First Scene written by Blaflaix
Search and Rescue
Scootaloo wasn't having fun anymore.
The plan had started out the same way all their plans did, with high hopes.
Venture into the forest.
Be awesome.
Gain cutie marks.
Profit!
Once they got into the forest, it was more daunting.
They could look for years, go right past her, and never notice.
Actually finding the lost filly had been doused their spirits thoroughly.
Seeing her limp and broken on the rocks like a busted doll... Scootaloo had been very relieved when she woke up.
Seeing her lurching around and, well, delusional, had removed a lot of that relief and shifted right back to worried.
All in all, it had driven home that the "rescue" in "search and rescue" implied that someone was having an absolutely horrible day.
Scootaloo didn't want a search and rescue cutie mark anymore.
She didn't want her special talent to center around other ponies misfortune.
The journey back was grueling.
Scootaloo wished they had gone with the original idea, she could've run back at top speed and for once she would've been delighted to have the adults take over.
Instead they ended trying to both navigate the way back, and also watch her stumble over every root.
Really, who'd decided to put so many roots in a forest?
None of them were quite strong enough to catch her, but they couldn't let her just fall...
The absolute worst part were the whimpers, Scootaloo didn't think she even realized she was making them, but every one made them all cringe, like they were the ones in pain.
They were worn to an absolute frazzle by the time they made it out of the forest.
It was a huge relief to see the adults rushing off with her to the hospital.
Like a huge burden, much heavier than a filly, had be taken off their backs.
It was only then that Scootaloo realized they had succeeded.
There was somebody in trouble, they had gone out to help, and they had.
As miserable as it was that she needed help, it was much better that they had been there to help than not.
She didn't even care if they got grounded.
Maybe being search and rescue wasn't so bad?
Second Scene, written by Chancellor
Imitation
"It doesn't surprise me she's imitating us," Tenderheart said quietly as she munched on her daffodil sandwich. Both she and Redheart were in the staff room eating lunch.
"How so?" Redheart asked, curious.
"We're probably the only ponies who've been kind to her, so she's probably trying to... mimic us, in order to fit in."
Her colleague fell silent at that, slowly chewing at her food.
It broke the nurse's heart to know that there were creatures, or maybe even ponies, cruel enough to take advantage of such a young filly. It repulsed, to think they went against the nature of Harmony like that.
If she had her way, those responsible would be locked up in Tartarus with the key thrown out, but that was a matter for the Royal Guard. All Ponyville Clinic could do currently was make sure Green felt at ease and comfortable until proper, true healing could begin.
"Well, let's get done with it," Redheart said, finished with her meal. It was time to do her rounds.
Nice! Like to see that you're updating. A lot of the stories that I've seen that focus on this topic don't seem to last.
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It's easy to start this kind of story without having any clear idea of where you're going. I won't pretend that I have it all planned out, but I have enough plot planned out for the first 100k words or so. If I achieve that then I'll either tie things up there and lead into a sequel, or continue, depending on how things are going.
Personally I think the third step of any good plan I German Suplex.
I'm really loving this story so far, I love how the interactions are just a gordian knot of misunderstandings and Adult Fears. Hope that this ride continues on into the future.
Also, also, could we maybe, perhaps, if you want to, have an interlude with different POVs? I absolutely adore when in fics that have misunderstandings we get to see what the other side thought was happening.
Well, there shouldn't be any physical signs of physical or sexual abuse. But, I doubt that mere facts will change their minds.
But, hey, some kids are just prone to injury. It's been 50+ years but I still remember my second youngest sister broke some ribs falling out of a tree, dislocated her arm at the elbow falling while trying to climb up the side of a porch, got her head ripped open + concussion by being kicked by a horse, & ripped her head open on the bedframe while falling off a bed that she was jumping on. + A good many others that ICR.
These days, my parents would probably be reported to CPS for child abuse, but I swear it was just my sister being a klutz, she did it all by herself.
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Careful, though. Some 'injury-prone' children get that way by just not caring about their safety anymore, and the reasons behind that are generally pretty horrifying.
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Maybe so, but my sister just had the winning combo
Damn fool + bad luck.
For instance, she got kicked by the horse because she climbed over a fence to pet it, then rushed it from behind. That will do it.
IMO, she fell off the bed because her & a friend were jumping on it. If you've ever been on a trampoline, you know that you've got to alternate. If you land together, you won't bounce. But, she's the one that cut her head open
I figure Luna will have likely seen Green as a human in their dreams by now and would want to confirm her suspicions with Twilight.
Great job so far, I'm really enjoying this story! Also looking forward to where these misunderstandings take us.
This is another story that I have been following closely. Very few stories like these normally catch my eye. Well done on the HiE progress so far!
To be completely honest I’m kinda wishing they never find out her true past and there’s just a massive misunderstanding this entire time.
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Nah, your lungs have 'lung sounds', not 'lungs sounds'.
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By us
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Nah, it’s imitating, not intimidating. The author’s saying she’s supposedly trying to be like them, not that she’s scared by them, so they way it’s written is correct.
Maybe this experiences help the chaos fillys to stay out of trouble... Than again... They saved her! They are worth every trouble they cause.
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Yeah, true heroes aren't always so glamorous...
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Actually I believe Luna saw her as a filly in the dream realm. It can be argued that she's (Green) taking her physical form. I don't think souls have a physical form.
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And not all hero stories, have happy endings.
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The only difference between a hero and a fool, is that the hero succeeds.
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Sadly, yes.
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You might like the story "Columbus Was A Dope" (Heinlein)
Two bar patrons and a bartender debate building a generation ship to Proxima Centauri. One favors space exploration as benefiting society like Christopher Columbus's discovery of the New World; the other insists that "Columbus was a dope" and should have stayed home. At the end of the story, it is revealed that the bar is on the Moon.
https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/19239416-columbus-was-a-dope
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Sometimes when the right set of circumstances falls into place, the fool can succeed, it's phenomenon called failing your way to the top.
it seems so cold and detached. yet i still feels something.
pretty unique story tone going on here.
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Hopefully, that will never be the same as 'failing up the corporate ladder' [nervous laugh].
CMC occational thex are true heros, if they don't end destroying something by accident or ending up in Treesap...
Nice worldbuilding, I like it.