need." Rarity said.
Fluttershy flew over, hoping she could help.
"Hey, Fluttershy!" Rainbow smile, turning away from Rarity's bags causing them to fall over and hit the ground.
"RAINBOW DASH!" Rarity yelled, luckily none of her bags open and spill.
"Why don't you get us check-in, Fluttershy? We'll be ready in a moment." Rainbow told her before helping Applejack pick up the bags.
Fluttershy only nodded before turning around to see Twilight looking around the hotel lobby with a smile on her face.
"Wow, Fluttershy. This hotel is amazing! Whoever made this know how to make somepony feel welcome." Twilight smile.
"Yeah." Fluttershy agrees.
"I just wish we could have brought Princess Celestia and Princess Luna along with us," Twilight said a little sad.
Fluttershy did invite them, but they had to turn it down. Because there were many things the royal sisters had to do. Still, Fluttershy knew this was going to be a great relaxation.
"I'm going to check us in now Twilight." She said.
Twilight nodded and Fluttershy walks over to the desk and rang the bell.
"AH, are you ready to check-in?" The staff member asked.
Fluttershy nodded, before look up to see someone else. She didn't look like a pony, but she did look beautiful and was wearing sunglasses on her face.
“Guests! Welcome to The Last Resort! My name is Hellen Gravely, and I am the owner of this hotel. I am delighted that you decided to accept my invitation." She said before walking down the stairs.
"You all must be very tired. Come! Allow me to show you to your rooms. Oh, no need to worry about your luggage! Our exceptional staff will take care of it for you... Hahaha... You're our VIPs, after all! We've prepared a first-rate experience for you. All the trappings of luxury! Shall we get going?" Hellen said as she put makeup powder on her face.
The others smile and nod as Fluttershy sneeze from the leftover powder. Soon everypony step on the elevator and was brought up to the 5th floor.
"Twilight Sparkle, Fluttershy and Rarity rooms are over here. We've prepared rooms for Applejack, Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash as well! I hope you enjoy your stay! I daresay you'll remember it for the rest of your lives! Hahaha...” Hellen told them.
Everypony look excited and started to head for their room saying goodnight to each other. Fluttershy in her room and look around. She wanted to see where she could put her stuff and was shock and surprise by a few jacks in the boxes that were placed in the room.
"Wow, glad to know they were playing around. This is going to take some time to get over." Fluttershy smiled.
After haunting ghost for almost a year, small pranks no longer scare her too bad anymore. She still doesn't like big surprises, but she had gotten a bit braver since then. Fluttershy walks over to her bed and up her bags. She reaches in and pulls out her flashlight and a book.
"I never go anywhere without my flashlight." Fluttershy smiled.
Ever since dealing with ghosts, Fluttershy had brought it upon herself to always bring her flashlight wherever she goes. She soon walks over to the end of the bed and lay down, with Polterpup laying next to her.
"This is nice, a great chance to relax and....zzzzzzzzzzz" Fluttershy said open her book and fell asleep before she could read a word.
Polterpup looks surprised before falling asleep itself.
"AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!"
Fluttershy jolts up from her bed after hearing the scream. She quickly looks around and saw it was night time now, but her room change. It now no longer look inviting, as if it changes to scare it. Fluttershy reaches for her flashlight but stops when she saw that she hadn't hooves, but some call hands that Twilight told her before.
Fluttershy looks at her body and could tell it wasn't in the shape of a pony anymore. She didn't know what happen. None a less, Fluttershy got out of her bed and grab her flashlight. She had a bit of trouble standing but was able to get her balance. She turns it on and looks around. The room did change, almost to a Nightmare Night feeling, but way more scarer.
Fluttershy took a deep breath and try to fly towards the door, but she didn't hear the sounds of her wings flapping. She looks behind her and saw her wings were gone! Just like the time Discord took her wings back before he was her friend. Fluttershy turns back around and could see a mist on the floor and the room started to feel cold.
"Ghosts? But I didn't bring the Ghost Seeker 3000 or 5000." Fluttershy said worry.
The two items she was talking about were powerful vacuums that were created by her friend Ghost Studies, a pony that studies ghosts. It was because of him that Fluttershy had dealt with ghosts in the past. Still, she gathered her courage and walk over to the door. She did lose he balance a few times, but was able to keep herself from falling.
Fluttershy exit out of her room and jump in shock as the whole floor started to change. Gone was the golden invited look and now in its place, was a normal and somewhat scary hotel.
"What's going on here?" Fluttershy asked, confused.
She started to walk down the halls, noticing that Rarity things were still in the hallway and it was eerie quiet. Not sound was to be heard. Fluttershy started to get worried and decide to check on her friends. She checks Rainbow's room first, but there was no sign of her. Just a bunch of empty boxes that had food inside it. Rainbow must have gotten hungry during her stay. She left Rainbow's room and head towards Rarity's. But like Rainbow's Room, Rarity was nowhere to be seen. At least her room was cleaner.
Fluttershy was about to head over to the other rooms when she heard the elevator. Maybe her friends had gone down to other floors before coming back up? Fluttershy walks over to the elevator and was surprised to see Hellen Gravely step out. However, Fluttershy notices some she didn't see before. Hellen wasn't wearing her sunglasses showing she had full yellow eyes and had a ghostly glow around her. It didn't take Fluttershy long to notices that Hellen Gravely was a ghost!
"Ah, Fluttershy! I was just on my way to see you. How do you like your room? I hope it lives up to your experiences." Hellen laugh.
Fluttershy could feel her old Ghost Haunting instinct kick in, tell her that Hellen was not somepony she could trust now. As much as she wanted to run, she didn't know if Hellen did something to her friends.
"You have no idea how happy I was when I heard you accepted my invitation. And you brought your friends with you. I'm a little sad that the Princesses couldn't be here but she wasn't too upset about it." Hellen told her.
"She?" Fluttershy asked getting a strong feel who Hellen was talking about.
"That's right. She has been dying to see you!" Hellen laughs before towering over Fluttershy.
Hellen rises her cape as if to cover something before pulling away to show another ghost with her. A ghost Fluttershy recognize even in its new body.
"NIGHTMARE MOON!?" She screams.
It was indeed Nightmare Moon, the same Ghost that case her trouble before. She was once apart of Luna but is now a ghost due to the Elements of Harmony curing Luna of the darkness in her heart. Nightmare Moon tries to get back at the Mane Six by tricking Fluttershy into winning a free mansion but didn't expect that Fluttershy would have meet Ghost Studies and fight back. She then tries to take over Dark Moon Valley but was stop one again by not only Fluttershy but her friends and the Princesses as well.
"Hello, there my little pony. It so good to see you again." Nightmare Moon laughs.
Fluttershy felt scared and wanted to run right now, but seeing Nightmare Moon again case her freeze in place.
"You know, when I was trap by Ghost Studies, I met a new friend. He was just like me, A leader and wishes to get back at the one who traps him. And thanks to Hellen here, I was FREE!" Nightmare Moon shouted with an evil smile on her face.
Fluttershy took a step back and for a split second, thought she saw someone else standing next to her. She was caught off her thoughts when Nightmare Moon spoke again.
"Hellen here post this hotel as a trap for you and your friends. I was a little doubtful, but I was ready just in case. And it works! You came and I got my revenge!" Nightmare Moon laughs and saw Fluttershy five portraits with a girl inside each one.
Fluttershy eyes widen as she knew who they were.
"GIRLS!" Fluttershy shouted only for the portraits to disappear.
"Now, Now, Fluttershy. There no need to worry. You'll be joining them soon." Nightmare Moon grins evilly.
Fluttershy started to take a few steps back with her mind screaming "RUN!". Once Nightmare Moon pulls out another portrait, she turns and ran. Fluttershy ran as fast as she could with Nightmare Moon behind her. Fluttershy looks back and saw that Nightmare Moon still had her wings and was trying to knock her down and knock other things out of her way. Fluttershy kept running until she reaches the end of the hallway, which was a dead end. Fluttershy was trap.
Fluttershy notices a laundry chute and opens it. She notices a glow and looks back to see Nightmare Moon getting closer with the portrait in her magic. Fluttershy knew there were two options. Become a Portrait or Go down the chute. She chose the latter. Fluttershy screams as fell down the darkness.
Outside, the entire hotel change from its golden look to a more scary look as the title of this story appears.
Fluttershy's Mansion 3
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- Shazam 25 · 141k words · 74 5 · 4.8k views
Stats
Page generated in 0.122 seconds
Total duration
664 users online
1,247,188 hits today, 2,818,023 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
The first chapter is a good start in my opinion keep up the great work.
I’m liking this so far, can’t wait for the next chapter
Not bad so far! I was so sure that Nightmare Moon would have the Hellen Gravely role, it just makes more sense to me, but this is your fanfic not mine. I wonder how Luigi will make his debut in this story. :D
9993297 You know, I'm not against you writing your own version. But thanks for the comment. I try to have the next chapter up before christmas. Oh and I finally got the game! I got it as a early Christmas present from my sister, my half sister, not my step sister.
9993313
You'll have fun with it! I know I did! I don't want to write my own version, though. I like your versions best. Besides I'm already focusing on a fanfic that's taking a while anyway. :D
Nice touch turning the ponies into humans. After, I think that it would have been funny to see Luigi and E Gadd's reaction to Fluttershy's pony form. But now, I wonder, does this mean that we will see two Polterpups (Luigi's and Fluttershy's)? Boy, those two won't stop playing with each others! And I already pity the Polterkitty. Speaking of, I wonder if Fluttershy will be able to convince the Polterkitty to stop following Hellen.
Will Fluttershy be taking the Gooigi role or is Luigi getting demoted to player 2 for the umpteenth time.
Looking forward to seeing this being continued. I only hope Luigi isn't demoted to Player 2...again.
Hi, quick question. How much longer will it be for the next chapter?
10073560 I started the next chapter, I got up where Fluttershy meet Luigi and they are going to get their ghost catching devices, but every time I try to write it, I can't bring myself to do so. And I want to continue this story! Trust me this is a story I been wanted to write even before I learn of a third Luigi's Mansion.
10073706
I believe you. Take all the time you need. And I'd be more than than willing to help.
10073706
I'm with Darth Wrex take all the time you need. Good stories take time.
i look forward to what you come up with
10328604 You might be waiting for a long time. I lost interest in Luigi's Mansion. I have tried to get back into it, but it couldn't stick around like the first two.
10329131
thats ok man the 3 game was a lot harder then 1 and 2 put together take ur time and when u feel like u can wright a chapter for this then ok if not thats ur go im ok with it not every one can play and stick with the luigi's mansion games for long it took me till march to beat the game my self i have had it sense it's release day so don't sweat it man u do u then no need to rush on things that ur tired of ok?😁
I’m curious. When did you lost interest with Luigi’s Mansion 3? What were you doing when you’re not writing? When are you going to get back into the game? I mean, it’s been 9 months since you’ve published this chapter.
10386173 I can't remember when but I think I remember why. I have mentioned that got up to King Boo and yet to beat him. He's the last boss of the game and I just drop everything about the game. I couldn't think on how to keep going or even focus enough to write the next chapter. I do plan on finishing this, I just got no idea when. I have tried to get back into it but nothing works.
The truth is, I haven’t read the first chapter. I always have some kind of rule that I don’t read it unless it’s marked complete. But I don’t understand how could one lose interest in writing. So I just thought the reason is that the fanfic is time-consuming or because of how long it took to write the first chapter. By the way, how long did the chapter take? I hope I’m not pressuring you. I’m not trying to force you. I just wanna know why and how you lost interest in LM3/FM3.
10421976 It just faded. I try to work on the second chapter but I just couldn't focus on it. I have tried to get back it but I couldn't keep it in my head long enough to write. I really didn't want to stop but I just can't bring myself to go back to it.
10422261
Maybe You just need a break from writing or maybe you have too many projects going on at once. Maybe come back once you take a break and/or finished with other things
I do hope you get the inspiration again to continue. I love this series hate to see it end. But juggling with so many things to do can cloud a person's mind and make them lose interests with certain things. So take your time with finding that interest again.
10422261
Shazam 25, I have questions about Fluttershy’s Mansion 3 for you.
Hey, what happened? My last comment was from 3 weeks ago and recieved no reply. Surely, you must have some answers to my questions on my last comment.
Also, so far, you have 1200 views on your first chapter and I’m sure some or all of those people are waiting for an update.
Would you like to fill them up with what’s been going on for the past year?
I don’t want to flood the chapter with comments that belong to me, please reply my last two comments as early as you can.
10561089 I lost interest in Luigi Mansion and I haven't got back in the mood. So please don't ask when I'm going to update this again, because I don't know when.
10563220
I just saw this and I'm outraged
I loved the first one and the sequel
I'm not asking you to work on it I'm saying take your time and I WILL ALWAYS BE WAITING
and I'm offended you lost interest its one of the best games I never played the 1st or second or the 3ds remake of the 1st one but I played the arcade version and the 3rd one and I 100 beat my first save I didn't know how to get the gold poltergust which I know is real and if I was writing this id probably be done or at least halfway done so read this and at least consider it
cuz if you don't I will also I had an idea for my own Luigi's mansion story
Luigi and pinkies mansion 1-3 it's inspired by this also even though I never got to play dark moon I loved that game and I'm getting sidetracked well I'm here and always reading this site so at least reply okay
from a really big fan aka " insert my user name here "
10330279
also read this out of now where
I beat pretty easy when I played and I know there no difficulty setting a least I don't think there is
not bragging
10606860
insert elevator music just gonna wait until at least a new chapter is put on here
cuz I'm sick of waiting so
we gonna do
the easy way
the hard way
or the pinkie way
10606862
and im not joking
10606863
okay fine I'm joking
but in all of Luigi's mansion fimfictions this one I was looking forward to the most
also
I am not afraid to just put a lot of reply in here but its mainly cuz I don't wanna have to make
a super big reply so
please just
work on it / the easy way
cancel it / the hard way
or have me just endlessly talk / the pinkie way
10606869
I'm not afraid to do it it's your decision
easy
hard
or pinkie
10563220
insert
9999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999912222223333444445555566666777777888889999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999988888888877777777766666666655555555544444444433333333322222222211111111999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999
99999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999
dislikes to the comment this is replying to
10606878 DUDE! Chill out! I get it. I'm really sorry! I still have the game, and it's still fun. I have tried to get back into it, but it never stuck again like the other two. I really want to get back to this, but I just can't. The story is not dead, I just can't focus on it,
10607589
okay
but seeing the reply I just cant help but
hahahahahahahhhahaahha
hahahhahahahahahahahhahahahaha haa
sorry I'm just really passionate about Luigi's mansion 3 I really liked the pirate floor
again sorry
10607589
okay I guess I can understand I just really like the other 2 stories and I loved the 3rd Luigi's mansion if how much I loved the game was money id be the richest person in the multiverse
but sorry feel free to delete all those dislikes if you want and if you can
10609286
I'm just gonna re-read the same chapter over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over and over and OVER
10606869
so final thing
easy
hard
pinkie
choose your diffaculty level
say hello to my pink friend
i.imgflip.com/vu696.jpg
Okay, Shazam 25, I have one question for you. Don’t you have VK or thephoenixmaster? If so, why don’t you contact them to help you write the story while you, well, lost interest. If not, you can just visit the ‘Looking for Editors’ group.
hello
( evil grin intesifies )
10699904 Do not ask me when I'm going to update! I don't know when I'm coming back to this!
10705341
)
( i would put a determined face but i couldn't find one )
repeat but only if this is involved
okay
( still grinning but not evil this time
hello
I'm not gonna ask but I'm still gonna wait I will wait till 2022 if I have to
try me
hello also if I didn't tell you I really liked the previous stories
that was my sanity before now its kinda
bye
10705341
Why don’t you get some authors to help you? How did you get VK and thephoenixmaster to help you with ‘Fluttershy’s Mansion: The Dark Moon’? Maybe they can help you with this story. If that’s not possible, you can just get another author helper. Please answer so that I know you’re not ignoring me, thank you.
10705341
)
I won’t ask you if you will update, but can you inform me when you are planning to come back? (Please
Shazam, I don’t know what’s going on, but I think you’re ignoring most of this story’s comments. Why? It’s not like you don’t reply just because you don’t notice or check your notifications. Is everything alright besides the lack of interest? I’m no doctor, but I like to suspect that it’s stress, or is it? Also, I noticed that you’re not only lacking interest in writing this story, but in writing any story. What kind of things do you do on this website when you’re not writing stories? Reading? I was trying my best to help you and the only course of action to do that is comment. I’m giving you a recommendation to get a friendly and helpful author. Maybe get the writer of ‘Applebloom’s Mansion’, Lucar who commented on #6, he seems to enjoy the idea of the story. But PLEASE reply to this comment in under 3 weeks from now so that I know that you’re okay. If you don’t, I’m just gonna keep on commenting and eventually, the comment counter will reach 50 even before the next comment from “2022 WyattS” comes out. No hard feelings!
10756892 I'm fine, really. I do want to work on this. But my focus just keeps changing to something else. Plus, I haven't been on this site as much as I use to. There's no stress or anything. I really lost in interest Luigi's Mansion. I'm mostly ignoring them because I keep being ask when I'm going to update. Look, the story is not canalled, but who knows when I'll gain interest again.
10757334
I know that you want to continue, you don’t have to keep telling us. What about my recommendation? It’s the whole point of my last comment. Do you approve? Don’t you think that you need help writing the story?
Also,
What is that “something else” referring to.
10757334
Next chapter?
Keep going!