Derpy Whooves is a misunderstood pony, to many she seems silly and messes things up, but she's a real nice and friendly person. After a problem in her past involving her ex-boyfriend, she was blessed with the muffin only she can have.
Even though she has a boyfriend now, things in her life are beginning to change for the worse. She's having strange dreams, she believes her boyfriend is cheating on her, and thinks her good friend Octavia is to blame. Will this mean the end of Derpy and Octavia's friendship?Will something happen to her muffin? Will Spike and Sweetie Belle's great discovery end Derpy's life? Find out!
(Story coincides with Sweet Burning Desire)
Chapters (2)
Here's that story I promised, enjoy
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I'm liking it so far! Only one thing, the sentence that was in (parentheses) kind of interrupted the flow of the chapter. I believe it would flow better if you found a way to incorporate Berry's "special talent" (which was pretty funny, I might add) into the dialogue or narration. Liked and favourited
Keep on keepin' on
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Now I follow you.
1088836 Hi there, can you please explain to me when you said that Cheerilee and Scoots live together ?
Sorry I couldn't find a better way to incorporate it
but I'll try not to use them as much. To Riz thank you very much
, I appreciate the follow and hope you will continue to follow the story as it progresses. Also I can't tell you, you'll have to read the next chapter of this book to fully understand, that's why I put it there lol
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You sir have something special here I think you deserve a chance and thank you for
Wanting to please the reader and not just wanting to hit the feature page
Have All the spikes
1097097 Thank you sir for making my morning! I'm glad you and many others are enjoying the story and hope you'll stick around for more
. Oh and thanks for the spikes, I'll be sure to love them and tresure them forever lol
I present to you all, Chapter 2! I also have a little sneak peek for everyone to read for my next book currently in the making!
sorry about the dislike i accidentally clicked on it
1128862 Lol really? Don't worry its ok that you did, I'm glad you like the story though!
They need to get rid of that button though, people spam it too much 
Step bros love lizard lick I lolcopterd at the sentiment
I really enjoyed how you brought the characters to life.
Other than a few grammar mistakes it's a great story. I look forward to more.
1130121> "Pay up, or get licked!" lol I'm in love with that show, I knew some one would get it! Step brothers indeed, we have way too much in common lol
1144621 Thank you so much for the compliment, as I say a million times it really lightens my mood, and I'm glad you're looking forward to more! I'll try to get one out by Sunday, because I got to put out Sweet Burning Desire's new chapter tomorrow. I'm really glad you enjoy the story, and will be sure to please and fix the errors as best as I can
Chapter 3 will be up by times Saturday
DERPY!!!!!!! My favorite mare and pony of all time, you have her in your story then you have my attettion, bottom line...I'm liking what I'm seeing so far, I always hated Diamond Teria and her father, shit I'll be watiting for more of this and SpikeBelle. My second favorite pairing, yes!!!
Hmmm...this seems really...rushed. Not enough detail and they keep laughing and smiling I mean granted, it's Equestria but still....there can be some more...darker themes as well. Awesome, Trixie's my favortie villian and I think you mean story, not book...will keep reading but add more detail to tihs please.
1242691 Oh I know how you feel honestly
. I've wanted to make it darker, but not a lot of people like those kind of stories (cupcakes....). I thank you for liking and reading my story, and I'll try to slow things down a notch and add a darker tone to things
1244139 Never a problem and I feel as those I'm the only one that has never seen Cupcakes....I am hoping for more which reminds me that I got to read your other story, expect a comment soon, also hoping you may like my own stoires if your able to look them over and review.
1244201 Expect two comments from me then lol, I'll read them now