hi. this is an outlet. nobody must know.
who knew the lovely fluttershy would have one pony she kept a secret for too long.
back when twilight first arrived.
he was standing between the aspens and prickly firs of the nearby woods, she is intrigued by his presence, and he is grateful for someone to talk to.
it seemed all so perfect for both of them until that one sun lashed day.
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This is a really good start! Don't undermine your own writing. It's got me interested. XD
It seems you could use an editor, as there are quite a few punctuation and capitalization errors. I'm only a PM away if you'd like someone else to read over it!
This is a great start! Keep up the excellent work!
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thank you very much!
i do understand the weakest aspect of my work is the punctuation, and i would love an overlook of it by someone else, to help improve the punctuation and such, if its not too much of a bother of course, (i wouldn't want you to unwillingly be forced to read something).
again thank you for the kind words :)
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It's no problem! I'm happy to help in any way I can! Just shoot me a PM if you're interested.
oooh this has me very curious now. This is a good story! Keep up the awesome work!
Ooh.............this was a really cool story. The last chapter could have used some editing (once again, I'm always available if you'd like some help!) The ending was really creepy and dark. It gave me shivers.
This was a really good first story! Keep up the excellent work!