when you really are a friend and you're friends asks a favor that may put you in a ackward postion what would you do be a friend and deal with it or turn down the offer
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Using the wrong "your" in your description?
...To the moon
1102727 thanks i'll correct it
1102733
No problem my good chum
Can't tell you how long I've waited before saying "to the moon" with this profile-pic
1102745
Actually...I haven't read it yet
I should get to it now
1102748
oh wow just made my f-ing day man
...Well then. I'd like to be the first to say you are missing so many things that make a story readable I'm surprised I was able to skim through it. First off! Grammar. Grammar is important. Commas are very much your friends. Another is that you keep forgetting to ponify such words like "boy" and "facepalm" it's important because it draws the reader into the story. Sudden words like that shunt a reader out of a MLP fanfic due to human terminology. Your spelling is off, it's like you clicked on the first word Autocorrect gave you and didn't bother to read over it afterwards. You space everything out really weird. Such as this prime example.
"...half closed eyes looked out tward the everfree forest on a nice spring afternoon.This is awsome." First, it's awesome. Second there is supposed to be a space between the period and "This". It's just so hard to read. You gotta go over and correct these mistakes. Or even better idea is to find an editor. A second pair of eyes will help you write and make sure to keep those pesky grammar problems away. And you're missing quotation marks on some of your dialogue...Honestly I could go on all night. Just read over it. Correct your mistakes, and make sure this is an original piece.
Your local pyromaniac,
-DjPyro3
yes i do need to work on my 1102765 spelling and punctuation also there humanized ponies so there is no need for pony dialogue
I like the story so far cant wait to see were it goes from here
1119016 thanks it will go in a very funny direction
1119016 also if you could tell your fans and any followers you have will be greatly appreciated
You spelled awkward wrong in the description.
1119841 Of course not cause then i'll have to use those other colts like snips or snails and i hate them both so much besides i think apple bloom swings the other way
1120807 thanks will correct it
1122422 . I know that, but who said you had good hooker up with a male pony? Granted, I don't think she would never go out with silver spoon!
1122940we'll see may be in chapter 3 i'll include her
1123248 thanks for the fav