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The scariest, most intimidating and powerful creatures of the everfree have come together to discuss the one true monster of the forest. Zecora.


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Heh. This is why you want Fluttershy to run PR for this sort of thing. Hopefully she'll explain after the fact; otherwise the raid may still be on the schedule.

Delightful tale from an unusual perspective. Thank you for it.

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I'm sure that after Fluttershy stops worrying about them contracting this mystery illness, she'll explain things.

They don't know the half of it. She has entranced the great big red one. Every night or so, he is helplessly drawn into her web... oh his screams of agony:raritycry:

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Hold on a sec, if you're talking about the stallion I think you're talking about, then he's married now. To another mare.

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He's too much for one mare too handle.:rainbowwild:

The scariest, most intimidating and powerful creatures of the everfree have come together to discuss the one true monster of the forest. Zecora.

Really? Zecora seems pretty harmless to be.

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If you read the story, it explains why shes considered as such.

Alas, Ursa Major, so soon they forget thee.

(Well, being nerfed by the movie and the last couple seasons didn't help... this is not an Ursa Major. This is an Ursa Major. )

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The Ursa isn't the alpha only cause she's usually sleeping.

I guessed what was going on as soon as the weapon was described. Before that I was trying to figure out if it was going to have the same twist as the Batman Animated Series episode with the card game. And yes I realize if it actually did have that it would be ridiculous.

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Me on the other hand was hoping something like the plot twist in "The Cape and Cowl Conspiracy" from the classic cartoon.

Fun little story... they really went around the entire everfree just to vaccinate the creatures? Thats god-level dedication...

Also... how in tartarus do you inoculate in an alligator made of rocks?

Not enough love for Zecora, probably silently the coolest character in the show. Fun story, and props for giving her attention and for pairing her with the slightly less silently coolest character in the show.

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With great dedication and very, very carefully.

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...I feel insulted in place of best pony. I mean, she'd probably be more than okay with being second place in somebody's eyes, and she'd probably be thrilled to be even lower, where she'd get even less limelight... But still.

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I could never insult best pony. Even the forest creatures know that's not cool. Fluttershy is best pony, and part of why she is is that she doesn't even try to be, so we can admire how cool she is from afar. Same with Zecora, she's just doing her thing and being cool in the process.

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Amen, amen. Rainbow Dash tries to be cool, and therein lies her failure. Fluttershy doesn't, she simply is, and such is the secret to her success. She is capable of anything she puts her mind to... Perhaps too much so, given the examples of Green Isn't Your Color, Putting Your Hoof Down, and Fake It 'Til You Make It. Not her best episodes...

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Ha, beat you to a story for once.:rainbowwild:

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My comment appears to be 3 hours before yours?

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Frick, could have sworn... Oh right. I read two stories that day, the other one was the one I got first comment on. I'll get you one of these days:rainbowhuh:

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I shall await with bated breath.

That's just adorable. Especially the part where they're all "Not cool bro" about hurting Fluttershy.

Short and sweet, I like it ^^

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Well your in luck then. I've written plenty of short and sweet stories. Most of which are good! XD

That was interesting from start to end. Everycreature gets a shot to shine here. Pun intended.

Beside the manticore sat a cragadile who was curled into a tight ball in order to conserve space in the now quite packed cave. “You werent (apostrophe) followed were you?” Asked the great lizard, who glanced nervously to the cave entrance.

Several places

Shes (apostrophe) fine, but she said she felt funny for a while.” Replied the cragadile. “It was the strangest thing, she felt sick for like a day and then it was gone. What does it all mean?”

Several places

“So thats (apostrophe) what its (apostrophe) called. How do you know her name?” The hydra replied.

The cockatrice winced. “Yeesh, your (you're) lucky you didn't go blind.”

“That's just it. I just about did, but Zecora splashed something into my face and it healed pretty much right away.” Explained the feline creature. “We had fought for nearly an hour at that point and even after I got a good slash on her leg she still still healed me.” He frowned, and looked down at the ground. “Its like shes (apostrophe) trying to be the strongest thing in the Everfree and is just using....(us)….. as practice or something.”

“Screw the rules.” Replied the manticore with a snort. “I’m the alpha of this forest, and I say we raid her nest and kick her straight out of the everfree (capitalize). She's messing everything up and putting the whole forest on edge. Whose (Who's) with me?” The manticore stuck out a paw expectantly.

The manticore’s eyes went wide and he leapt towards the exit. “Its (apostrophe) her!”

The manticore couldn't even mutter a curse before he hit the ground, followed a second later by a several ton hydra. Then, all was silent for nearly a minute, until Zecora walked in wearing a bandana over her mouth, followed closely by Fluttershy who was wearing a similar peice (piece) of apparel.

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I have heard the nasty rumor that doesn't always matter

This is a nice little gem! Thoroughly enjoyed this one!

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