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Sweetie Belle has found a new friend. A star pony who claims to have fallen from a comet and who needs help with a very secret mission. Normally Sweetie Belle would tell an adult, but you're allowed to trust star ponies, aren't you?

The star pony isn't the only thing that fell from the sky. Somewhere in Equestria is a box. A very special, very dangerous box. A box which could end the world if it ends up in the wrong hooves.

A box which Scootaloo has just found...

First Published
13th Aug 2012
Last Modified
13th Aug 2012

Comments ( 56 )

#1 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 6d ago · · ·

My bad.

#2 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 6d ago · · ·

Feature box, ahoy!

#3 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 6d ago · · ·

I'l definitely look into this later.

#4 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 6d ago · · ·

Anypony else see the picture and immediately thought of a Quarian from Mass Effect?


This sounds neat. I'll have to check it out! :>

#5 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 6d ago · · ·

I read the description and though of a cross between Dr. Who and a pedophile.

#6 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 6d ago · · ·
#7 · Chapter 1 · 87w, 6d ago · · ·
#8 · Chapter 1 · 87w, 6d ago · · ·

Woah. I like this so far!

(And in my head, Navigator talks with Tali's voice.)

#9 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

Okay. I so didn't expect this!

#10 · Chapter 1 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1080631

That damnable cover art. Thanks to that, I realized that quarian helmets are perfectly shaped for pony heads. I am now terribly conflicted about my Shepard's love life.

Not that this is likely a problem for most bronies.

#11 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

>Flight of the Navigator

:raritystarry:

>plot is about a doomsday device

:raritydespair:

#12 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1080886

There's a subtle difference between a doomsday device, and something that can end the world.

:scootangel:

#13 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

I haven't read this yet, but my brain was all like:

Oh, boy! A Quarian!

But then I was like:

A destructive box? HELLO TARDIS!!!

LET'S READ AND FIND OUT!!!

#14 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

Wow, when Twilight Sparkle isn't being transfigured into a rock, steam locomotive, prairie dog, etc., you tell a great story. Rarely have I been more amused than your very dry description of Sweetie "cleverly" burying her sister's hats in the garden. :unsuresweetie: You've got characterization nailed.

"Whatever it was, it was definitely not Scootaloo." ... ... If you say so! :scootangel:

#15 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

Hah!  Interesting.  I'd like to see where this goes, please write more  :twilightsmile:

#16 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

I read 'Flight of the Navigator' and instantly think of that one movie....

Brings back good memories...

#17 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

Wow! So awesome!:rainbowkiss: I can't wait for the next chapter!:pinkiehappy:

#18 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

The plot fucking thickens like shit man. PLEASE ADD MOAR

#19 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

So I just met you

And this might sound crazy

But you need to trust me

I'm the Cake's baby

#20 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

So... is the navigator Applebloom? :applecry:

#21 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1080420

Aaa you jinxed it! :applecry:

#22 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

Brilliant as always :scootangel:

#23 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

>>1080479 I thought more "are you my mummy?"

#24 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 5d ago · · ·

That's how I like to do introductions.

"My name is kingtiger666, and I'm from the future."

That might be why all my friends are completely insane.

#25 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 4d ago · · ·

What a tweest! :twistnerd:

Seriously dude, please don't leave us hanging. Who's Navigator? And what's with the box? We must know!

#26 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 4d ago · · ·

Very interesting so far, can't wait for the rest.

#27 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 4d ago · · ·

Is this a reference to the 1986 Film by chance? Nostalgia aside I can't help but think of the space ponies as Quarians now.  

#28 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1087500

What a badass picture! Is that a Mass Effect thing (I've never played it :( )

There are a few nods towards that film yes (I loved it as a kid!) though more nods towards the similar film Starman if I'm honest. I like to have a wide range of homages. It'll make sense as the story progresses, I don't want to spoil anything!

#29 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1087516 Yes that's a Mass Effect thing. I'm glad that you're paying homage to awesome 80's sci-fi movies. Keep up the good work. :raritywink:

#30 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1087543

One day I will find a way to pay homage to Masters of the Universe (the film) and then my life will be complete.

#31 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 4d ago · · ·

I'm very eagerly waiting for more of this mysterious adventure.

#32 · Chapter 2 · 87w, 2d ago · · ·

Hrrm. Time travel is involved, so the Navigator is probably an older version of an earth pony Sweetie knows... I'm guessing Diamond Tiara, purely for the lolz.

#33 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 4d ago · · ·

Congrats on the EQD feature :twilightsmile:

Added to the read later pile

#34 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 4d ago · · ·

How did the suit land on the cloud with the magic reserves depleted?  Or is that a passive enchantment?

#35 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1087516

I loved Flight of the Navigator when I was younger. Glad to see people still remember it :pinkiehappy:

Also, a question:

“In that case I’ll just have to practise my...

What's the difference between 'practice' and 'practise'? Seems like one of those weird British-English idioms.

Also, let me guess: Sweetie Belle saw her future self or someone she knows in future form.

#36 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 4d ago · · ·

Ok here is my guess; hope I'm not spoiling anything, but if I'm right...

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I'm saying the Navigator is Scootaloo from the future... She walked on clouds... but can't fly. And she may be here to change the past to grant her younger self's wish. Which could be bad since it will change the future.

:scootangel: Don't post in the comments if I'm right cuz I don't want to ruin it for anyone(feel free to message me if I am though lol).

#37 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1132233

How indeed :rainbowderp:

#38 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 4d ago · · ·

Ah.  Well, I'm looking forward to future chapters.

#39 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1085177

Dangit, me too!


"No Jaime,it's me! Your sister!"

"Are you my mummy?"

All my friend freaked out when they saw that episode:rainbowlaugh:

#40 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 4d ago · · ·

Oh dear Celestia... it's a puzzle box...

I KNEW I should have let Scoots die in the Rainbow Factory!  Now she's going to open to doorway to hell!  Stupid tiny-winged pegasus!  This is why in the olden days ponies believed in eugenics!  Imperfect ponies ALWAYS bring about the end of the world!

*waits for Pinhead Pony to show up*

:trollestia:

#41 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 3d ago · · ·

I'm loving the story so far your writing is top notch and the story has just enough intrigue to keep me reading.

liked and waiting for updates!

#42 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 3d ago · · ·

More, please.

#43 · Chapter 1 · 86w, 3d ago · · ·

> several amateur astrologers

I'm pretty sure you mean astronomers :twilightsmile:

#44 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 3d ago · · ·

>>1142615

Shhhh

Cough cough cough

*Mashes delete key*

#45 · Chapter 2 · 86w, 2d ago · · ·
Ezn
#46 · Chapter 2 · 85w, 3d ago · · ·

Intriguing. Faved.

>>1132282

In British/Commonwealth English, "practice" is the noun ("I'm going to go to accordion practice") and "practise" is the verb ("I'm going to go practise playing the accordion").

#47 · Chapter 2 · 85w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1188054

You have my eternal gratitude... for a few hours. xD

#48 · Chapter 1 · 84w, 6d ago · · ·

Well, I almost thought that Navigator might be Future-Sweetie-Belle, especially since Sweetie never told Navigator her name. Maybe someone else she knows?

(Well, she introduced herself but Navigator was, I think, sleeping at the time.)

Still. Reading on! Seems great so far; you really captures a typical CMC escapade.

#49 · Chapter 2 · 84w, 6d ago · · ·

“Yeah!” Scootaloo called back. “I just need to work on missing the ground!”

Oh, Hitchhiker's Guide <3

Oh hey, unicorn and pegasus, and the other was earth pony, maybe as I said on last one earth pony is Apple Bloom and these two are the other DANGIT SHE SAID HER NAME

But, future pony suspicion confirmed! 1/2 ain't bad. Eagerly awating more!

#50 · Chapter 2 · 84w, 1d ago · · ·

... so they're from the future. :pinkiegasp:

Kinda had a suspicion in that direction...... aaaand apparently I'm not the only one who thought it'd be "Crusaders from the future, yay!" :derpytongue2:

...though the cake twins make sense too. Timetravel is an established concept in the MLP:FiM universe after all, I'm surprised I haven't stumbled into any other works with Pumpkin Cake using time magic or anything of the likes prior. Though the "Navigator" has to be somepony Sweetie Belle knows, or at least teh color scheme / mane must be obvious enough to deduct who the parents are - her reaction when she lifted the helmet gave that away.

If it's Applebloom, that'd go well with the "not telling a lie, just not telling the truth"-thing, and why she didn't want to tell Sweetie Belle about "how it's like, where she came from", or even giving out a more convincing false name. She didn't want to lie either. It'd also explain how she knew Sweetie Belle's name, despite being unconscious at the time when Sweetie Belle first introduced herself. Nice one there, didn't even notice that at the time. :scootangel:

If it *is* Applebloom, the immediate question arises - what about the other crusaders?

Yeah, obviously the ship's crewmembers were chosen for their qualifications, and not based on them being a group of childhood-friends or not. But still, curiosity and all. :raritywink:

Also, on the matter of their time-traveling ship - it seems somewhat unlikely for Equestrian technology to have reached that point within just a single generation, just like that. Also, the "Navigator" stated that the box contains "everything" - and Pound Cake stated that they came with a warning.

I'm taking it that means it contains information on how to deal with whatever is coming, and possibly, the very key to developing the level of technology the crew of the time-vessel possess. It might be a closed time-loop, as opposed to an attempt to alter the past - or an attempt to fulfill a closed timeloop gone wrong. (Ship crashing, crewmember jumping overboard, essential equipment lost... yeah, everything's going exactly according to plan) :trollestia:

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