Equestria is at war with the Griffins and the Ruby Changeling Hive. Even with Chrysalis as an ally, the ponies are losing. They ask for help from a species who knew war for hundreds of years, but they weren't the first to find them.
Alright. Go through and edit. Right now you have a lot of grammar, spelling, and syntax mistakes. However, for all that, it has a good flow and I have definitely read worse. Try a program called grammarly, it helped me out for quite a bit. It would be even better if you invested in a book on grammar and writing but, I can understand a lack of finances on that front. Besides that is what YouTube is for.
9941555 Ya, I'm not one to defend my work. As long as people don't just complain about everything and expect me to fix it without knowing how I'm supposed to.
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Alright. Go through and edit. Right now you have a lot of grammar, spelling, and syntax mistakes. However, for all that, it has a good flow and I have definitely read worse. Try a program called grammarly, it helped me out for quite a bit. It would be even better if you invested in a book on grammar and writing but, I can understand a lack of finances on that front. Besides that is what YouTube is for.
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No problem. Asking for criticism should be rewarded not dismissed. I am just sorry that others here don't feel the same.
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Ya, I'm not one to defend my work. As long as people don't just complain about everything and expect me to fix it without knowing how I'm supposed to.